Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is good but try to avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep your sentences concise. For example, instead of repeating 'I love to eat', you can say 'I enjoy various types of chocolate because they are sweet and creamy.'

예시: Yes, I enjoy various types of chocolate because they are sweet and creamy. There are many flavors available, such as white chocolate, dark chocolate, and nut-filled varieties, which makes it even more enjoyable.

제안: Try to correct grammatical mistakes and improve sentence clarity. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' properly to make your answer coherent. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

예시: I eat chocolate quite regularly, usually as a small treat after lunch and dinner. I especially enjoy dark chocolate because it tastes rich and is healthier than other types. Additionally, I like to try different kinds depending on my mood, such as white or milk chocolate.

제안: Your answer is clear but can be improved by avoiding informal phrases like 'So yeah' and by using linking words such as 'but' or 'however' correctly. Also, try to be more specific about the healthier snacks you chose.

예시: When I was a kid, I often ate milk chocolate as an evening snack after school because I found it tasty and satisfying. However, later I stopped eating it regularly because I wanted to choose healthier snacks like fruits.

제안: Avoid informal language like 'Yeah' and 'cause'. Also, your last sentence is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Use linking words properly and make your points clear and concise.

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because there are many different kinds and flavors available. People can choose according to their preferences and often enjoy chocolate as a small treat after meals because it is sweet and creamy.

제안: Your answer has grammatical errors and incomplete sentences. Avoid repeating phrases like 'I love to have it' and use proper linking words. Also, clarify what you mean by 'green, brown' flavors as it is confusing.

예시: My favorite flavor is dark chocolate because it tastes rich and satisfying. It is also healthier and less sweet compared to other types. Moreover, dark chocolate comes in various varieties, which I enjoy trying.

제안: Avoid informal language like 'Yeah' and correct grammatical errors such as 'to four others'. Use linking words to connect your ideas clearly and avoid repeating the same points.

예시: Yes, I think chocolate makes a good gift because it comes in many flavors and is easy to carry. Since it is widely available, we can choose flavors according to the recipient's preferences.

× Yes, I love to eat chocolate becaused it's very sweet and creamy and I love to eat all the kind of chocolates.

✓ Yes, I love to eat chocolate because it's very sweet and creamy and I love to eat all kinds of chocolates.

The word 'becaused' is incorrect; the correct word is 'because'. Also, 'all the kind of chocolates' should be 'all kinds of chocolates' to correctly express the plural form and quantity.

× Yes, I love to eat chocolate becaused it's very sweet and creamy and I love to eat all the kind of chocolates.

✓ Yes, I love to eat chocolate because it's very sweet and creamy and I love to eat all kinds of chocolates.

The phrase 'all the kind of chocolates' is incorrect because 'kind' should be plural 'kinds' when referring to multiple types.

× There are so many flavors available in the market such as white chocolate, dark chocolate and nuts and crackers chocolate, so I love to eat it.

✓ There are so many flavors available in the market such as white chocolate, dark chocolate, and nuts and crackers chocolate, so I love to eat them.

The sentence lists multiple items, so commas are needed before 'and' in the list. Also, 'it' should be 'them' to refer to multiple chocolates.

× I specially enjoyed dark chocolate because it takes rich and it is healthier than other types.

✓ I especially enjoy dark chocolate because it tastes rich and it is healthier than other types.

The adverb 'specially' is incorrect here; 'especially' is the correct word. Also, 'takes' should be 'tastes' to describe flavor. The tense should be present to match the question about current habits.

× So I like to try different kind depending on my mood as well and there are so many.

✓ So I like to try different kinds depending on my mood as well and there are so many.

The word 'kind' should be plural 'kinds' when referring to multiple types.

× When I was a kid, I used to eat a milk chocolate quite often because I found it very tasty and satisfying.

✓ When I was a kid, I used to eat milk chocolate quite often because I found it very tasty and satisfying.

The article 'a' before 'milk chocolate' is unnecessary because 'milk chocolate' is an uncountable noun here.

× However, after some time I stopped eating chocolate regularly because I wanted to eat healthier snack that time.

✓ However, after some time I stopped eating chocolate regularly because I wanted to eat healthier snacks at that time.

'Healthier snack' should be plural 'healthier snacks' to match the context. Also, 'that time' should be 'at that time' for correct preposition usage.

× Yeah, I think chocolate is very popular around the world 'cause there are so many different kinds and flavors of chocolates available in the market.

✓ Yeah, I think chocolate is very popular around the world because there are so many different kinds and flavors of chocolate available in the market.

The informal contraction ''cause' should be 'because' in formal speech. Also, 'flavors of chocolates' should be 'flavors of chocolate' as 'chocolate' is uncountable here.

× So people can choose accordingly and they can have chocolate after like a small treat after lunch and dinner because it states sweeter and creamy there are.

✓ So people can choose accordingly and have chocolate as a small treat after lunch and dinner because it tastes sweet and creamy.

The sentence is awkward and contains errors: 'after like a small treat' should be 'as a small treat'; 'it states sweeter and creamy there are' is incorrect and should be 'it tastes sweet and creamy'.

× My favorite flavor is a dark chocolate.

✓ My favorite flavor is dark chocolate.

The article 'a' is unnecessary before 'dark chocolate' because 'dark chocolate' is an uncountable noun.

× I love to have it because I taste rich and satisfying and it's very healthy 'cause it's not too sweet for me and I love to have it.

✓ I love to have it because it tastes rich and satisfying and it's very healthy because it's not too sweet for me and I love to have it.

The pronoun 'I' is incorrectly used instead of 'it' in 'I taste rich'; it should be 'it tastes rich'. Also, ''cause' should be 'because'.

× And there are so many flavors available in the dark chocolate as well, like green, brown. And I.

✓ And there are so many flavors available in dark chocolate as well, like green and brown.

The sentence is incomplete and awkward. 'And I.' is incomplete and should be removed. Also, 'in the dark chocolate' should be 'in dark chocolate'.

× Yeah, I think it's a good gift to four others becauses there are so many flavors available in the market and it is easy to carry as a gift and easily available in the market.

✓ Yeah, I think it's a good gift for others because there are so many flavors available in the market and it is easy to carry as a gift and easily available in the market.

The phrase 'to four others' is incorrect; it should be 'for others'. Also, 'becauses' is a typo and should be 'because'.