Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally natural and relevant, but it could be more concise and avoid minor grammatical errors such as "using chocolate and cooking" which is unclear. Try to use clearer phrasing and keep your answer within 4-5 sentences for better effectiveness.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because it has a rich and delicious flavour that suits my taste perfectly. I especially like using it in cooking, combining it with fruits to make cakes or desserts. This versatility makes chocolate a wonderful ingredient in many sweet dishes.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing such as "limit myself to eat in chocolate" and "consume it too many sweets". Also, avoid capitalising 'A' in 'A balanced diet'. Try to use linking words to improve coherence and correct grammar for clarity.

예시: I try to limit myself to eating chocolate once a week because consuming too many sweets can be unhealthy. Usually, I have two small pieces on those days to satisfy my craving without overindulging. This way, I can enjoy chocolate while maintaining a balanced diet.

제안: Your answer is detailed and relevant but could be improved by breaking it into two sentences for clarity and adding a linking word to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid ending with "I remember the feeling" without specifying the feeling to make it more expressive.

예시: When I was a kid, chocolate was a special treat because there were no supermarkets or big grocery stores in my hometown. Therefore, I didn't get to eat chocolate very often until I was older and could buy it myself, which made it even more enjoyable.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains repetition ("that that") and could be more concise. Use linking words to connect your points better and provide more specific examples to enrich your answer.

예시: In my opinion, flavour is the key reason chocolate is popular worldwide because it greatly influences our enjoyment of food. Moreover, chocolate is very versatile; for instance, it can be used in cakes, drinks, and many other desserts.

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be improved by using British English spelling consistently (e.g., "flavour" instead of "flavor") and by adding a linking phrase to enhance coherence.

예시: I would say the original flavour because it has a simple, rich taste that blends well with other ingredients when cooking or baking. For example, it doesn't overpower the flavours of nuts or fruits in desserts.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains an incorrect word choice: "express their fashion" should be "express their affection" or "feelings". Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas more smoothly and avoid minor grammatical errors.

예시: Yes, I think chocolate makes a great gift because it is widely loved and enjoyed by many people. However, it is most commonly given on special occasions like Valentine's Day, when couples exchange sweets to express their affection. For other occasions, such as birthdays or family gatherings, people often choose different types of presents.

× I also love using chocolate and cooking, especially when I combine it with fruits to make cakes or desserts.

✓ I also love using chocolate in cooking, especially when I combine it with fruits to make cakes or desserts.

The phrase 'using chocolate and cooking' is unclear and grammatically incorrect. The correct preposition here is 'in' to indicate the activity where chocolate is used, i.e., 'using chocolate in cooking'. This clarifies the meaning and corrects the prepositional usage (Problem Type ID 11).

× I try to limit myself to eat in chocolate once a week because consume it too many sweets can be unhealthy.

✓ I try to limit myself to eating chocolate to once a week because consuming too many sweets can be unhealthy.

The verb after 'limit myself to' should be in the gerund form 'eating' not the infinitive 'eat'. Also, 'consume it too many sweets' is incorrect; it should be 'consuming too many sweets'. This corrects the verb form usage (Problem Type ID 8).

× Usually I have two small pieces of chocolate on those days to satisfy my craving without overindulging. This way I can enjoy chocolate while maintaining A balanced diet.

✓ Usually I have two small pieces of chocolate on those days to satisfy my craving without overindulging. This way I can enjoy chocolate while maintaining a balanced diet.

The article 'A' should be lowercase 'a' because it is in the middle of a sentence and is an indefinite article before a singular countable noun 'balanced diet'. This is an article error (Problem Type ID 22).

× In my opinion, when it comes to food, the flavor always wins because it is the most important factor that that determines how much we enjoy eating something.

✓ In my opinion, when it comes to food, the flavour always wins because it is the most important factor that determines how much we enjoy eating something.

The sentence contains a repeated word 'that that' which is a typographical error. Removing the duplicate 'that' corrects the sentence structure. Also, 'flavor' is American English; 'flavour' is British English spelling, which fits the instruction for English (United Kingdom). The main issue is sentence structure error due to repetition (Problem Type ID 26).

× For example, chocolate is one of the most delicious treats in the world and it is very versatile. It can be used in many different ways such as in cakes, drinks.

✓ For example, chocolate is one of the most delicious treats in the world and it is very versatile. It can be used in many different ways, such as in cakes and drinks.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks parallel structure. Adding a comma before 'such as' and connecting 'cakes' and 'drinks' with 'and' improves clarity and grammatical correctness. This is a sentence structure error (Problem Type ID 26).

× Yes, I think chocolate makes a great gift because it is widely loved and can be enjoyed by many people. However, it is most commonly given on special occasions like Valentine's Day, when couples exchange sweets to express their fashion.

✓ Yes, I think chocolate makes a great gift because it is widely loved and can be enjoyed by many people. However, it is most commonly given on special occasions like Valentine's Day, when couples exchange sweets to express their affection.

The word 'fashion' is incorrect in this context; the correct word is 'affection' to express feelings of love or fondness. This is an incorrect use of vocabulary related to pronouns and meaning (Problem Type ID 12).