Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences clearer and more natural by correcting grammar and avoiding redundancy. Also, provide a concise explanation with linking words to improve coherence.

예시: Yes, I love eating chocolate because it helps reduce my stress, especially when I feel anxious before exams or during nervous moments.

제안: Your answer is confusing and contains incomplete sentences. Try to organize your thoughts clearly and use complete sentences. Also, explain your reasons more specifically and use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: I don't eat chocolate very often because it sometimes causes problems with my skin. However, when I'm in the mood, I usually buy some from the market to enjoy.

제안: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and is unclear. Use correct sentence structure and be more specific. Also, avoid redundancy and provide a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details.

예시: I didn't eat chocolate very often as a kid, but I did enjoy having a chocolate bar almost every day.

제안: Your answer is repetitive and lacks coherence. Use linking words properly and avoid redundancy. Provide specific reasons with clear explanations to make your answer more effective.

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because many people love sweets, and it also boosts mood by helping reduce anxiety.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors. Try to express your preferences clearly using correct grammar and vocabulary. Also, explain why you like or dislike certain flavors with specific reasons.

예시: I prefer fruit-flavored chocolates because they taste fresh and sweet. I also like milk chocolate, but I don't enjoy dark chocolate since its bitter taste is not appealing to me.

제안: Your answer is understandable but could be more fluent and grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples to support your opinion.

예시: Yes, chocolate is a great gift for people who enjoy sweets. For example, I often give chocolate to my friend not only on birthdays but also when we meet casually.

× Yes, I'm a sweet lover so chocolates are one of the best suites that have ever made and they're actually reduced my stress when I have anxiety, for example for my exams or.

✓ Yes, I'm a sweet lover so chocolate is one of the best sweets that have ever been made and it actually reduces my stress when I have anxiety, for example for my exams.

The word 'chocolates' should be singular 'chocolate' when referring to the substance in general. 'Suites' is incorrect; the correct word is 'sweets'. Also, 'they're actually reduced' is incorrect; it should be 'it actually reduces' to agree with the singular subject 'chocolate'. This corrects singular/plural agreement and verb agreement.

× Yes, I'm a sweet lover so chocolates are one of the best suites that have ever made and they're actually reduced my stress when I have anxiety, for example for my exams or.

✓ Yes, I'm a sweet lover so chocolate is one of the best sweets that have ever been made and it actually reduces my stress when I have anxiety, for example for my exams.

The phrase 'have ever made' is missing the passive auxiliary verb 'been' to form the present perfect passive tense. It should be 'have ever been made' to be grammatically correct.

× Actually I'm not even eating chocolates that much because I have so many problems. I was my skin, but anyway, sometimes.

✓ Actually, I don't even eat chocolates that much because I have so many problems with my skin, but anyway, sometimes.

The phrase 'I'm not even eating' is incorrect for habitual actions; the simple present 'I don't even eat' is appropriate. Also, 'I was my skin' is incorrect; it should be 'I have problems with my skin'.

× I was my skin, but anyway, sometimes.

✓ I have problems with my skin, but anyway, sometimes.

The phrase 'I was my skin' is ungrammatical and unclear. It should be corrected to 'I have problems with my skin' to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× When I'm. On a moods were wanna eat some I always buy them in the market.

✓ When I'm in a mood and want to eat some, I always buy them in the market.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains informal/slang expressions like 'wanna'. It should be corrected to a complete sentence with proper conjunctions and formal language.

× I don't think like too much, but of course every day one of the bars of chocolate were eaten by me.

✓ I don't think I ate too much, but of course every day I ate one bar of chocolate.

The phrase 'were eaten by me' is awkward and passive voice is unnecessary here. Also, 'like too much' is incorrect; it should be 'I ate too much'. The past tense 'ate' is appropriate for the question about childhood habits.

× I don't think like too much, but of course every day one of the bars of chocolate were eaten by me.

✓ I don't think I ate too much, but of course every day I ate one bar of chocolate.

The phrase 'one of the bars of chocolate were eaten' is incorrect because 'one' is singular and should be followed by a singular verb 'was eaten' or better rephrased as 'I ate one bar of chocolate'.

× First of all, there are so many people who cannot live without chocolate, without sweets. Overall so and this is one of the reasons and second of all, as I said, it boosts your mood and always helps you with your anxiety.

✓ First of all, there are so many people who cannot live without chocolate or sweets. Overall, this is one of the reasons, and second of all, as I said, it boosts your mood and always helps you with your anxiety.

The phrase 'without chocolate, without sweets. Overall so' is awkward and incorrect. It should be 'without chocolate or sweets. Overall, this is one of the reasons'. The preposition 'or' is more appropriate here to connect alternatives.

× Oh, I like with fruit ones and they just a milk chocolate is also delicious, but I don't like it. It's arc one because it sees it is a little bit like be there for me and I don't like just how it tastes, you know?

✓ Oh, I like the fruit ones and just milk chocolate is also delicious, but I don't like dark ones because they taste a little bitter to me and I just don't like how they taste, you know?

The original sentence contains many errors: 'like with fruit ones' should be 'like the fruit ones'; 'arc one' should be 'dark ones'; 'it sees it is a little bit like be there' is incorrect and should be 'they taste a little bitter'. These corrections fix adjective use and clarity.

× Yes, it's one of the perfect types of gifts to the people who like chocolate. I think an actually I have a friend that really enjoys them, so not only in the birthdays but when we just meet. I always try to gift.

✓ Yes, it's one of the perfect types of gifts for people who like chocolate. I think actually I have a friend who really enjoys it, so not only on birthdays but when we just meet, I always try to give it as a gift.

The phrase 'gifts to the people' should be 'gifts for people'. 'A friend that' should be 'a friend who'. 'Enjoys them' should be 'enjoys it' referring to chocolate. 'Try to gift' is awkward; 'try to give it as a gift' is better.