Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答が不自然で文法的に誤りがあります。例えば、「sweet taste of」や「It makes me feel. Happy and gave me fulfillment」の部分は意味が通じにくいです。より自然な英語表現を使い、文をつなげて一文にまとめる練習をしましょう。

예시: I like eating chocolate because its sweet taste makes me feel happy and satisfied.

제안: 文のつながりが不自然で、文法ミスもあります。例えば「because. It relieves」ではなく、「because it relieves」と続けるべきです。接続詞の後は文をつなげて話す練習をしましょう。

예시: I eat chocolate almost every day, but not too much. I mainly eat it when I'm studying because it relieves my tiredness and boosts my energy.

제안: 時制の使い方が間違っています（現在形と過去形の混在）。また、文が短く断片的で、つなぎ言葉が不足しています。過去の習慣を話す際は過去形を使い、文をつなげて話す練習をしましょう。

예시: Yes, I ate sweets quite often, especially chocolate. My father bought me souvenirs from many countries, and I really enjoyed them.

제안: 文法ミスや不自然な表現が多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。例えば「chocolate cannot can help improve. Focus.」は意味不明です。正しい文法と語彙を使い、論理的に話す練習をしましょう。

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because of its unique and delicious flavor. Also, scientific evidence shows that chocolate can help improve focus, which makes it even more popular.

제안: 全体的に良いですが、「buy much chocolate」や「my family's」は不自然です。量を表すときは「a lot of chocolate」や「my family」と言いましょう。

예시: My favorite flavor of chocolate is Monta because it combines the bitterness of green tea with the sweetness of chocolate. Every time I visit Kyoto, I buy a lot of chocolate as souvenirs for my friends and my family.

제안: とても良い回答ですが、「express your feeling」は「feelings」の複数形にするとより自然です。さらに、もう少し具体的な例を加えると良いでしょう。

예시: Yes, I think giving chocolate as a gift is a great way to express your feelings. For example, on Valentine's Day, many people give handmade chocolates to show their love and appreciation. Also, chocolate is a popular and sweet gift that almost everyone enjoys.

× I like eating chocolate because sweet taste of.

✓ I like eating chocolate because of its sweet taste.

The original sentence lacks proper sentence structure and prepositions. 'Because sweet taste of' is incorrect; the correct form is 'because of its sweet taste' to express the reason properly.

× It makes me feel.

✓ It makes me feel happy and fulfilled.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks an object complement. 'It makes me feel' requires an adjective or noun to complete the meaning.

× Happy and gave me fulfillment.

✓ It makes me feel happy and gives me fulfillment.

The original sentence mixes present and past tense incorrectly. Since the context is general, present tense 'gives' should be used to maintain consistency.

× I eat chocolate almost every day but not too much.

✓ I eat chocolate almost every day, but not too much.

A comma is needed before 'but' to correctly join two independent clauses.

× I mainly eat it when I'm studying because.

✓ I mainly eat it when I'm studying because it relieves my tiredness and boosts my energy.

The sentence is incomplete; 'because' should be followed by a reason. Also, 'boost' should be 'boosts' to agree with singular subject 'it'.

× It relieves my tiredness and boost my energy.

✓ It relieves my tiredness and boosts my energy.

The verb 'boost' should be in third person singular form 'boosts' to agree with the singular subject 'it'.

× Yes, I eat sweet quite often, especially chocolate.

✓ Yes, I ate sweets quite often, especially chocolate.

The question is about past habits, so past tense 'ate' should be used. Also, 'sweet' should be plural 'sweets' to refer to candies in general.

× My father bought me souvenir from.

✓ My father bought me souvenirs from many countries.

The sentence is incomplete and missing plural form and preposition. 'Souvenir' should be plural 'souvenirs' and 'from' should be followed by the source.

× Many countries.

✓ many countries.

This fragment is incomplete as a sentence; it should be connected to the previous sentence properly.

× And I enjoyed having it.

✓ And I enjoyed having them.

Since 'souvenirs' is plural, the pronoun should be 'them' instead of 'it'.

× I think chocolate is popular Rd. worldwide because of its unique and delicious flavor.

✓ I think chocolate is popular worldwide because of its unique and delicious flavor.

'Rd.' is unclear and unnecessary; it should be removed for clarity.

× Also, scientific evidence that showed that chocolate cannot can help improve.

✓ Also, scientific evidence shows that chocolate can help improve focus.

The sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. 'Cannot can' is incorrect; it should be 'can'. Also, 'showed' should be present tense 'shows' to match the context.

× Focus.

✓ focus.

This fragment should be part of the previous sentence, not standalone.

× Make it popular.

✓ This makes it popular.

The sentence is incomplete and needs a subject and verb to be correct.

× My favorite flavor of chocolate is Monta because it combines the bitterness of green tea with the sweetness of chocolate.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is Matcha because it combines the bitterness of green tea with the sweetness of chocolate.

Assuming 'Monta' is a typo for 'Matcha', which is a known flavor combining green tea and chocolate.

× Every time I visit Code OH, I buy much chocolate as souvenirs for my friends and my family's.

✓ Every time I visit Kyoto, I buy a lot of chocolate as souvenirs for my friends and my family.

'Code OH' seems to be a typo for 'Kyoto'. 'Much chocolate' is incorrect in affirmative sentences; 'a lot of chocolate' is appropriate. 'Family's' should be 'family' without apostrophe.

× my family's.

✓ my family.

'Family's' is possessive and incorrect here; the plural noun 'family' without apostrophe is correct.

× Yes, I think giving chocolate as a gift is a great idea to express your feeling.

✓ Yes, I think giving chocolate as a gift is a great idea to express your feelings.

'Feeling' should be plural 'feelings' to refer to emotions generally.

× For example, on Valentine's Day, many people give handmade chocolate to show their love and appreciation to others.

✓ For example, on Valentine's Day, many people give handmade chocolates to show their love and appreciation to others.

'Chocolate' should be plural 'chocolates' when referring to multiple pieces given as gifts.

× Also, chocolate is a popular and sweet gift that almost everyone enjoys.

✓ Also, chocolate is a popular and sweet gift that almost everyone enjoys.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.