Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng cấu trúc câu tự nhiên hơn. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sau đó giải thích lý do một cách cụ thể và có liên kết logic giữa các ý.

예시: Yes, I like eating chocolate, especially chocolate candies. They help me feel better when I'm stressed because the cocoa flavor is very satisfying. However, I don't enjoy foods that are made with chocolate as the main ingredient.

제안: Bạn nên sử dụng câu trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy sử dụng các từ nối để liên kết các ý và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn về tần suất và lý do ăn chocolate.

예시: I usually eat chocolate once or twice a week, especially when I feel sad or hungry. I try not to eat too much because I know it's not good for my health. Also, chocolate helps relieve stomach pain during my period.

제안: Câu trả lời cần tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và diễn đạt rõ ràng hơn. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sau đó giải thích thêm với các chi tiết cụ thể và sử dụng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

예시: Yes, I liked sweet food a lot when I was a kid. I probably ate chocolate every day. However, my mom sometimes told me not to eat too much because it could harm my teeth.

제안: Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và sử dụng từ nối để liên kết các ý. Hãy cung cấp các lý do cụ thể và giải thích chi tiết hơn về sự phổ biến của chocolate trên thế giới.

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it has a delicious flavor that many people enjoy. Also, its pleasant aroma makes people feel satisfied. Moreover, cocoa plants grow in many countries, so chocolate is widely available.

제안: Bạn đã trả lời khá tốt nhưng cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt tự nhiên hơn. Hãy sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

예시: My favourite flavour is milk chocolate because it is less bitter than dark chocolate. It is slightly sweet and creamy, with just a hint of bitterness. I also enjoy matcha chocolate, which is inspired by Japanese cuisine.

제안: Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng cấu trúc câu tự nhiên. Hãy giải thích lý do tại sao chocolate là món quà tốt và sử dụng từ nối để liên kết ý.

예시: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because it is sweet and enjoyable. When you receive a gift with chocolate inside, it feels special. Also, if you don't know what to give someone, chocolate is always a safe and appreciated choice.

× I pretty like to eat chocolate, especially like candy.

✓ I pretty much like eating chocolate, especially candy.

The verb 'like' is commonly followed by the gerund form '-ing' when expressing general preferences. Using 'like to eat' is acceptable but less natural here. Also, 'pretty' should be 'pretty much' to express degree.

× the flavor of cocoa make me feel satisfied.

✓ the flavor of cocoa makes me feel satisfied.

The subject 'flavor' is singular, so the verb should be 'makes' to agree in number.

× Only chocolate man like.

✓ Only chocolate lovers like it.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'Chocolate man' is incorrect; 'chocolate lovers' is a proper noun phrase. Also, the verb 'like' needs an object.

× Maybe once to twice a week, like when I I want to still sad or when I was hungry I will eat a piece of chocolate.

✓ Maybe once or twice a week, like when I want to feel less sad or when I am hungry, I eat a piece of chocolate.

The modal verb 'will' is unnecessary here; present simple is better for habitual actions. Also, 'still sad' is incorrect; 'feel less sad' is clearer.

× If I eat a lot I know it's not good for my health or when I have a period.

✓ If I eat a lot, I know it's not good for my health, especially when I have my period.

The sentence needs commas for clarity. 'Have a period' is better expressed as 'have my period' for naturalness.

× Of course he has kids.

✓ Of course, kids like sweets.

The original sentence is unclear and uses incorrect pronouns. The intended meaning is that children like sweets.

× Pretty like sweet food.

✓ I pretty much like sweet food.

The subject 'I' is missing, and 'pretty' should be 'pretty much' to express degree.

× When I was a kid's maybe I ate it every day.

✓ When I was a kid, maybe I ate it every day.

The possessive form 'kid's' is incorrect here; it should be the plural noun 'kid'.

× my mom sometimes she banned me like to eat not to eat much chocolate because it will harm to my teeth.

✓ My mom sometimes banned me from eating too much chocolate because it would harm my teeth.

The pronoun 'she' is redundant after 'my mom'. Also, 'banned me like to eat not to eat' is incorrect; 'banned me from eating' is correct. 'Harm to my teeth' should be 'harm my teeth'.

× The second one is a stuff smell.

✓ The second one is the smell of the stuff.

'A stuff smell' is incorrect; 'the smell of the stuff' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× It's make people when they smell it, feels satisfied it and also like chocolate.

✓ It makes people feel satisfied when they smell it, and they also like chocolate.

The sentence has subject-verb agreement errors and awkward structure. 'It's make' should be 'It makes', and 'feels satisfied it' should be 'feel satisfied'.

× Quite easy to me, 'cause Coco, our planet, all over the world.

✓ It's quite easy for me because cocoa is grown all over the world.

The sentence is unclear and uses incorrect pronouns. 'Coco, our planet' is incorrect; 'cocoa is grown' is the intended meaning.

× I like milk chocolate 'cause it's not bitter as dark chocolate, it has a little bit sweet, a little bit Milky an also a little bit dark but is not too much.

✓ I like milk chocolate because it's not as bitter as dark chocolate; it is a little bit sweet, a little bit milky, and also a little bit dark, but not too much.

Comparative structure 'not bitter as' should be 'not as bitter as'. Also, adjectives like 'sweet' and 'milky' need to be used correctly, and punctuation is needed for clarity.

× And I also like matcha chocolate that comes from Japanese cuisine.

✓ And I also like matcha chocolate, which comes from Japanese cuisine.

A relative pronoun 'which' is needed to connect the clause properly.

× It's good like you know when you are receive gifts and inside it is a chocolate.

✓ It's good, you know, when you receive gifts and inside there is chocolate.

'Are receive' is incorrect; the correct form is 'you receive'. Also, 'inside it is a chocolate' should be 'inside there is chocolate'.

× And if you are if you don't have any idea for giving someone a gift, chocolate will be a good idea.

✓ And if you don't have any idea for giving someone a gift, chocolate will be a good idea.

The phrase 'if you are if you' is redundant; it should be simplified to 'if you'.