Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer has some good points but contains grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Try to make your sentences clear and concise, avoid repetition, and use correct vocabulary. For example, say "I like eating chocolate occasionally because it has a rich and satisfying taste. It also contains ingredients that release happy hormones, making people feel good."

예시: I like eating chocolate occasionally because it has a rich and satisfying taste. Moreover, it contains ingredients that release happy hormones, which make people feel good.

제안: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and unclear. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Also, avoid fragmented sentences and unclear phrases.

예시: I eat chocolate every day, usually a small bar or just a bite. My favorite flavor is dark chocolate because it is rich and satisfying.

제안: Your answer has good content but some sentences are fragmented and unclear. Try to connect your ideas smoothly and avoid incomplete sentences. Use linking words to improve coherence.

예시: As a child, I often ate chocolate as a treat from my parents or guests when I behaved well. I also remember sharing chocolates with my friends and family, although I usually received only a small piece rather than a whole bar.

제안: Your answer covers good points but has grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Try to use complete sentences and linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide for several reasons. Firstly, its sweet taste appeals to people of all ages. Additionally, when combined with dry fruits, it offers a delicious nutty flavor. Moreover, effective marketing also contributes to its popularity.

제안: Your answer has good ideas but is unclear and contains fragmented sentences. Try to express your opinion clearly and use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

예시: My favourite flavour of chocolate is dark chocolate because it is neither too sweet nor too bitter. It has a rich taste that I find very appealing, especially when combined with nuts and dry fruits.

제안: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear but could be improved by correcting grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words to make your points flow better.

예시: I think chocolate makes a great gift because it is associated with celebrations. People often give chocolates on occasions like Valentine's Day or when someone achieves a good result. Therefore, if you are unsure what to gift, chocolate is a convenient and appreciated choice.

× Yes, I like grabbing bar of chocolate once in awhile as a treat.

✓ Yes, I like grabbing a bar of chocolate once in a while as a treat.

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'bar of chocolate' and 'once in awhile' should be 'once in a while'. Articles are necessary before singular countable nouns, and the phrase 'once in a while' is the correct idiomatic expression.

× Becauses it offers a rich and satisfying test.

✓ Because it offers a rich and satisfying taste.

The word 'Becauses' is a misspelling of 'Because' and 'test' should be 'taste' to correctly describe the flavor. Correct spelling and word choice are important for clarity.

× Moreover, it is known to it is known. O as ingredient which releases the happy hormones which make people feel good hands.

✓ Moreover, it is known as an ingredient which releases happy hormones that make people feel good.

The original sentence is fragmented and repetitive. Correct sentence structure requires removing redundancy and clarifying the subject and verb agreement. 'Happy hormones' is the correct term, and 'that' is used to introduce the relative clause.

× I love eating chocolates every day.

✓ I love eating chocolate every day.

'Chocolate' is generally used as an uncountable noun when referring to the substance in general. Using 'chocolates' implies individual pieces or types, but here the general term is more appropriate.

× I treat myself every day with a bar of chocolate or even after a mills or even a bite of a chocolate is sufficient for me.

✓ I treat myself every day with a bar of chocolate or even a bite of chocolate is sufficient for me.

The phrase 'after a mills' is unclear and likely incorrect. Also, 'a bite of a chocolate' should be 'a bite of chocolate' as 'chocolate' is uncountable here. Prepositions and articles need to be used correctly for clarity.

× Moreover, add one of my favorite flavor is the dark chocolate. Hands.

✓ Moreover, one of my favorite flavors is dark chocolate.

The sentence is fragmented and contains unnecessary words like 'add' and 'Hands'. Correct sentence structure requires a clear subject and predicate without extraneous words.

× I like to have it every day. Which is quite rich and satisfying in tires.

✓ I like to have it every day, which is quite rich and satisfying in taste.

The sentence fragment 'Which is quite rich and satisfying in tires' is incorrect. It should be connected to the previous sentence with a comma and 'tires' is a misspelling of 'taste'.

× As a child, I enjoyed chocolate every day as a trick by my parents or guest whenever I acted nice or helped them out.

✓ As a child, I enjoyed chocolate every day as a treat from my parents or guests whenever I acted nicely or helped them out.

'Trick' should be 'treat' to convey the correct meaning. 'Guest' should be plural 'guests'. 'Acted nice' should be 'acted nicely' as an adverb modifies the verb. Past tense 'enjoyed' is correct.

× However, they always gave me just. Bite of chocolate instead of the whole Cadbury. Joe.

✓ However, they always gave me just a bite of chocolate instead of the whole Cadbury bar.

The sentence is fragmented and missing articles. 'Just a bite' is correct quantifier usage. 'Cadbury Joe' seems to be a mishearing or typo; 'Cadbury bar' is more appropriate.

× There are many reasons due to which chocolate is popular. One of the reason is it's test it's very.

✓ There are many reasons why chocolate is popular. One of the reasons is its taste; it's very

'One of the reason' should be 'one of the reasons' to match plural. 'It's test' should be 'its taste' (possessive pronoun). The sentence is incomplete but corrected for grammar.

× Sweet and appealing to the people that everyone right from children to adults everyone enjoy it and when combined with the dry fruits it gives a nutty flavor.

✓ Sweet and appealing to people so that everyone, from children to adults, enjoys it, and when combined with dry fruits, it gives a nutty flavor.

'Everyone enjoy' should be 'everyone enjoys' for subject-verb agreement. 'The people that everyone' is awkward; 'people so that everyone' is clearer. Articles before 'dry fruits' are unnecessary.

× More over the other is the marketing.

✓ Moreover, another reason is the marketing.

'More over' should be 'Moreover' as one word. 'The other' is vague; 'another reason' is clearer. Proper conjunctions improve sentence flow.

× When it comes to Coco, a dark chocolate is one of my favorite flavor because it is not too sweet.

✓ When it comes to cocoa, dark chocolate is one of my favorite flavors because it is not too sweet.

'Coco' should be 'cocoa'. 'A dark chocolate' is incorrect; 'dark chocolate' is uncountable here. 'Favorite flavor' should be plural 'favorite flavors' to match 'one of'.

× You are not too. Bitter.

✓ It is not too bitter.

'You are not too bitter' is incorrect in context; the subject is chocolate, so 'It is not too bitter' is correct. Also, the sentence is fragmented.

× It gives a range of model taste which is quite appealing to me and I enjoy it with. The nerds in the dry fruits.

✓ It gives a range of mild tastes which is quite appealing to me, and I enjoy it with nuts and dry fruits.

'Model taste' should be 'mild taste'. 'The nerds' is likely a mishearing of 'nuts'. The sentence is fragmented and needs proper punctuation.

× Celebration and chocolate go hand in hand.

✓ Celebration and chocolate go hand in hand.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× People like to give chocolates on the occasions such as Valentine or when someone's secured first position in a class.

✓ People like to give chocolates on occasions such as Valentine's Day or when someone has secured first position in a class.

'On the occasions' should be 'on occasions'. 'Valentine' should be 'Valentine's Day'. 'Someone's secured' should be 'someone has secured' for correct tense and auxiliary verb.

× So yes, it is the best way to give someone a chocolate if there is no idea of what to gift, chocolate is one of the best and most convenient give.

✓ So yes, it is the best way to give someone chocolate if there is no idea of what to gift; chocolate is one of the best and most convenient gifts.

'A chocolate' is incorrect; 'chocolate' is uncountable here. 'Give' should be 'gifts' as a noun. Sentence structure improved with a semicolon.