Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は自然ですが、文が断片的で意味が伝わりにくい部分があります。文をつなげて、より明確で流暢な表現を心がけましょう。例えば、接続詞を使い、理由を具体的に述べると良いです。

예시: Yes, I like eating chocolate because I enjoy sweets, and there are many varieties available. This allows me to choose different types depending on my mood.

제안: 回答が断片的で文法的に不完全な部分があります。理由を述べる際は、文をつなげて一つのまとまった文にしましょう。また、頻度についても具体的に述べると良いです。

예시: I don't eat chocolate every day because it's not good for my skin. However, I usually eat it when I feel depressed to cheer myself up.

제안: 内容が不明瞭で、文が断片的です。理由を明確にし、文をつなげて説明しましょう。また、具体的な文化的背景を述べると説得力が増します。

예시: No, I didn't eat chocolate often as a child because in Japan, people believe that eating too much chocolate is bad for children's health due to its high sugar content.

제안: 文法の誤りと単語の誤用があります。正しい単語を使い、文をつなげて論理的に説明しましょう。

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide partly because it contains sugar, which can be addictive. Therefore, many people are attracted to chocolate.

제안: 文が断片的で意味が伝わりにくいです。具体的なフレーバーを明確に述べ、文をつなげて表現しましょう。

예시: My favourite flavour of chocolate is fruit-flavored ones, such as strawberry or orange. My mom loves them too, so we often enjoy them together.

제안: 文が繰り返しや断片的で、意味が分かりにくいです。理由を整理し、文をつなげて明確に述べましょう。

예시: Yes, I think chocolate is a great gift because it is popular and many people like it. Also, there are many varieties available, so we can choose chocolates that suit the recipient's taste.

× And there are so many varieties of chocolate, so.

✓ And there are so many varieties of chocolate.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'so' which is unnecessary and incorrect here. Removing 'so' makes the sentence grammatically correct and clearer.

× Like 2. Choose what I want to eat at that time.

✓ Like two, I can choose what I want to eat at that time.

The original sentence fragments and uses '2' as a numeral in informal speech. It should be a complete sentence with 'two' spelled out and proper structure for clarity.

× I like eating chocolate, but actually I'm not so.

✓ I like eating chocolate, but actually I'm not a big fan.

The phrase 'not so' is incomplete and unclear. Replacing it with 'not a big fan' clarifies the meaning and corrects the adverb usage.

× Because it's not so good for my skin so.

✓ Because it's not so good for my skin.

The sentence incorrectly uses both 'because' and 'so' together, which is redundant. Removing 'so' corrects the sentence structure.

× When? I feel depressed. I eat chocolate.

✓ When I feel depressed, I eat chocolate.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Combining into one sentence with proper conjunction improves clarity and grammar.

× No, I didn't because many opt to create. Use. I wrote up sugars.

✓ No, I didn't because many opted to create. Used a lot of sugars.

The original sentence is fragmented and uses incorrect verb forms. 'Opted' is the correct past tense of 'opt', and 'used' is the past tense of 'use'. The sentence needs to be restructured for clarity.

× So in Japan it's thought that. Eating too much chocolate, it's not so good for the Children's Health.

✓ So in Japan, it's thought that eating too much chocolate is not good for children's health.

The sentence is fragmented and incorrectly capitalizes 'Children's Health'. Combining into one sentence and correcting capitalization improves grammar.

× Sugar had some addictive.

✓ Sugar is somewhat addictive.

'Had some addictive' is incorrect. The adjective 'addictive' should be used with 'is' and 'somewhat' to express degree properly.

× So Chuck rate attract many people around the world.

✓ So chocolate attracts many people around the world.

'Chuck rate' is a mispronunciation or typo for 'chocolate'. Also, 'attract' should be 'attracts' to agree with singular subject 'chocolate'.

× I love chocolate with fruits, for example strawberry to create or. Ohranger.

✓ I love chocolate with fruits, for example, strawberry or orange.

The sentence has misspellings and incorrect plural forms. 'Strawberry' and 'orange' should be singular here as examples, and 'to create' and 'Ohranger' are incorrect and removed.

× My mom loved it so much so. Do I?

✓ My mom loved it so much, and so do I.

The sentence is fragmented and incorrectly structured. 'Do I?' should be 'so do I' to express agreement properly.

× Yes, I think. So great, it's good to use as a gift because it's very popular food, so many people likes it and it's very it's it's chocolate heads variety of labels so we can choose what they like.

✓ Yes, I think it's great. It's good to use as a gift because it's a very popular food, many people like it, and there are many varieties of chocolate labels so we can choose what they like.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'so great' is incomplete, 'likes' should be 'like' to agree with plural 'people', 'chocolate heads variety of labels' is incorrect and should be 'many varieties of chocolate labels'. The sentence is also run-on and needs to be split for clarity.