Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答が不自然で文法的な誤りが多いです。'I'm the fun of sweet food'は意味が通じません。より自然な表現を使い、冗長な部分を避けてください。例えば、'I really like eating chocolate because I enjoy sweet foods, and I eat it every morning.'のように簡潔に述べると良いでしょう。

예시: I really like eating chocolate because I enjoy sweet foods, and I eat it every morning.

제안: 時制の使い方が混乱しています。現在の習慣を話す場合は現在形を使いましょう。また、文の繋がりが不自然なので、接続詞を使って論理的に繋げると良いです。

예시: I eat chocolate every morning, but I change the way I eat it. Sometimes I have chocolate fondue, and other times I enjoy chocolate cakes.

제안: 表現が不自然で、文法的な誤りも多いです。'chocolate soup'は一般的ではなく、'elementary school student'の使い方も不自然です。過去の習慣を話す際は過去形を正しく使い、文を簡潔にまとめましょう。

예시: Yes, I ate a lot of chocolate when I was in elementary school. I liked it more back then, but my mother asked me to stop because it was too sweet.

제안: 理由を述べる際に、接続詞を使って論理的に説明すると良いです。また、'addicted'の使い方に注意し、より自然な表現を心がけてください。

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it contains caffeine and sugar, which can make people crave it. These ingredients contribute to its addictive taste.

제안: 意味が伝わりにくい表現が多いです。'mature'の使い方が不明瞭で、文の構造も不自然です。好きな味について具体的に述べ、簡潔に表現しましょう。

예시: I like dark chocolate because it has a rich, slightly bitter taste that goes well with sweet foods. I enjoy the combination of bitter and sweet flavors.

제안: 文法と語順に注意し、より自然な表現を使いましょう。また、理由を述べる際に接続詞を使って論理的に繋げると良いです。

예시: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because most people like it. Among my friends, everyone enjoys chocolate, so giving it as a present is usually safe.

× I really like to eat chocolate because I'm the fun of sweet food and because chocolate is so sweet and I I every, I eat it every morning.

✓ I really like eating chocolate because I'm fond of sweet food and because chocolate is so sweet and I eat it every morning.

The phrase 'I'm the fun of sweet food' is incorrect; it should be 'I'm fond of sweet food' to express liking. Also, 'I I every' is a repetition and incorrect. The verb 'like' is commonly followed by the gerund form 'eating' rather than the infinitive 'to eat' in this context.

× I ate chocolate every morning, so every I eat every day. But the way to eat chocolate is different each day.

✓ I eat chocolate every morning, so I eat it every day. But the way I eat chocolate is different each day.

The use of past tense 'ate' is incorrect when referring to habitual actions in the present. The correct tense is present simple 'eat'. Also, 'every I eat every day' is ungrammatical and should be corrected to 'I eat it every day'. The phrase 'the way to eat chocolate' should be 'the way I eat chocolate' to clarify the subject.

× Yes, I ate chocolate soup a lot when I was at elementary school student. When I was high elementary school student I like the chocolate more than now so, but my mother asked me to stop eating chocolate because it's too sweet.

✓ Yes, I ate chocolate soup a lot when I was an elementary school student. When I was in high elementary school, I liked chocolate more than now, but my mother asked me to stop eating chocolate because it's too sweet.

The phrase 'at elementary school student' is incorrect; it should be 'an elementary school student'. 'High elementary school student' is unclear; 'in high elementary school' is better. The verb 'like' should be in past tense 'liked' to match the past time frame. The sentence structure is improved by removing unnecessary words and correcting conjunction use.

× I think because chocolate has some caffeine, people can be addicted to eating chocolate and it is said that sugar can addict people.

✓ I think because chocolate has some caffeine, people can become addicted to eating chocolate and it is said that sugar can addict people.

The phrase 'can be addicted to' is acceptable but 'can become addicted to' is more natural. The verb 'addict' is transitive and should be used as 'sugar can addict people' or better 'sugar can be addictive'. The preposition use is generally correct but the verb choice needs improvement.

× I like much flavor of chocolate because I'm fond of mature and even I think mature will match everything, especially sweet foods.

✓ I like many flavors of chocolate because I'm fond of mature ones and I even think mature flavors match everything, especially sweet foods.

'Much flavor' is incorrect; 'many flavors' is correct for countable nouns. 'Fond of mature' is incomplete; it should be 'fond of mature ones' or 'mature flavors'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Are the in other matches a little bit bitter and we can taste bitter and sweet at the same time.

✓ Others are a little bit bitter and we can taste bitter and sweet at the same time.

The phrase 'Are the in other matches' is ungrammatical and unclear. It should be 'Others are a little bit bitter'. The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used here and should be removed.

× Yes, I think chocolate is good to give to send someone because not so many people dislike chocolate.

✓ Yes, I think chocolate is good to give or send to someone because not many people dislike chocolate.

The phrase 'to give to send someone' is incorrect; it should be 'to give or send to someone'. The preposition 'to' is missing before 'someone' in the original sentence. Also, 'not so many people' is better expressed as 'not many people'.

× Along my friend everyday everybody likes chocolate so the the sending chocolate as a present is safe.

✓ Among my friends, everybody likes chocolate every day, so sending chocolate as a present is safe.

'Along my friend everyday' is incorrect; it should be 'Among my friends, everybody likes chocolate every day'. The phrase 'the the sending chocolate' has repetition and incorrect article use; it should be 'sending chocolate'. The sentence structure is corrected for clarity and grammatical accuracy.