Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Instead of saying "I am a sweet tooth," say "I have a sweet tooth." Also, avoid redundancy by combining ideas smoothly. For example, you can say, "Yes, I love eating chocolate because I have a sweet tooth, and once I start, it's hard to stop. It's my favorite dessert."

예시: Yes, I love eating chocolate because I have a sweet tooth, and once I start, it's hard to stop. It's my favorite dessert.

제안: Your answer is clear and direct. To improve, you can add a linking phrase to connect your ideas and make it more natural. For example, "I eat chocolate after every meal because I treat it as my sweet dessert."

예시: I eat chocolate after every meal because I treat it as my sweet dessert.

제안: Your answer is good but can be improved by using linking words and clearer structure. For example, "No, not really. When I was a kid, my parents tried to limit our sweet treats because we were very energetic, and they didn't want us to become even more hyperactive."

예시: No, not really. When I was a kid, my parents tried to limit our sweet treats because we were very energetic, and they didn't want us to become even more hyperactive.

제안: Good answer with specific details. To improve, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, "I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it is easy to make and offers many variations. For instance, in the Philippines alone, there are more than 500 types of chocolate that people enjoy."

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it is easy to make and offers many variations. For instance, in the Philippines alone, there are more than 500 types of chocolate that people enjoy.

제안: Your answer is unclear and has some redundancy. Try to be more specific and concise. For example, "I don't have a favorite flavor, but I enjoy any chocolate that is sweet with a hint of bitterness. It's my sweet treat after meals."

예시: I don't have a favorite flavor, but I enjoy any chocolate that is sweet with a hint of bitterness. It's my sweet treat after meals.

제안: Your answer is good and clear. To improve, combine your ideas using linking words for better flow. For example, "Yes, definitely. Chocolate is a universal gift that can be given to family or friends because it's a sweet treat everyone can enjoy."

예시: Yes, definitely. Chocolate is a universal gift that can be given to family or friends because it's a sweet treat everyone can enjoy.

× I love eating chocolate because I am a sweet tooth and it's something that once I start, it's hard for me to stop eating.

✓ I love eating chocolate because I have a sweet tooth and once I start, it's hard for me to stop eating.

The phrase 'I am a sweet tooth' is incorrect. The correct idiomatic expression is 'I have a sweet tooth' to indicate a liking for sweets.

× When I was a kid my parents would try to avoid us eating sweet treats because we are very energetic and they don't want to deal with a more energetic child.

✓ When I was a kid, my parents would try to avoid us eating sweet treats because we were very energetic and they didn't want to deal with a more energetic child.

The sentence mixes past and present tense. Since the context is past, 'are' should be 'were' and 'don't' should be 'didn't' to maintain tense consistency.

× In the Philippines alone, there are about more than 500 variations of chocolate that people enjoy.

✓ In the Philippines alone, there are more than 500 variations of chocolate that people enjoy.

Using both 'about' and 'more than' together is redundant. Choose one quantifier to express approximation or excess.

× I don't have a particular fav favorite flavor of chocolate.

✓ I don't have a particular favorite flavor of chocolate.

The word 'fav' is an informal abbreviation and redundant when used with 'favorite'. Use 'favorite' alone for clarity and correctness.

× I think the chocolate I enjoy is anything that's sweet and a bit a little bit there and it's my sweet treat after eating.

✓ I think the chocolate I enjoy is anything that's sweet and a little bit there; it's my sweet treat after eating.

The phrase 'a bit a little bit' is redundant. Use either 'a bit' or 'a little bit' to express a small amount. Also, the sentence structure is improved by separating the ideas with a semicolon.