Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid repeating phrases like 'I consider' and 'I reckon' together as they mean the same. Also, start directly with your opinion and then explain briefly about your health condition to make your answer more natural and effective.

예시: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it tastes delicious. However, due to my insulin resistance, I can't eat it very often.

제안: Use linking words like 'especially' more smoothly and avoid awkward phrases such as 'when it comes about'. Also, try to be more concise and clear in your explanation.

예시: I don't eat chocolate very often, but I try to have a piece once a week, especially dark chocolate because it contains less sugar and is suitable for me.

제안: Your answer is a bit unclear and incomplete. Try to organize your ideas logically and complete your sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition like 'insulin, insulin'.

예시: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a kid. However, after the collapse of the Soviet Union, there was a shortage of chocolate here. Later, many varieties of Turkish chocolates became available.

제안: Avoid repeating phrases like 'I think' and 'I consider' together. Also, try to use more natural expressions and provide a clearer reason why chocolate is popular.

예시: I believe chocolate is popular worldwide because it is one of the tastiest treats and is often called the king of desserts.

제안: Avoid repeating words like 'unique' twice. Also, use more natural expressions and link your ideas smoothly. Try to be concise and clear.

예시: My favorite flavor is dark chocolate with caramel and sea salt. I call it the 'Holy Trinity' because these flavors combine to create a unique taste. I try to enjoy it once a week.

제안: Avoid repeating words like 'chocolate chocolate' and 'I think' multiple times. Also, try to use correct grammar such as 'people do not know' and provide clearer reasons.

예시: I believe chocolate is one of the best gifts. However, in my country, such gifts are not always appreciated because many people are not familiar with high-quality chocolates like Belgian ones.

× I'm not allowed to eat them frequently.

✓ I'm not allowed to eat it frequently.

The pronoun 'them' is used for plural nouns, but 'chocolate' here is uncountable and singular, so 'it' should be used instead.

× I try to eat a piece in a week

✓ I try to eat a piece a week

The phrase 'a piece a week' is the correct expression to indicate frequency. Using 'in a week' is incorrect in this context.

× especially when it comes about black chocolate

✓ especially when it comes to black chocolate

The correct preposition after 'comes' in this phrase is 'to', not 'about'.

× those are allowed for me.

✓ that is allowed for me.

'Those' is plural, but 'that kind of chocolate' is singular, so the pronoun should be singular 'that'.

× after collapsing of Soviet Union, here was the deficit of chocolate and later there were the big huge variety of Turkey chocolates and I.

✓ After the collapse of the Soviet Union, there was a deficit of chocolate here, and later there was a big variety of Turkish chocolates.

The sentence has multiple structural errors: 'collapsing' should be 'collapse', 'here was the deficit' should be 'there was a deficit here', 'big huge variety' is redundant, and 'Turkey chocolates' should be 'Turkish chocolates'. The sentence also ends abruptly and needs to be completed or rephrased.

× the humanity could not invent more tastier treat.

✓ humanity could not invent a tastier treat.

'More tastier' is incorrect because 'tastier' is already a comparative form. Use either 'more tasty' or 'tastier', but not both together. Also, 'the humanity' is incorrect; 'humanity' without 'the' is correct.

× I consider the chocolate is king of the dessert and sweets so that's why.

✓ I consider chocolate the king of desserts and sweets, so that's why.

'The chocolate is king' should be 'chocolate the king' for correct idiomatic expression. Also, 'dessert' should be plural 'desserts' to match 'sweets'.

× those kind of chocolate really have unique, unique flavor

✓ that kind of chocolate really has a unique flavor

'Those kind' is plural, but 'kind' is singular, so 'that kind' is correct. Also, 'have' should be 'has' to agree with singular 'kind'. 'Unique' should not be repeated.

× I try to eat them once in a week.

✓ I try to eat it once a week.

'Them' is plural, but 'chocolate' is uncountable singular, so 'it' is correct. Also, 'once a week' is the correct frequency expression.

× this kind of gifts are not appreciated

✓ this kind of gift is not appreciated

'Kind' is singular, so the verb should be singular 'is'. Also, 'gift' should be singular to agree with 'kind'.

× people does not know much about good chocolate

✓ people do not know much about good chocolate

'People' is plural, so the verb should be 'do' instead of 'does'.