Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and a bit contradictory. Try to express your opinion clearly and avoid redundancy. Use a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons. For example, explain why you like chocolate and why you sometimes avoid it, using linking words to connect your ideas.

예시: I enjoy eating chocolate because it makes me feel happy and relaxed. However, I try not to eat it too often since it is unhealthy and can affect my diet negatively.

제안: Your answer is relevant but could be clearer and more natural. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid awkward phrasing. Also, provide a direct answer first, then explain your reason.

예시: I usually eat chocolate about twice a month because, as I mentioned earlier, it can negatively affect my diet, so I try to limit my consumption.

제안: Your answer is understandable but has some grammatical errors and lacks coherence. Use complete sentences and linking words to make your answer more natural and effective. Also, avoid repetition and be more specific.

예시: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a kid because it boosted my mood and tasted sweet. For me, chocolate was a symbol of happiness and comfort.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to organize your ideas logically and use linking words. Also, explain the reasons more clearly and avoid vague phrases like 'some resource in the ingredients.'

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it contains ingredients that can improve mood, such as certain chemicals that stimulate happiness. Additionally, dark chocolate is considered healthy by many people, which adds to its popularity.

제안: Your answer has some contradictions and unclear expressions. Be consistent and clear in your description. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons why you like that flavor.

예시: My favorite flavor is caramel chocolate because it combines a soft texture with a balanced sweetness. This unique combination makes it more delicious and enjoyable.

제안: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear but could be more concise and natural. Use linking words to improve coherence and avoid repetitive phrases. Also, provide a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details.

예시: Yes, I think chocolate makes a great gift because it symbolizes love and happiness. For example, couples often exchange chocolates on Valentine's Day to express their feelings.

× I love eating chocolate like 50% like and dislike.

✓ I love eating chocolate, like 50% like it and 50% dislike it.

The original sentence lacks clarity and proper pluralization. '50% like and dislike' is ambiguous; specifying '50% like it and 50% dislike it' clarifies the meaning and correctly uses singular verbs with the pronoun 'it' referring to chocolate.

× The reason I like it is just because it stimulates a sense of happiness.

✓ The reason I like it is that it stimulates a sense of happiness.

Using 'just because' is informal and redundant here. 'Is that' is the correct conjunction to introduce a reason clause in formal English.

× But also the reason that I dislike it is it is not really healthy so I don't like a healthy way.

✓ But also, the reason I dislike it is that it is not really healthy, so I don't like it for health reasons.

The sentence is awkward and unclear. Adding commas and rephrasing improves clarity. 'I don't like a healthy way' is incorrect; it should express dislike due to health concerns.

× For now I guess it's like twice a month because as I mentioned it is negatively in fact the diet, so I try to avoid eating chocolate often.

✓ For now, I guess it's about twice a month because, as I mentioned, it negatively affects the diet, so I try to avoid eating chocolate often.

The phrase 'negatively in fact the diet' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'affects' to show impact on diet. Adding commas improves sentence flow.

× Yeah, obviously, because chocolate boost my mood and it tastes so sweet and also chocolate just it's a symbol of happiness and.

✓ Yeah, obviously, because chocolate boosts my mood and it tastes so sweet, and also chocolate is a symbol of happiness.

'Chocolate' is singular, so the verb should be 'boosts' not 'boost'. The phrase 'chocolate just it's a symbol' is incorrect; it should be 'chocolate is a symbol'. The sentence is also incomplete and needs proper punctuation.

× It just really good.

✓ It is just really good.

The sentence lacks a verb. Adding 'is' completes the sentence and makes it grammatically correct.

× Well, firstly, according to the research, chocolate did boost one's moot because it contains some resource in the ingredients and the second, like the dark chocolate, the dark chocolate is a good food that is too.

✓ Well, firstly, according to research, chocolate does boost one's mood because it contains some beneficial ingredients, and secondly, dark chocolate is also a good food.

'Did boost' is unnecessary; 'does boost' fits better for general truths. 'Moot' is a typo for 'mood'. The sentence is awkward and needs restructuring for clarity and correctness.

× Well my favorite is caramel chocolate because it is soft and sweet.

✓ Well, my favorite is caramel chocolate because it is soft and sweet.

A comma after 'Well' is needed to separate the introductory word from the main clause.

× It's just not sweet at all.

✓ It's not too sweet at all.

The original sentence contradicts the previous statement that caramel chocolate is sweet. 'Not too sweet' better expresses a mild sweetness, which fits the context.

× It just combine some soft flavor in the sweet.

✓ It just combines some soft flavors with the sweetness.

'Combine' should be 'combines' to agree with singular subject 'it'. 'In the sweet' is incorrect; 'with the sweetness' is the correct phrase.

× Makes it more unique and more delicious.

✓ This makes it more unique and more delicious.

The sentence lacks a subject. Adding 'This' clarifies what is being referred to and completes the sentence.

× Yeah, I do think it's a good use to use chocolate as a gift to others.

✓ Yeah, I do think it's good to use chocolate as a gift for others.

The phrase 'a good use to use' is awkward and redundant. 'Good to use' is better. Also, 'gift to others' should be 'gift for others'.

× Like on Valentine's Day, the couples always send each other chocolate to represent their love for each other and their happiness, because the chocolate means happiness.

✓ For example, on Valentine's Day, couples always send each other chocolate to represent their love and happiness because chocolate symbolizes happiness.

Starting with 'Like' is informal; 'For example' is more appropriate. 'The couples' should be 'couples' without 'the'. Repetition of 'each other' and 'their' is reduced for clarity. 'Means' is better replaced with 'symbolizes'.