Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to give a clear and concise answer directly addressing the question. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use simple, correct sentences and explain your preference with reasons logically.

예시: Yes, I like eating chocolate, especially dark chocolate, because it is healthier than other types. However, I avoid eating it in large amounts to maintain my health.

제안: Provide a clear frequency and explain your reason with linking words to make your answer coherent. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear words.

예시: I usually eat dark chocolate during my menstrual period because it helps control my mood swings and reduce stomach cramps.

제안: Answer directly and clearly. Avoid hesitation and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details about your childhood habits.

예시: I did not eat chocolate often as a kid because I was not very fond of sweets. I preferred to save chocolates and eat them occasionally.

제안: Focus on clear and logical explanation. Use correct vocabulary and linking words to connect your ideas. Avoid unclear or incorrect words and phrases.

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because of its delicious taste and variety of flavours. Many people enjoy it as a treat or gift.

제안: Give a clear answer with correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Explain your preference with specific reasons using linking words.

예시: My favourite chocolate flavours are forest fruit and butterscotch because they taste light and are not too sweet.

제안: Provide a clear and complete answer. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid hesitation. Explain why chocolates make good gifts with specific reasons.

예시: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because many people, especially children, love it. Giving chocolates can make people happy and show you care.

× I like eating chocolates, mostly the dark chocolates, but I don't prefer eating all the time in the hair.

✓ I like eating chocolate, mostly dark chocolate, but I don't prefer eating it all the time in large quantities.

The word 'chocolates' is plural but generally 'chocolate' is uncountable when referring to the substance. Also, 'in the hair' is incorrect; it should be 'in large quantities' or 'all the time'. The plural form 'chocolates' is not appropriate here as it refers to the general substance, not individual pieces.

× I like dark chocolates becauses, uh, I was very health conscious and very health conscious person so.

✓ I like dark chocolate because I am a very health-conscious person.

The word 'becauses' is incorrect; it should be 'because'. Also, the sentence is repetitive and incomplete. The conjunction 'so' at the end is unnecessary. The sentence should be concise and grammatically correct.

× Aye. I hopefully have a carrier dark chocolate with me all the time during my menstrual period.

✓ Yes. I hopefully have a bar of dark chocolate with me all the time during my menstrual period.

'Carrier dark chocolate' is incorrect; it should be 'a bar of dark chocolate'. Also, 'Aye' is informal and 'Yes' is more appropriate. The singular form 'a bar' is needed to specify the quantity.

× I prefer eating a dark chocolate that helps to control my mood swings and reduce my stomach cramps.

✓ I prefer eating dark chocolate that helps to control my mood swings and reduce my stomach cramps.

The article 'a' before 'dark chocolate' is incorrect because 'dark chocolate' is uncountable here. Removing 'a' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× Apparently I don't think so because I'm not a very sweet person. I used to eat a chocolate or a a.

✓ Apparently, I don't think so because I'm not a very sweet person. I used to eat chocolate occasionally.

The phrase 'a chocolate or a a' is incomplete and incorrect. 'Chocolate' is uncountable, so 'a chocolate' is incorrect unless referring to a piece. The sentence is corrected to express occasional eating properly.

× I'm a person of saving the chocolate or a food and having a little bit time to time.

✓ I'm a person who saves chocolate or food and eats a little bit from time to time.

The phrase 'person of saving' is incorrect; it should be 'person who saves'. Also, 'having a little bit time to time' is incorrect; it should be 'eats a little bit from time to time'.

× I can't detail.

✓ I can't explain in detail.

The phrase 'I can't detail' is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'explain in detail' clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× Obviously, the chocolate is redmage popular because of its taste it.

✓ Obviously, chocolate is very popular because of its taste.

The word 'redmage' is incorrect and likely a mispronunciation or typo. Also, 'the chocolate' is unnecessary; 'chocolate' as a general noun is better. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammar.

× And the flavors diff radius flavors that are. Publishing that are entering to the society.

✓ And the different flavors that are being introduced into society.

The original sentence is unclear and contains incorrect words and prepositions. 'Diff radius flavors' and 'publishing' are incorrect. The corrected sentence uses proper vocabulary and prepositions.

× Many people are attracted to this.

✓ Many people are attracted to it.

The pronoun 'this' is less appropriate here; 'it' refers better to the concept of chocolate's popularity. The sentence is corrected for natural usage.

× I like chocolate forest and butterscotch the most among the all the flavors of the chocolay becaused I feel very.

✓ I like forest and butterscotch chocolate the most among all the flavors because I feel very...

The phrase 'chocolate forest' is incorrect; it should be 'forest chocolate'. Also, 'among the all the flavors' is incorrect; it should be 'among all the flavors'. The sentence is corrected for adjective order and article usage.

× Light in the light in the suite in without too much concentrated of the sugary content and the sugary taste in the.

✓ Light and sweet without too much concentration of sugary content and sugary taste.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. The correction provides a clear and grammatically correct description.

× Obviously, yes, because. Oh. Most of the kids love eating chocolate and giving gifts as a.

✓ Obviously, yes, because most kids love eating chocolate and giving gifts as a...

The phrase 'giving gifts as a' is incomplete and incorrect. It should be completed or rephrased. The correction removes unnecessary words and improves clarity.

× And giving chocolates as gift is a incredible idea becauses gives are meant to make the people happy and chocolates are the best solution.

✓ Giving chocolates as gifts is an incredible idea because gifts are meant to make people happy, and chocolates are the best solution.

The sentence has multiple errors: 'as gift' should be 'as gifts'; 'a incredible' should be 'an incredible'; 'becauses' should be 'because'; 'gives' should be 'gifts'; 'the people' should be 'people'. The sentence is corrected for grammar and clarity.