Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by using correct grammar and avoiding incomplete sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain your reason with specific details. For example, say 'I am not a big fan of chocolate because I have a sensitive stomach, so I try to avoid eating it.'

예시: I am not a big fan of chocolate because I have a sensitive stomach. Sometimes I like it, but mostly I avoid it to prevent discomfort.

제안: Your answer is quite good but can be improved by using linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid repeating words like 'it is'. For example, say 'I usually eat chocolate once or twice a week because of my sensitive stomach. Moreover, I prefer dark chocolate since it is healthier and less sweet than milk chocolate.'

예시: I usually eat chocolate once or twice a week because I have a sensitive stomach. Moreover, I prefer dark chocolate since it is healthier and less sweet than milk chocolate.

제안: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to give a clear topic sentence and explain with specific details using correct grammar. For example, say 'Yes, I ate a lot of chocolate when I was a kid because my family loved it. I think eating too much chocolate caused my sensitive stomach now.'

예시: Yes, I ate a lot of chocolate when I was a kid because my family loved it. I think eating too much chocolate caused my sensitive stomach now.

제안: Make your answer more coherent by using linking words and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence and support it with examples. For example, say 'Chocolate is popular worldwide because people enjoy sweet foods. Also, there are many types of chocolate, such as dark and milk chocolate, which appeal to different tastes.'

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because people enjoy sweet foods. Also, there are many types of chocolate, such as dark and milk chocolate, which appeal to different tastes.

제안: Avoid repeating previous answers and improve sentence structure. Give a clear topic sentence and explain with specific reasons using linking words. For example, say 'My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because it is less sweet, healthier, and better for my sensitive stomach.'

예시: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because it is less sweet, healthier, and better for my sensitive stomach.

제안: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to give a clear opinion and support it with reasons. For example, say 'Yes, chocolate is a good gift because many people like it. However, if someone does not like chocolate, they can give it to their family members instead.'

예시: Yes, chocolate is a good gift because many people like it. However, if someone does not like chocolate, they can give it to their family members instead.

× I'm not really fans of chocolate.

✓ I'm not really a fan of chocolate.

The word 'fans' is plural, but the subject 'I' is singular. The correct singular form is 'a fan' to match the singular subject.

× I will say sometime I like it and sometimes I don't like it because I have. Sensitive about chocolate, so yeah. So I try to avoid eating and.

✓ I will say sometimes I like it and sometimes I don't because I am sensitive to chocolate, so yeah. So I try to avoid eating it.

The sentence is fragmented and incomplete. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'I have. Sensitive about chocolate' is incorrect; it should be 'I am sensitive to chocolate'. The phrase 'avoid eating and' is incomplete and should specify what is avoided, here 'eating it'.

× Because I have a sensitive stomach, I usually eat chocolate only once or twice a week.

✓ Because I have a sensitive stomach, I usually eat chocolate only once or twice a week.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× I prefer dark chocolate because it's it is healthier and less sweet than milk chocolate.

✓ I prefer dark chocolate because it is healthier and less sweet than milk chocolate.

The phrase 'it's it is' is redundant. Use either 'it's' or 'it is' but not both together.

× Yes, I did. I actually eat a lot when I was a kid because sometimes so we love chocolate.

✓ Yes, I did. I actually ate a lot when I was a kid because we loved chocolate.

The verb 'eat' should be in past tense 'ate' to match the past time frame. 'Sometimes so we love chocolate' is unclear and should be simplified to 'because we loved chocolate'.

× So I think because of this I have something that's stomach because I eat a lot and a lot, a lot, a lot, a lot, a lot of chocolate in my childhood.

✓ So I think because of this I have some stomach problems because I ate a lot of chocolate in my childhood.

The sentence is unclear and repetitive. 'Something that's stomach' is incorrect; it should be 'some stomach problems'. Repetition of 'a lot' is unnecessary and should be simplified.

× I think people like a sweet thing, so they they eat chocolate a lot and some because it's have some type that maybe people love, like dark chocolate, milk chocolate.

✓ I think people like sweet things, so they eat chocolate a lot, and some types because there are some types that people may love, like dark chocolate and milk chocolate.

'A sweet thing' should be plural 'sweet things' to generalize. 'It's have' is incorrect; it should be 'there are'. Also, 'some type' should be 'some types' to match plural context.

× I mentioned that before. It's dark chocolate because it's less sweet and because of my sensitive of stomach and because it's healthier, more so. Yeah, their chocolate is my favorite.

✓ I mentioned that before. It's dark chocolate because it's less sweet and because of my sensitive stomach and because it's healthier. So yeah, dark chocolate is my favorite.

'My sensitive of stomach' is incorrect; it should be 'my sensitive stomach'. 'Their chocolate' is incorrect pronoun usage; it should be 'dark chocolate'.

× Yes, I think it's good to use chocolate as a gift to a house.

✓ Yes, I think it's good to use chocolate as a gift for a house.

The preposition 'to' is incorrect here; 'gift for' is the correct collocation when giving gifts intended for someone or something.

× I think I hope people love chocolate However, if they don't, maybe they give their parents or some of their family chocolate give you the feeling of.

✓ I think people love chocolate. However, if they don't, maybe they can give chocolate to their parents or some family members. Giving chocolate gives you a good feeling.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It needs to be split into clear sentences with proper structure and correct verb forms.