Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer needs to be clearer and more coherent. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'oh'. Also, try to complete your sentences properly and avoid redundancy. For example, directly state your preference and reason without hesitation. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

예시: Yes, I like eating chocolate, especially a brand called 'Dairy Milk'. However, I usually avoid it because it worsens my tooth cavities.

제안: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Try to give a direct answer first, then add supporting details with proper linking words. Avoid fragmented sentences and ensure your answer is natural and easy to understand.

예시: I eat chocolate about twice a week. When I was a child, I used to eat it daily because my grandma would specially give me chocolates, and I enjoyed those moments very much.

제안: Your answer is mostly clear but can be improved by correcting grammar and using linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid phrases like 'got addiction' and use 'became addicted' instead.

예시: Yes, I used to eat chocolate quite often because my grandma would give it to me as a treat. As a result, I became addicted to it, but now I have limited my consumption.

제안: Your answer is confusing and lacks coherence. Try to organize your ideas logically using linking words. Also, use appropriate vocabulary and complete sentences to explain why chocolate is popular globally.

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it comes in many flavors, styles, and shapes. Moreover, most people enjoy sweets, and chocolate's rich taste attracts many.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Provide a direct answer first, then add specific details with linking words. Also, avoid vague phrases and be precise about your favourite flavour.

예시: There are many chocolate flavours that people enjoy, such as coffee-flavoured chocolate. However, I especially like mango and pineapple-flavoured chocolates.

제안: Your answer has good content but needs better sentence structure and linking words for clarity. Avoid fragmented sentences and ensure your ideas flow logically. Also, correct grammar mistakes for better understanding.

예시: I think giving chocolate as a gift is a good idea. In India, sharing sweets during festivals represents bonding between people, so giving chocolates is a nice way to show affection.

× Uh, one of my favorite brand is their e-mail, but usually I don't eat chocolates because of my tooth.

✓ Uh, one of my favorite brands is their e-mail, but usually I don't eat chocolate because of my tooth.

The word 'brand' should be plural 'brands' because it refers to one among many favorites. Also, 'chocolates' should be singular 'chocolate' when referring to the substance in general. This correction ensures proper singular and plural usage.

× If I started eating the chocolate, my cavities get activated and my teeth.

✓ If I start eating chocolate, my cavities get activated and affect my teeth.

The conditional sentence requires present tense 'start' instead of past 'started' to express a general truth. Also, 'my teeth' is incomplete; adding 'affect my teeth' clarifies the meaning.

× I eat chocolate. In a week twice before.

✓ I eat chocolate twice a week.

The original sentence is fragmented and incorrectly structured. The correction combines the ideas into a proper sentence with correct word order.

× In my child is I could eat chocolate daily with my grandma would give the chocolate for me specially.

✓ When I was a child, I could eat chocolate daily because my grandma would specially give chocolate to me.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. The correction rearranges the sentence to proper English structure and clarifies meaning.

× It was good enough and I having a good time spending.

✓ It was good enough and I had a good time spending it.

The phrase 'I having' is incorrect; it should be 'I had' to indicate past tense. Also, adding 'it' clarifies what was spent time on.

× Because of the I got addiction of chocolate.

✓ Because of that, I got addicted to chocolate.

The phrase 'got addiction of' is incorrect. The correct form is 'got addicted to' to express developing an addiction.

× In chocolate we have many varieties of flavors.

✓ In chocolate, we have many varieties of flavor.

The word 'flavors' is plural but 'varieties of flavor' is more natural and correct in this context. Also, a comma after 'chocolate' improves readability.

× Answer, style, shape in chocolate.

✓ There are different tastes, styles, and shapes in chocolate.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks proper prepositions and articles. The correction adds necessary words to make it meaningful.

× Each and every human beings like to eat sweets and.

✓ Each and every human being likes to eat sweets.

'Human beings' should be singular 'human being' after 'each and every'. Also, 'like' changes to 'likes' to agree with singular subject.

× The chocolate contains fit because of that, the people get attracted to that.

✓ Chocolate contains fat; because of that, people are attracted to it.

'Fit' is incorrect; it should be 'fat'. Also, 'the people get attracted to that' is better expressed as 'people are attracted to it' for clarity and correctness.

× There are varieties of flavors which each and every human like to eat specially.

✓ There are varieties of flavors which each and every human especially likes to eat.

'Human' should be singular and 'like' changes to 'likes' to agree with singular subject. 'Especially' is better placed before 'likes'.

× A coffee type of chocolate or caffeine, but I specially like to eat mango or a.

✓ A coffee type of chocolate or caffeine flavor, but I especially like to eat mango or pineapple flavor.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'flavor' clarifies meaning. 'Specially' should be 'especially'. Also, 'a' at the end is incomplete and replaced with 'pineapple flavor'.

× I think he has a giving a chocolate as a gift.

✓ I think giving chocolate as a gift is good.

The phrase 'he has a giving' is incorrect. The correction removes unnecessary pronouns and simplifies the sentence.

× It is good because in India we have a culture that sharing sweets in a festival to each other represent our bonding to each other.

✓ It is good because in India we have a culture of sharing sweets during festivals with each other to represent our bonding.

The original sentence misuses prepositions and articles. 'Culture of sharing', 'during festivals', and 'with each other' are correct forms.

× So. It is OK to give a chocolate has I gave to each other.

✓ So, it is OK to give chocolate as I have given to others.

The phrase 'has I gave to each other' is incorrect. The correction uses proper tense and pronouns to express the idea clearly.