Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat natural but contains redundancy and grammatical errors. Try to be more concise and correct in your phrasing. For example, avoid unnecessary words like "for the" before "white chocolate" and clarify your reasons more directly.

예시: Yes, I enjoy eating chocolate, especially white chocolate because it is very sweet and popular among many people.

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be improved by reducing filler words like "you know" and using linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I don't eat chocolate very often because it is high in fat and unhealthy; however, I sometimes enjoy a small piece of white chocolate as a treat.

제안: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and unclear expressions. Try to use correct verb forms and clearer sentences. Avoid filler words and be more specific about your childhood habits.

예시: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a child because I enjoyed it as a way to have fun.

제안: Good use of example and explanation. To improve, use correct verb tenses and linking words to make your answer more coherent.

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it helps reduce stress. For example, during exam periods at school, I often eat chocolate to feel more relaxed.

제안: Your answer has some vocabulary errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use appropriate adjectives and correct grammar to express your opinion clearly.

예시: My favorite flavor of chocolate is white chocolate because it is sweet and looks very appealing. I really like it.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and filler words. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to connect your points.

예시: Personally, I don't think chocolate is a good gift because it melts easily when carried around. Therefore, I suggest giving gifts that are less likely to melt.

× Well, I usually ate chocolate when I was young, like many child.

✓ Well, I usually ate chocolate when I was young, like many children.

The word 'child' is singular, but the sentence refers to 'many', which requires the plural form 'children'. This is a singular and plural agreement issue.

× I'm also the kids so I like eat a lot of chocolate, you know to to entertain.

✓ I'm also one of the kids, so I like to eat a lot of chocolate, you know, to entertain myself.

The phrase 'I'm also the kids' is incorrect because 'kids' is plural and 'I'm' refers to singular. Also, 'like eat' is missing 'to'. The pronoun 'myself' is needed to clarify the reflexive action. This is an incorrect use of pronouns and verb form.

× I'm also the kids so I like eat a lot of chocolate, you know to to entertain.

✓ I'm also one of the kids, so I liked to eat a lot of chocolate, you know, to entertain myself.

Since the sentence refers to past time ('when I was young'), the verb 'like' should be in past tense 'liked' to maintain tense consistency.

× Well, I think one of the reasons is because it reduced the people's stress when eating chocolate.

✓ Well, I think one of the reasons is that it reduces people's stress when eating chocolate.

The phrase 'is because' is incorrect; 'is that' should be used. Also, 'reduced' should be present tense 'reduces' to match the general truth. The preposition 'the' before 'people's stress' is unnecessary.

× Well, I think one of the reasons is because it reduced the people's stress when eating chocolate.

✓ Well, I think one of the reasons is that it reduces people's stress when eating chocolate.

The verb 'reduced' is in past tense but the statement is a general fact, so present tense 'reduces' is appropriate.

× For example, when it comes to examination period in my school, I often eat chocolate to reduce my pressure so that I feel more relaxed.

✓ For example, during the examination period at my school, I often eat chocolate to reduce my stress so that I feel more relaxed.

The phrase 'when it comes to examination period' is awkward; 'during the examination period' is better. Also, 'pressure' is better replaced with 'stress' in this context. The sentence is otherwise correct in present tense.

× Well, I prefer eating white chocolate as it's pretty sweet and it's look also marvelous, tremendous and I like it so much.

✓ Well, I prefer eating white chocolate as it's pretty sweet and it also looks marvelous and tremendous, and I like it so much.

The verb 'look' should be 'looks' to agree with singular subject 'it'. The adverb 'also' should be placed before the verb. The sentence structure is improved by adding conjunctions properly.

× Well personally I think it's not a good idea to use chocolate as a gift to any friends or people because it's easy to melt when you carry on and to give in to to them.

✓ Well, personally, I think it's not a good idea to use chocolate as a gift for any friends or people because it easily melts when you carry it and give it to them.

The preposition 'as a gift to' should be 'as a gift for'. The phrase 'carry on' is incorrect here; 'carry it' is appropriate. Also, 'give in to to them' is incorrect; it should be 'give it to them'. The sentence needed correction in preposition usage and clarity.

× So I would suggest to use something that would not easily, you know to easy melting so.

✓ So I would suggest using something that would not easily melt, you know.

The phrase 'suggest to use' is incorrect; 'suggest using' is correct. 'Easy melting' is incorrect; the verb 'melt' should be used. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.