Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by correcting grammar and avoiding redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about your reasons. For example, explain why you like Kinder chocolate specifically and avoid unclear phrases like 'it's so young'.

예시: Yes, I really like chocolate because it tastes delicious and there are many varieties. For example, Kinder is one of my favorites since it combines white and milk chocolate, which creates a unique and tasty flavor.

제안: Your answer is honest but could be improved by using more natural expressions and linking ideas smoothly. Avoid repeating 'chocolate' too often and try to explain your feelings more clearly.

예시: I eat chocolate every day because I really enjoy it, although I know it's not very healthy. Sometimes, I find it hard to resist because I love the taste so much.

제안: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to answer directly and provide clear reasons or experiences. Avoid negative or confusing statements without explanation.

예시: When I was a kid, I didn't eat much chocolate because my parents told me it could cause health problems like diabetes, so I avoided it.

제안: This answer is unrelated and does not address the question. Make sure to listen carefully and respond directly to the question asked, providing reasons or examples.

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes sweet and satisfies people's cravings. Also, it is used in many desserts and celebrations, making it a favorite treat.

제안: Try to speak more clearly and avoid filler words like 'Oh my God'. Use correct vocabulary and explain your favorite flavor with specific reasons.

예시: My favorite flavor is milk chocolate because it is creamy and sweet. I also enjoy dark chocolate mixed with white chocolate because the combination creates a rich and balanced taste.

제안: Your answer is good but could be clearer and more organized. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. Also, clarify 'animal parties' if you mean 'family parties' or similar.

예시: Yes, chocolate is a great gift because in our culture, we often give it during celebrations and family gatherings. For example, when someone leaves the hospital, we usually bring chocolate to wish them well.

× there is a lot of kind of chocolates

✓ there are a lot of kinds of chocolates

The phrase 'there is' is incorrect because 'a lot of kinds of chocolates' is plural, so 'there are' should be used. Also, 'kind' should be plural 'kinds' to match the plural noun 'chocolates'. In English, 'there is' is used for singular nouns and 'there are' for plural nouns.

× it is one of the my favorite chocolates

✓ it is one of my favorite chocolates

The phrase 'the my favorite chocolates' is incorrect because 'my' is a possessive adjective and does not need the definite article 'the' before it. In English, possessive adjectives like 'my' do not combine with 'the' before a noun.

× it contains with white chocolate and Mick chocolate

✓ it contains white chocolate and milk chocolate

The verb 'contains' does not require the preposition 'with'. The correct form is 'contains white chocolate and milk chocolate'. Also, 'Mick' is a typo and should be 'milk'. In English, 'contain' is a transitive verb and directly takes the object without a preposition.

× which is so delicious and it's not

✓ which is so delicious and it's not bitter

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and it's not' which is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'bitter' or another adjective completes the thought. In English, sentences should be complete and clear to convey the intended meaning.

× It's bad to say that, but I eat chocolate every day

✓ It's bad to say this, but I eat chocolate every day

The phrase 'It's bad to say that' is awkward; 'It's bad to say this' or 'I hate to admit it' would be more natural. However, this is more about natural expression than strict grammar. Modal verbs like 'should' or 'must' are not used here, so no modal verb error strictly, but the expression can be improved.

× As a kid, it's horrible to eat chocolate because chocolate could lead to diseases and illnesses and this could lead to diabetes. Uh, I don't.

✓ As a kid, it was horrible to eat chocolate because chocolate could lead to diseases and illnesses, and this could lead to diabetes. Uh, I didn't.

The sentence mixes present tense 'it's' with past context 'as a kid'. It should be past tense 'it was'. Also, 'I don't' is incomplete; it should be 'I didn't' to match past tense. Pronouns and verbs must agree in tense and context.

× I didn't say hi. I didn't tell you what I would be on here. Hello.

✓ I didn't say hi. I didn't tell you what I would be doing here. Hello.

The phrase 'what I would be on here' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'what I would be doing here' to make sense. Sentence structure must be clear and logical.

× I really like make chocolate

✓ I really like milk chocolate

The phrase 'make chocolate' is incorrect; it should be 'milk chocolate'. This is a vocabulary error rather than grammar, but it affects sentence correctness.

× The flavor is so like the flavor is flavoring

✓ The flavor is so good, like the flavor is amazing

The sentence is unclear and repetitive. Replacing with 'The flavor is so good, like the flavor is amazing' makes it clearer. Adjectives and adverbs should be used correctly to express meaning.

× whenever it comes celebration or animal parties

✓ whenever it comes to celebrations or annual parties

The phrase 'it comes celebration' is incorrect; it should be 'it comes to celebrations'. Also, 'animal parties' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'annual parties'. Prepositions like 'to' are necessary after 'comes' in this context.

× Even when we when someone gets out from the hospital, we we give them chocolate and.

✓ Even when someone gets out of the hospital, we give them chocolate.

The phrase 'gets out from the hospital' is incorrect; it should be 'gets out of the hospital'. Also, repeated 'we' is an error. Pronouns and prepositions must be used correctly for clarity.