Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct verb forms and avoid redundancy. For example, instead of 'it taste delicious an often help improve my mood is specially when I feel stressed,' say 'it tastes delicious and often helps improve my mood, especially when I feel stressed.' Also, avoid repeating ideas unnecessarily.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because it tastes delicious and often helps improve my mood, especially when I feel stressed. However, I try to eat it in moderation since consuming too much can harm my teeth. Overall, I love eating chocolate.

제안: Your answer has some grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases. Pay attention to article usage and word choice, such as 'of few times a week' should be 'a few times a week,' and 'Ann has reached flavor' should be 'and has a rich flavor.' Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I eat chocolate quite regularly, usually a few times a week. I enjoy having a small piece as a treat after meals because it helps satisfy my sweet cravings and boosts my mood. For example, I often choose dark chocolate since it's healthier and has a rich flavor.

제안: Your answer is understandable but contains some unclear and incorrect phrases, such as 'smooth takes her' and 'appealing to make me back then.' Try to use correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Also, add linking words to improve coherence.

예시: Yes, I used to eat chocolate quite often when I was a child. It was one of my favorite treats, especially during special occasions like birthdays and holidays. I think the sweet taste and smooth texture made it very appealing to me back then.

제안: Your answer has several errors and incomplete sentences, such as 'old white' instead of 'worldwide' and 'It's versatility' instead of 'Its versatility.' Make sure to use correct words and complete sentences. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

예시: Chocolate is very popular worldwide primarily because of its rich, sweet taste that appeals to people of all ages. Additionally, chocolate is often associated with celebration and comfort, making it a go-to treat during special occasions or stressful times. Its versatility in various forms also adds to its popularity.

제안: Your answer is mostly clear but contains some incorrect words like 'wreath' instead of 'rich' and awkward phrasing such as 'when I want or treat.' Use precise vocabulary and correct sentence structures. Also, try to link your ideas smoothly.

예시: My favorite flavor of chocolate is dark chocolate with a hint of orange. I enjoy it because the slight citrus taste complements the rich, slightly bitter flavor of the dark chocolate, making it more interesting. For example, I often choose this flavor when I want a treat that is both indulgent and refreshing.

제안: Your answer is understandable but has some grammatical errors and spelling mistakes, such as 'gift' instead of 'a gift,' 'many occasion' instead of 'many occasions,' and 'hapiness' instead of 'happiness.' Pay attention to articles, plural forms, and spelling. Also, use linking words to improve flow.

예시: Yes, I think using chocolate as a gift is a great idea. Chocolate is widely loved and can suit many occasions, making it a thoughtful and enjoyable present. For example, giving chocolate during holidays or celebrations often brings happiness and appreciation.

× Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because it taste delicious an often help improve my mood is specially when I feel stressed.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because it tastes delicious and often helps improve my mood, especially when I feel stressed.

The verbs 'taste' and 'help' need to agree with the singular subject 'it' (referring to chocolate). Therefore, they should be in the third person singular form 'tastes' and 'helps'. Also, 'is specially' is incorrect; it should be 'especially'.

× However, I try to eat in moderation since consuming too much chocolate can promote the growth of harmful bacteria in the mouth.

✓ However, I try to eat in moderation since consuming too much chocolate can promote the growth of harmful bacteria in the mouth.

This sentence is correct in preposition usage; no correction needed.

× Overall, I love eating chocolates.

✓ Overall, I love eating chocolate.

The word 'chocolate' is an uncountable noun when referring to the substance in general, so it should not be pluralized as 'chocolates' unless referring to individual pieces or types.

× I eat chocolate quite regularly, usually of few times a week.

✓ I eat chocolate quite regularly, usually a few times a week.

The phrase 'of few times' is incorrect; the correct quantifier is 'a few times' to indicate frequency.

× I enjoy having a small piece as a treat after meal because it helps satisfy my sweet craving an boost my mood.

✓ I enjoy having a small piece as a treat after a meal because it helps satisfy my sweet craving and boost my mood.

The phrase 'after meal' requires the article 'a' to be grammatically correct: 'after a meal'. Also, 'an' should be 'and'.

× For example, I often choose dark chocolates since it's healthier Ann has reached flavor.

✓ For example, I often choose dark chocolate since it's healthier and has a rich flavor.

'Dark chocolates' should be 'dark chocolate' as an uncountable noun here. 'Ann has reached flavor' is incorrect; it should be 'and has a rich flavor'.

× I think the sweet taste and smooth takes her made it very appealing to make me back then.

✓ I think the sweet taste and smooth texture made it very appealing to me back then.

'Takes her' is incorrect; it should be 'texture'. Also, 'to make me' should be 'to me'. The past tense 'made' is correct here.

× Chocolate is very popular old white primarily because of its rich, sweet taste that appeals to people of all ages.

✓ Chocolate is very popular worldwide primarily because of its rich, sweet taste that appeals to people of all ages.

'Old white' is a mishearing or typo; the correct word is 'worldwide' to indicate global popularity.

× Additionally, chocolate is often associated with celebration and comfort, making it go to treat during special occasion or a stressful time.

✓ Additionally, chocolate is often associated with celebration and comfort, making it a go-to treat during special occasions or stressful times.

'Go to treat' should be hyphenated as 'go-to treat'. 'Special occasion' and 'a stressful time' should be plural or indefinite article used properly: 'special occasions' and 'stressful times'.

× It's versatility in various forms.

✓ Its versatility in various forms.

'It's' is a contraction for 'it is' or 'it has', but here the possessive pronoun 'its' is needed to show possession.

× I enjoy it because the slight citrus taste complements the wreath slightly bitter flavor of the dark chocolate, making it more interesting.

✓ I enjoy it because the slight citrus taste complements the rich, slightly bitter flavor of the dark chocolate, making it more interesting.

'Wreath' is incorrect; the correct word is 'rich'. Also, 'slightly' should modify 'bitter' and 'rich' is an adjective describing flavor.

× For example, I often choose this flavor when I want or treat that is both indulgent.

✓ For example, I often choose this flavor when I want a treat that is both indulgent and satisfying.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'a treat that is both indulgent and satisfying' completes the thought and improves clarity.

× Yes, I think using chocolate as gift is a great idea.

✓ Yes, I think using chocolate as a gift is a great idea.

The noun 'gift' is countable and requires the article 'a' when singular.

× Chocolate is widely loved and can suit many occasion, making it thoughtful, an enjoyable present.

✓ Chocolate is widely loved and can suit many occasions, making it a thoughtful and enjoyable present.

'Many occasion' should be plural 'many occasions'. Also, 'an enjoyable' should be 'a thoughtful and enjoyable' with correct articles.

× For example, giving chocolate during holidays or celebration often brings hapiness and so appreciation.

✓ For example, giving chocolate during holidays or celebrations often brings happiness and appreciation.

'Celebration' should be plural 'celebrations'. 'Hapiness' is misspelled; correct spelling is 'happiness'. 'So appreciation' is incorrect; it should be 'and appreciation'.