Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서
대화
Part 1
시험관
Do you like eating chocolate? Why or why not?
수험생
I absolutely love eating chocolate. My grandma also loves eating chocolate and she would often give me some whenever she came to my house. And it's something that's a part of my childhood living in the US because chocolate was a huge craving for me and I loved it.
시험관
How often do you eat chocolate?
수험생
Recently I've actually been cutting down on my sugar intake so I haven't been eating it as much but I would probably say like 1-2 times a week. I just don't really like to eat sweets anymore because I usually just get a sugar rush whenever I eat too much sugar so I'm just cutting down on that and decreasing the amount.
시험관
Did you often eat chocolate when you were a kid?
수험생
Yes, because I always had a suit sweet tooth when I was young and I would eat a bunch of chocolate because it's it was just something that was very accessible for me when I was living in the US And you know, all my peers also loved chocolate. So it was something I was very familiar with when I was a kid.
시험관
Why do you think chocolate is popular around the world?
수험생
Probably just because of how accessible it is, because all of the places I visited in the past has had chocolate and because the industry is so large and you can, you know, get it from anywhere. I feel like that's why it's popular and it's something everyone, everyone in the world can enjoy.
시험관
What's your favourite flavour of chocolate?
수험생
I like some rich milk chocolate because although dark chocolate does have a more rich and kind of acidic feel to it, I feel like milk chocolate just hits the spot for my sweet tooth and it's something I crave a lot because I just want something sweet when I want chocolate and not.
시험관
Do you think it is good to use chocolate as gifts to others?
수험생
I feel that it depends on the occasion, but especially for Valentine's Day, I feel like it's a great gift to give because chocolate is something that a lot of people enjoy and not many people dislike chocolate, you know? So I feel like it's a safe and ideal option.
평가
총점
Part 1
Do you like eating chocolate? Why or why not?
점수: 75.0제안: 回答は自然で感情が伝わりますが、内容がやや冗長で、文のつながりが弱いです。より効果的に伝えるために、主題文を明確にし、理由や具体例を簡潔に述べ、接続詞を使って論理的に繋げましょう。
예시: Yes, I love eating chocolate because it reminds me of my childhood in the US. My grandma used to give me chocolate whenever she visited, which made it a special treat for me.
How often do you eat chocolate?
점수: 80.0제안: 回答は具体的で理由も述べられていますが、少し長く感じられます。接続詞を使って文を整理し、簡潔にまとめるとより効果的です。
예시: I usually eat chocolate one or two times a week because I'm trying to reduce my sugar intake. I avoid sweets to prevent sugar rushes.
Did you often eat chocolate when you were a kid?
점수: 70.0제안: 回答にいくつか言い間違いや繰り返しがあり、文の流れが少し不自然です。正確な語彙を使い、文を簡潔にし、接続詞で論理的に繋げる練習をしましょう。
예시: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a child because I had a sweet tooth and it was easily available in the US. Also, many of my friends liked chocolate, so it was a common treat.
Why do you think chocolate is popular around the world?
점수: 75.0제안: 理由は明確ですが、話し言葉の曖昧な表現（"you know"など）が多く、繰り返しもあります。よりフォーマルで簡潔な表現を心がけ、接続詞で文をつなげましょう。
예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it is widely accessible. The large industry ensures that people everywhere can enjoy it.
What's your favourite flavour of chocolate?
점수: 70.0제안: 回答が少し長く、文の終わりが不完全です。理由を簡潔に述べ、文を完結させる練習をしましょう。また、接続詞を使って文の流れを良くしましょう。
예시: My favourite flavour is rich milk chocolate because it satisfies my sweet tooth better than dark chocolate, which tastes more bitter.
Do you think it is good to use chocolate as gifts to others?
점수: 80.0제안: 回答は内容が明確で自然ですが、"you know"などの口語表現が多いです。よりフォーマルな表現に置き換え、接続詞を使って論理的に繋げると良いでしょう。
예시: I think chocolate makes a good gift, especially on occasions like Valentine's Day, because many people enjoy it and few dislike it, making it a safe and popular choice.
문법
× Yes, because I always had a suit sweet tooth when I was young and I would eat a bunch of chocolate because it's it was just something that was very accessible for me when I was living in the US And you know, all my peers also loved chocolate.
✓ Yes, because I always had a sweet tooth when I was young and I would eat a bunch of chocolate because it was just something that was very accessible for me when I was living in the US. And you know, all my peers also loved chocolate.
The phrase 'it's it was' is incorrect because it mixes present and past tense. Since the context is about the past, 'it was' should be used. Also, 'suit sweet tooth' is a typo and should be corrected to 'sweet tooth'. Additionally, the sentence was run-on and needed proper punctuation to separate ideas.
× Probably just because of how accessible it is, because all of the places I visited in the past has had chocolate and because the industry is so large and you can, you know, get it from anywhere.
✓ Probably just because of how accessible it is, because all of the places I visited in the past have had chocolate and because the industry is so large and you can, you know, get it from anywhere.
The subject 'all of the places' is plural, so the verb should be 'have' instead of 'has' to agree in number.
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