Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding unnecessary words like 'Author. A bad day?'. Also, provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons. For example, say 'Yes, I like eating chocolate because it helps me relieve stress and makes me feel happy.'

예시: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it helps me relieve stress and makes me feel happy, especially after a tiring day.

제안: Make your answer more coherent by using linking words and complete sentences. Avoid fragmented sentences like 'during. Evening.' Also, correct grammar mistakes and be specific about frequency. For example, 'I usually eat chocolate in the evening to boost my energy because after a long day at work, I feel tired and chocolate cheers me up.'

예시: I usually eat chocolate in the evening to boost my energy because after a long day at work, I feel tired and chocolate cheers me up.

제안: Improve your answer by using correct grammar and clearer expressions. Avoid unclear phrases like 'slide me to eat a small pieces' and 'chocolates is night'. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, 'My mom often bought me lots of chocolate when I was a kid, but she advised me to eat only small pieces because too much chocolate is not good for my health.'

예시: My mom often bought me lots of chocolate when I was a kid, but she advised me to eat only small pieces because too much chocolate is not good for my health.

제안: Make your answer more natural and grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid awkward phrases like 'choose peoples up'. For example, 'I think chocolate is popular worldwide because of its sweet and creamy taste, which cheers people up and helps them feel relaxed. Therefore, people enjoy chocolate whether they are in a good mood or not.'

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because of its sweet and creamy taste, which cheers people up and helps them feel relaxed. Therefore, people enjoy chocolate whether they are in a good mood or not.

제안: Your answer is quite good but can be improved by correcting minor grammar errors and using linking words for coherence. For example, say 'I prefer dark chocolate because its unique combination of bitter and sweet flavors is very uplifting. It helps me boost my energy, especially when I feel tired or stressed. Also, I like that it is less sweet than milk chocolate, which makes it more enjoyable for me.'

예시: I prefer dark chocolate because its unique combination of bitter and sweet flavors is very uplifting. It helps me boost my energy, especially when I feel tired or stressed. Also, I like that it is less sweet than milk chocolate, which makes it more enjoyable for me.

제안: Make your answer more natural and grammatically correct by avoiding repetition and awkward phrasing. For example, 'Yes, of course. Chocolate is everyone's favourite and is easy to find, so it makes a good gift for others.'

예시: Yes, of course. Chocolate is everyone's favourite and is easy to find, so it makes a good gift for others.

× I usually eat chocolate during. Evening. To boost my energy because after a long day at work I really felt hire an chocolate helps me to cheer up.

✓ I usually eat chocolate during the evening to boost my energy because after a long day at work, I really feel tired and chocolate helps me to cheer up.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains unclear phrases such as 'felt hire an chocolate'. The sentence should be combined properly with correct prepositions and verb forms to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× My mom always bought me a tons of chocolate when I was a kid but she always slide me to eat a small pieces only as she said chocolates is night. Good for my health.

✓ My mom always bought me tons of chocolate when I was a kid but she always told me to eat only small pieces as she said chocolate is not good for my health.

The phrase 'a tons of' is incorrect; 'tons of' should be used without 'a'. 'Slide me' is incorrect and should be 'told me'. 'Chocolates is night' is incorrect and should be 'chocolate is not'. Also, 'small pieces' should not have 'a' before it.

× As for me, I think chocolate is popular around the world because of its sweet and creamy taste that always choose peoples up an makes individuals feel more relaxed so people always enjoy chocolate when they were in a good mood or not.

✓ As for me, I think chocolate is popular around the world because of its sweet and creamy taste that always cheers people up and makes individuals feel more relaxed, so people always enjoy chocolate whether they are in a good mood or not.

The phrase 'choose peoples up an' is incorrect; it should be 'cheers people up and'. 'Peoples' should be 'people'. The tense 'when they were' should be 'whether they are' to match the present context.

× I prefer dark chocolate because it's unique combination of bitter and sweet flavors is very uplifting.

✓ I prefer dark chocolate because its unique combination of bitter and sweet flavors is very uplifting.

The possessive pronoun 'its' is needed instead of 'it's' (which means 'it is'). This is a common confusion between possessive pronouns and contractions.

× It helps me to boost my energy, especially when I feel tired or stress.

✓ It helps me to boost my energy, especially when I feel tired or stressed.

The adjective 'stressed' should be used instead of the noun 'stress' to describe the feeling. 'Feel' is followed by an adjective here.

× Yes, of course, as chocolate is everyone's favorite and chocolate is easy to find it everywhere, so it can be a gift to others.

✓ Yes, of course, as chocolate is everyone's favorite and chocolate is easy to find everywhere, so it can be a gift to others.

The pronoun 'it' is unnecessary after 'find'. The verb 'find' can be directly followed by the adverb 'everywhere' without 'it'.