Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear but contains grammatical errors and lacks linking words. Try to use correct sentence structures and connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I love eating chocolate because it tastes delicious, and when I eat it, my body releases endorphins, which make me feel happy and content.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and has grammatical mistakes. Use linking words to connect ideas and clarify your meaning.

예시: In the last month, I have tried to avoid sweets, especially chocolate, so I rarely eat it. Usually, I have a small piece of chocolate in the morning when I drink coffee.

제안: Your answer has grammatical errors and lacks coherence. Use correct verb forms and linking words to improve clarity.

예시: When I was a kid, I really liked chocolate, but my family was poor, so we rarely had it. If a neighbor gave me chocolate as a present, it was great, but usually, we had candies instead.

제안: Your answer is good but could be improved by using linking words and more precise vocabulary.

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and helps people feel relaxed and happy.

제안: Your answer is understandable but could be more fluent and natural by using linking words and better vocabulary.

예시: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because it tastes rich. I also enjoy chocolate with coconut filling, where the chocolate covers the coconut inside, which tastes great.

제안: Your answer is repetitive and lacks coherence. Use linking words and organize your ideas clearly.

예시: It depends on the recipient. For children, chocolate is usually a good gift, but you should consider allergies. For adults, it depends on their preferences, but personally, I like receiving chocolate as a gift.

× I do love chocolate because it's tasty and when I eat chocolate my body really endorphins and I feel happy and content.

✓ I do love chocolate because it's tasty and when I eat chocolate my body really releases endorphins and I feel happy and content.

The original sentence is missing a verb after 'my body really'. The verb 'releases' is needed to correctly express the action. 'Endorphins' is a noun, so it requires a verb to indicate what the body does with them. Adding 'releases' corrects the sentence structure and meaning.

× In last month I came to my tray, so I tried to avoid any kind of sweets, especially chocolate.

✓ Last month I went on a diet, so I tried to avoid any kind of sweets, especially chocolate.

The phrase 'came to my tray' is incorrect and unclear. The intended meaning is likely 'went on a diet'. Also, 'In last month' should be 'Last month' for correct time expression. Using the past tense verb 'went' fits the past time frame.

× So I don't eat often.

✓ So I don't eat it often.

The sentence lacks the object 'it' referring to chocolate, which is necessary for clarity. Adding 'it' makes the sentence grammatically correct and clear.

× I eat rarely, especially in the morning.

✓ I rarely eat it, especially in the morning.

The adverb 'rarely' should be placed before the verb 'eat' for correct adverb placement. Also, adding 'it' clarifies the object of the verb.

× When I were a kid I really liked to eat chocolate, but I was from poor family and we, uh, nearly never had chocolate.

✓ When I was a kid I really liked to eat chocolate, but I was from a poor family and we nearly never had chocolate.

The subject 'I' requires the singular past tense verb 'was' instead of 'were'. Also, 'poor family' needs the article 'a' before it. These corrections fix subject-verb agreement and article usage.

× If neighbor would give me as a present that was great, but we had candies, no chocolates.

✓ If a neighbor gave me chocolate as a present, that was great, but we had candies, no chocolates.

The conditional sentence requires the past simple 'gave' instead of 'would give' in the 'if' clause. Also, 'neighbor' needs the article 'a'. Adding 'chocolate' clarifies the object.

× I think chocolate is popular around the world because it's tasty, delicious and make people feel relaxed.

✓ I think chocolate is popular around the world because it's tasty, delicious and makes people feel relaxed.

The verb 'make' should be in third person singular form 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'chocolate'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue.

× I like standard black chocolate tastes, it's great.

✓ I like the taste of standard black chocolate; it's great.

The phrase 'standard black chocolate tastes' is awkward. Correcting it to 'the taste of standard black chocolate' improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× And I also like coconut and chocolate together.

✓ I also like coconut and chocolate together.

Starting a sentence with 'And' is generally informal and can be avoided for better sentence structure.

× It's a chocolate outside and coconut in the middle so it's great.

✓ It has chocolate on the outside and coconut in the middle, so it's great.

The original sentence lacks proper prepositions and structure. Using 'has' and 'on the outside' clarifies the description.

× It depends on who is the receiver.

✓ It depends on who the receiver is.

The clause 'who is the receiver' should be reordered to 'who the receiver is' for correct indirect question structure.

× If you have to give it to a kid I think it's normal.

✓ If you have to give it to a kid, I think it's normal.

A comma is needed after the conditional clause for correct sentence punctuation.

× But you have to keep in mind that maybe child is allergic to chocolate if you give it to a grown up person.

✓ But you have to keep in mind that maybe the child is allergic to chocolate if you give it to a grown-up person.

The noun 'child' requires the definite article 'the'. Also, 'grown up' should be hyphenated as 'grown-up' when used as an adjective.

× I don't know. It's up to person.

✓ I don't know. It's up to the person.

The noun 'person' requires the definite article 'the' to be grammatically correct.