Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, followed by specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because I have loved it since childhood. My parents and relatives often gave me chocolate as a treat, which made it special. I especially like its sweet taste, and as someone who loves sweets, chocolate is my favorite snack.

제안: Your answer needs clearer structure and grammar. Start with a direct response, then explain why you sometimes skip chocolate. Use linking words like 'however' or 'because' to connect ideas. Avoid repetition and be specific about frequency.

예시: I eat chocolate regularly, but sometimes I avoid it because it can cause dental problems. However, I try to enjoy it often since I really like its taste.

제안: Your answer is confusing and has many grammatical mistakes. Provide a clear topic sentence answering the question, then explain your parents' influence on your chocolate consumption. Use linking words to organize your ideas logically.

예시: No, I did not eat chocolate often as a kid because my parents were strict about my health. They believed that chocolate could harm my teeth, so they limited how much I could have.

제안: Your answer has a good main idea but needs clearer expression and better sentence structure. Use linking words to connect your points and provide specific reasons why chocolate is popular globally, such as taste variety and packaging.

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide mainly because of its delicious taste. Many people love sweets, and chocolate comes in different flavors and packaging, which appeals to a wide audience. For example, dark chocolate is especially popular among adults.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your favorite chocolate flavor, then give specific examples. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid redundancy.

예시: My favorite chocolate flavor is dark chocolate, especially from well-known brands. I also enjoy Kit Kat because it has a crispy wafer inside, which adds a nice texture.

제안: Your answer has a good idea but needs clearer expression and better grammar. Begin with a direct answer, then explain your reasoning with specific details. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: Yes, I think chocolate makes a great gift because many people enjoy it. However, it's important to know if the person likes chocolate before giving it. Chocolate is especially popular as a gift for children since they usually love sweets.

× Famous from my childhood.

✓ It has been famous since my childhood.

The original sentence lacks a subject and verb, making it incomplete. Adding 'It has been' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.

× My father Moran, mom bought me chocolate and sometimes my relatives.

✓ My father Moran and my mom bought me chocolate, and sometimes my relatives did too.

The original sentence is missing conjunctions and proper pronoun usage, causing confusion. Adding 'and' and clarifying the subject improves clarity.

× Keeps bought me some chocolate when they came to our house.

✓ They kept buying me some chocolate when they came to our house.

'Keeps' is incorrect here; the correct past tense verb is 'kept'. Also, the sentence needs a subject 'They' to be complete.

× As a sweet lover, I love chocolate much.

✓ As a sweet lover, I love chocolate very much.

The phrase 'love chocolate much' is incorrect; 'very much' is the proper adverbial phrase to express strong liking.

× I eat chocolate regular basis but sometimes I skip it because it causes dental problem as people up sensitive truth.

✓ I eat chocolate on a regular basis, but sometimes I skip it because it causes dental problems as people's teeth are sensitive.

The phrase 'regular basis' needs the preposition 'on'. Also, 'dental problem' should be plural 'dental problems'. The phrase 'people up sensitive truth' is unclear and corrected to 'people's teeth are sensitive' for clarity.

× I skipped chocolate sometime but I want to consume it at a regular basis.

✓ I skipped chocolate sometimes, but I want to consume it on a regular basis.

The word 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. Also, 'at a regular basis' should be 'on a regular basis'.

× Night actually not I didn't eat chocolate when I already eat very often because though I love chocolate very much that my father mom was very strict about my health and truth me Chocolate harms our truth.

✓ Actually, no. I didn't eat chocolate often when I was a kid because, although I loved chocolate very much, my father and mom were very strict about my health and told me chocolate harms our teeth.

The original sentence is fragmented and confusing. Reordering and adding missing words clarifies the meaning and corrects tense and pronoun errors.

× That's why they predict.

✓ That's why they prohibited it.

The word 'predict' is incorrect in this context; likely the intended word is 'prohibited' or 'prevented'. Correcting the verb clarifies the meaning.

× Maximum time we can see a sweet love around the world love chocolate most than other who don't like sweets but different packaging and taste and also dark chocolate is very much popular.

✓ Most of the time, we can see sweet lovers around the world who love chocolate more than others who don't like sweets. Different packaging and tastes exist, and dark chocolate is very popular.

The phrase 'Maximum time' is incorrect; 'Most of the time' is appropriate. 'Love chocolate most than other' should be 'love chocolate more than others'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× I like that's a pretty famous and there are lots of brand of Dutch chocolate, but among all of those chocolates flavor.

✓ I like that; it's pretty famous, and there are lots of brands of Dutch chocolate, but among all those chocolate flavors...

The sentence is incomplete and has pronoun errors. 'Brand' should be plural 'brands', and 'chocolates flavor' should be 'chocolate flavors'.

× I love the brand of brand dark chocolate famous and also I like Kit Kat chocolate with include wafer into it.

✓ I love the famous brand of dark chocolate, and I also like Kit Kat chocolate, which includes wafer inside it.

The original sentence is awkward and repetitive. Rephrasing improves clarity and grammar.

× They also test missed.

✓ They also taste good.

'Test missed' is incorrect; likely intended is 'taste good' to describe the flavor.

× I think chocolate is of a good gift.

✓ I think chocolate is a good gift.

The phrase 'of a good gift' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'a good gift'.

× As two others, good things to give to anyone and but we have to notice if he or she like chocolate or not.

✓ Like other good things, it is nice to give to anyone, but we have to notice if he or she likes chocolate or not.

The phrase 'As two others' is incorrect; 'Like other' is appropriate. Also, 'he or she like' should be 'he or she likes' for subject-verb agreement.

× It's really a very good kid for kids, mainly because they enjoy chocolate very much.

✓ It's really a very good gift for kids, mainly because they enjoy chocolate very much.

The word 'kid' is incorrect here; it should be 'gift' to fit the context.