Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence, followed by specific reasons. Avoid repetition and improve sentence clarity. For example, mention which types of chocolate you like and dislike, and explain why, using correct grammar.

예시: Yes, I like eating chocolate, especially milk and strawberry flavours. However, I avoid peanut-flavoured chocolate because I am allergic to peanuts.

제안: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains filler words. Try to give a direct answer first, then add supporting details using linking words. Keep sentences concise and grammatically correct.

예시: I usually eat chocolate two or three times a week, mostly when I really crave it. Otherwise, I don't eat it very often.

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical mistakes. Avoid unnecessary fillers and irrelevant information. Focus on answering the question directly and provide specific details if possible.

예시: Yes, I ate chocolate very often as a child, almost every day. I think that habit affected my teeth negatively.

제안: Your answer has some good ideas but is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect your ideas and be more specific. Also, avoid vague phrases and improve sentence structure.

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes sweet and creamy, which many children enjoy. Additionally, its attractive packaging appeals to consumers.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Provide a clear topic sentence and explain why you like those flavours using correct grammar and linking words.

예시: My favourite flavours of chocolate are milk and strawberry because they are sweeter and creamier than other types.

제안: Your answer has relevant points but is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Use linking words to organise your ideas and be more precise. Avoid vague expressions and improve sentence structure.

예시: It depends on the recipient. Chocolate is a good gift for children because they usually enjoy it. However, for adults, it might be better to choose a more formal gift.

× Yes, personally I don't like is some chocolate for example milk flavor or maybe strawberry flavor.

✓ Yes, personally I don't like some chocolates, for example milk flavor or maybe strawberry flavor.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'is' and lacks plural form for 'chocolate'. 'Chocolate' should be pluralized to 'chocolates' when referring to types, and 'is' is unnecessary here. The pronoun usage is also awkward; removing 'is' clarifies the meaning.

× But I don't like like some types of chocolate like peanut flavor because I have allergic to it.

✓ But I don't like some types of chocolate, like peanut flavor, because I am allergic to it.

The phrase 'have allergic to it' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'am allergic to it'. Also, the repeated 'like' is redundant and should be removed for clarity.

× For now I eat chocolate for like in two or three times a week like when I really want to eat it then I will buy some do it but usually I don't need.

✓ For now, I eat chocolate about two or three times a week, like when I really want to eat it, then I will buy some, but usually I don't need to.

The sentence has awkward phrasing and missing prepositions. 'For like in two or three times a week' should be 'about two or three times a week'. Also, 'buy some do it' is unclear; it should be 'buy some'. The phrase 'usually I don't need' is incomplete and should be 'usually I don't need to'.

× Uh, yes I do. When I was a child I eat chocolate very often.

✓ Uh, yes I did. When I was a child, I ate chocolate very often.

The question is about past habits, so past tense should be used. 'I do' should be 'I did', and 'I eat' should be 'I ate' to match the past context.

× Like I ate it every day, so.

✓ I ate it every day.

The phrase 'so' at the end is unnecessary and incomplete. Removing it makes the sentence clearer and grammatically correct.

× Uh, it also affect my TS.

✓ Uh, it also affects my TS.

The verb should agree with the singular subject 'it', so 'affect' should be 'affects'. Also, 'TS' is unclear but assumed to be a noun here.

× My thesis become very bad now.

✓ My thesis has become very bad now.

The verb 'become' should be in the present perfect tense 'has become' to indicate a change up to now.

× So the first reason the flies being famous, I think that it's taste is it sweet and creamy.

✓ So the first reason it is famous, I think that its taste is sweet and creamy.

'The flies being famous' is incorrect; it should be 'it is famous'. Also, 'it's taste is it sweet and creamy' should be 'its taste is sweet and creamy'. 'It's' is a contraction for 'it is', while 'its' is possessive.

× So like I believe that most of the children would like the taste and it also buys packaging is packaging seems like very fascinating and attracting people.

✓ So I believe that most children would like the taste, and its packaging seems very fascinating and attractive to people.

The phrase 'it also buys packaging is packaging' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'its packaging seems'. Also, 'attracting people' should be 'attractive to people' for correct adjective use.

× Uh, my favorite flavor of chocolate I think is mostly about milk flavor and strawberry flavor becaused esta flavor is just few more sweet and creamy.

✓ Uh, my favorite flavors of chocolate are mostly milk flavor and strawberry flavor because these flavors are just a bit sweeter and creamier.

'Becaused esta flavor' is incorrect; it should be 'because these flavors'. Also, 'few more sweet and creamy' should be 'a bit sweeter and creamier' for correct comparative adjective use.

× Actually, it depends on the other side, Like if the other side is a child, you can send it as a gift because like most of the children like this taste and flavors.

✓ Actually, it depends on the other person. If the other person is a child, you can send it as a gift because most children like this taste and these flavors.

'Other side' is incorrect when referring to a person; 'other person' is appropriate. Also, 'like this taste and flavors' should be 'like this taste and these flavors' for clarity.

× But if the other side is a doubt, yeah.

✓ But if the other person is an adult, yeah.

'Other side is a doubt' is incorrect. Likely intended 'other person is an adult'. 'Doubt' is a noun meaning uncertainty, not a person.

× So I don't think it's very good idea to send chocolate, I guess, as a gift.

✓ So I don't think it's a very good idea to send chocolate as a gift, I guess.

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'very good idea'. Also, the commas are misplaced; the phrase 'I guess' should be at the end for better flow.

× If you want to ask something like you may prepare more formal gift.

✓ If you want to ask for something, you may prepare a more formal gift.

The phrase 'ask something like' is incorrect; it should be 'ask for something'. Also, 'more formal gift' needs the article 'a' before it.