Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: حاول تبقى إجابتك أكثر وضوح وتنظيم، واستخدم جمل قصيرة وواضحة. كمان حاول تستخدم كلمات مناسبة للسياق بدل التكرار، ووضح الأسباب بشكل مباشر وبسيط.

예시: I don't like eating chocolate because it makes me feel stressed and anxious. Also, eating too much chocolate can cause health problems like high blood sugar and other issues.

제안: حاول تحدد إجابتك بشكل أوضح وتستخدم كلمات ربط لتوضيح التردد. كمان حاول تتجنب التكرار في الكلام وتكون الجملة منظمة أكثر.

예시: I usually eat chocolate once a week, but sometimes I might have a small piece every day. However, I don't eat chocolate very often.

제안: حاول تبني إجابتك بجمل واضحة ومنظمة، واستخدم كلمات ربط لتوضيح الأفكار. كمان حاول توضح السبب بشكل مباشر وتجنب الأخطاء النحوية.

예시: Yes, I liked eating chocolate when I was a kid because it helped me bond with my friends and made me happy. Also, my mom used to gift chocolate to me and my sister as a reward for good behavior.

제안: حاول تركز على الإجابة بشكل مباشر وتستخدم جمل واضحة ومنظمة. استخدم كلمات ربط لتوضيح السبب، وابتعد عن التفاصيل غير المرتبطة.

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because many people enjoy its sweet taste. In my family, we often eat chocolate with coffee in the evening, which makes us feel good.

제안: حاول تبني إجابتك بجمل مترابطة وواضحة، واستخدم كلمات ربط لتوضيح الفوائد. تجنب التكرار وكن محدد في التفاصيل.

예시: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because it is healthy. It can help reduce stress, improve memory, and keep the body fit.

제안: حاول تعبر عن رأيك بشكل واضح ومنظم، واستخدم جمل مترابطة. تجنب التكرار وكن محدد في الأسباب التي تجعلك تعتقد أن الشوكولاتة هدية جيدة.

예시: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because it makes people happy and helps them relax. Giving chocolate can also strengthen friendships.

× Actually I don't like eating chocolate because that make me feel stressful, full of stress and that can lead to anxiety and many health problem like like a sugar problem, high sugar and blood problem.

✓ Actually I don't like eating chocolate because that makes me feel stressed, full of stress and that can lead to anxiety and many health problems like sugar problems, high sugar, and blood problems.

The subject 'that' is singular, so the verb should be 'makes' instead of 'make'. Also, 'health problem' should be plural 'health problems' to match 'many'. Additionally, 'stressful' is an adjective meaning causing stress, but here the feeling is 'stressed', so 'feel stressed' is correct.

× I think one one day, one chocolate or one week.

✓ I think one chocolate a day or one a week.

The phrase 'one one day' is incorrect and redundant. The correct expression is 'one chocolate a day' or 'one a week'. Also, 'one week' alone is incomplete; it should be 'one a week' to indicate frequency.

× Yes I like it when I was a kid because it's can make our relationship strong with my with friends and that can make me feel happy and my mom gift it gifted me and my sister if we listen to her.

✓ Yes, I liked it when I was a kid because it can make our relationship strong with my friends and that can make me feel happy. My mom gifted it to me and my sister if we listened to her.

The verb 'like' should be in past tense 'liked' to match 'when I was a kid'. 'It's can' is incorrect; it should be 'it can'. 'Gift' should be past tense 'gifted'. Also, 'listen' should be past tense 'listened' to match the conditional past context.

× Yes, I think so because the the children in our house it's too much and our my mate and my mom and my dad eat every day and our traditional eat before 6:00 PM with the coffee that make you feel good with.

✓ Yes, I think so because there are too many children in our house and my friends, my mom, and my dad eat it every day. Our tradition is to eat it before 6:00 PM with coffee, which makes you feel good.

'Children' is plural, so 'it's too much' is incorrect; it should be 'there are too many'. 'Mate' is better replaced with 'friends' for clarity. 'Our traditional eat' is incorrect; it should be 'our tradition is to eat'. 'That make' should be 'which makes' to agree with singular 'coffee' or 'tradition'.

× Dark chocolate because it can make a body fit and healthy and avoid disease OK and make you avoid stress. Make your mind strong. Have a good and strong memory.

✓ Dark chocolate because it can make the body fit and healthy, avoid disease, and help you avoid stress. It makes your mind strong and helps you have a good and strong memory.

'A body' should be 'the body' as a general reference. Sentences like 'Make your mind strong' and 'Have a good and strong memory' are fragments; they need subjects and verbs to be complete sentences.

× Yes, I think because it is. I can make them feel happy and make them avoid stress all the day and love, love me, can love me and make a friend with me.

✓ Yes, I think so because it can make them feel happy, help them avoid stress all day, love me, and become friends with me.

'I can make them' is incorrect; 'it can make them' is correct because 'it' refers to chocolate. 'Love, love me, can love me' is unclear and ungrammatical; it should be 'love me'. 'Make a friend with me' should be 'become friends with me'. Also, 'all the day' should be 'all day'.