Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は自然ですが、文法の誤りや冗長な表現を避けるために、より簡潔で正確な文を心がけましょう。例えば、"especially when I feel stressful"は"especially when I feel stressed"が適切です。

예시: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it makes me feel happy, especially when I feel stressed.

제안: 回答が少し不明瞭で文法的な誤りがあります。"So we are, I think, just sometime"は意味が伝わりにくいので、明確に頻度を述べる表現に改善しましょう。

예시: Honestly, I don't eat chocolate very often because I think it's unhealthy. I usually eat it only occasionally.

제안: 時制の一致や文法の誤りに注意しましょう。"there is a store which they saw they sell nice chocolate"は不自然なので、"there was a store that sold nice chocolate"のように修正してください。

예시: Yes, definitely. When I was a kid, I really liked eating chocolate. There was a store that sold nice chocolate, so I always went there to buy some.

제안: 文法と語彙の使い方を改善し、より自然な表現を心がけましょう。例えば、"there are a lot of store"は"there are a lot of stores"が正しいです。

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because there are many stores that sell a wide variety of chocolate, making it convenient and easy to buy.

제안: 文法の誤りを直し、より自然な表現にしましょう。"I getting older"は"I am getting older"、"more bitter 1"は"more bitter chocolate"が適切です。

예시: My favorite chocolate flavor is bitter chocolate. When I was a kid, I liked sweet chocolate, but now that I am getting older, I prefer bitter chocolate.

제안: 文法の誤りを修正し、冗長な表現を避けて簡潔にしましょう。例えば、"a lot of store have a lot of chocolate"は"many stores have a wide selection of chocolate"が自然です。

예시: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because many people like it, and it's easy and affordable to buy from many stores.

× I really like eating chocolate because it makes me feel happy and especially when I feel stressful it's very useful for me.

✓ I really like eating chocolate because it makes me feel happy, and especially when I feel stressed, it's very useful for me.

The conjunction 'and' is used incorrectly here to connect two clauses that need clearer separation. Also, 'stressful' is an adjective describing a situation, but the speaker should use 'stressed' to describe their feeling. Adding commas improves sentence clarity.

× So we are, I think, just sometime.

✓ So we are, I think, just sometimes.

The word 'sometime' is an adverb meaning 'at some unspecified time,' but the intended meaning is frequency, which requires the adverb 'sometimes.'

× When I was a kid I really liked eating chocolate and there is a store which they saw they sell nice chocolate.

✓ When I was a kid I really liked eating chocolate and there was a store where they sold nice chocolate.

The phrase 'which they saw they sell' is incorrect. 'Where' is the correct relative adverb to refer to a place, and the past tense 'sold' matches the past time frame.

× So when I was a child I always go there and I bought some chocolate.

✓ So when I was a child I always went there and I bought some chocolate.

The verb 'go' should be in the past tense 'went' to agree with the past time frame indicated by 'when I was a child.'

× Well, it's because nowadays there are a lot of store, they have a lot of chocolate and even there a lot of variety of chocolate.

✓ Well, it's because nowadays there are a lot of stores, they have a lot of chocolate and even there are a lot of varieties of chocolate.

The noun 'store' should be plural 'stores' to agree with 'a lot of.' Also, 'variety' should be plural 'varieties' when referring to multiple types.

× My favorite chocolate flavor is bitter chocolate.

✓ My favorite chocolate flavor is dark chocolate.

While not strictly a grammar error, 'bitter chocolate' is not a common expression. The correct term for chocolate with a bitter taste is 'dark chocolate.'

× but now I getting older and I prefer to eat more bitter 1.

✓ but now I am getting older and I prefer to eat more bitter chocolate.

The verb 'getting' requires the auxiliary verb 'am' to form the present continuous tense. Also, '1' is a typo and should be 'chocolate.'

× because a lot of store have a lot of chocolate and it's cheap.

✓ because a lot of stores have a lot of chocolate and it's cheap.

The noun 'store' should be plural 'stores' to agree with 'a lot of.'