Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and detailed by explaining why chocolate makes you happy, and avoid repeating the word 'chocolate' too often. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because it instantly lifts my mood and makes me feel joyful. For example, after a long day, a piece of chocolate helps me relax and feel comforted.

제안: Improve your grammar by using correct verb forms and sentence structure. Also, be more specific about when and why you eat chocolate, and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: I try not to eat too much chocolate; usually, I have it twice a day, once in the afternoon and once after dinner, as a small treat to satisfy my sweet tooth.

제안: Focus on using past tense correctly and avoid repetition. Provide clearer reasons and use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

예시: When I was a child, I didn't eat chocolate very often because my parents always controlled how much I could have, so I only enjoyed it on special occasions.

제안: Use more precise vocabulary and avoid repeating the word 'chocolate' excessively. Also, explain your ideas with more specific reasons and linking words.

예시: I believe chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and sweet. Moreover, some studies suggest that chocolate can improve brain function, which makes it even more appealing.

제안: Make your answer more coherent by using linking words and complete sentences. Also, explain why you like these flavors and how you enjoy them.

예시: My favorite flavor used to be milk chocolate, but recently I've started to enjoy dark chocolate as well. For instance, I love having chocolate ice cream, which combines both flavors perfectly.

제안: Clarify your ideas and use correct vocabulary and grammar. Provide specific reasons and examples, and organize your answer logically with linking words.

예시: I think chocolate makes a great gift because many people enjoy it. For example, you can give chocolate to friends or colleagues on special occasions like birthdays or even on regular workdays to brighten their mood.

× I try eat chocolate, not too much.

✓ I try eating chocolate, not too much.

The verb 'try' is followed by the gerund form '-ing' when expressing an attempt or habit. Therefore, 'try eat' should be corrected to 'try eating'.

× Maybe I eat chocolate twice a day.

✓ Maybe I eat chocolate twice a day.

This sentence is grammatically correct in present simple tense to express habitual action, so no correction is needed.

× When I was a child, I eat chocolate, don't eat chocolate very often because my parents always control, control it. Always.

✓ When I was a child, I ate chocolate, but I didn't eat chocolate very often because my parents always controlled it.

The sentence refers to past events, so verbs should be in past tense: 'eat' to 'ate', 'don't eat' to 'didn't eat', and 'control' to 'controlled'. Also, 'but' is added for clarity.

× I think the chocolate is popular around the world because chocolate is very tasty and sweet and also chocolate is good for brain.

✓ I think chocolate is popular around the world because chocolate is very tasty and sweet and also chocolate is good for the brain.

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before 'chocolate' when speaking generally, so it should be removed before the first 'chocolate'. However, 'the' is needed before 'brain' because it refers to a specific organ.

× My favorite flavor of chocolate is Milky chocolate, but now I also like dark chocolate.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is milky chocolate, but now I also like dark chocolate.

Adjectives should not be capitalized unless they are proper nouns. 'Milky' should be lowercase.

× I think it tastes good to use chocolate escape to others.

✓ I think it is good to give chocolate as gifts to others.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. 'It tastes good to use chocolate escape to others' is incorrect. The corrected sentence clarifies the meaning and uses proper structure.

× Umm the kids not birthday.

✓ Umm, not for kids' birthdays.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. The correction provides a clearer and grammatically correct phrase.

× You can give chocolate others maybe one work day.

✓ You can give chocolate to others maybe on a workday.

The sentence lacks the preposition 'to' after 'give chocolate' and needs the article 'a' before 'workday'. Also, 'work day' should be one word 'workday'.