Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Make your answer more concise and clear by directly stating your preference and reason. Also, correct any unclear or incorrect terms.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate, especially dark chocolate with 90% cocoa content because it tastes rich and is healthier than other types.

제안: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using linking words to connect ideas smoothly and by avoiding filler phrases like 'for example' when not necessary.

예시: I used to eat chocolate frequently as a child, but now I usually have it about once a month.

제안: Avoid vague expressions and unclear words like 'kit'. Use precise vocabulary and explain your reasons clearly with linking words.

예시: Yes, I ate chocolate often as a child because it brings joy and has a delicious taste that many kids enjoy.

제안: Improve sentence structure and clarity. Use linking words to organize your ideas logically and avoid confusing phrases like 'taste different colors'.

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it comes in various flavors and shapes, which attract people, but most importantly, it tastes delicious.

제안: Good answer but could be improved by adding linking words and slightly more detail to enrich the response.

예시: My favourite flavour is milk chocolate because it is creamy and melts smoothly in the mouth, making it incredibly enjoyable.

제안: Avoid unclear and incorrect phrases like 'convert Lib' and 'wide. Oh. White famous'. Use clear, coherent sentences with linking words to explain your opinion.

예시: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because many people give it along with flowers to celebrate special occasions or to show appreciation.

× I love eating chocolate at.

✓ I love eating chocolate.

The preposition 'at' is incorrectly used at the end of the sentence. It is unnecessary and should be removed to make the sentence grammatically correct.

× sometimes I choose to eat the dark chocolate one that contains 90% of FERC account and it just tastes so good.

✓ sometimes I choose to eat the dark chocolate that contains 90% cocoa and it just tastes so good.

The phrase 'FERC account' is incorrect and unclear. It should be replaced with 'cocoa' to correctly describe the chocolate content. Also, 'one' is unnecessary here and can be omitted.

× currently I usually eat chocolate like once a month for example.

✓ currently, I usually eat chocolate about once a month, for example.

The phrase 'like once a month' is informal and awkward. Replacing 'like' with 'about' and adding commas improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× because of how joyful it makes the kit feels and the wonderful taste that you get to have.

✓ because of how joyful it makes the kid feel and the wonderful taste that you get to have.

The word 'kit' is a typo and should be 'kid'. Also, 'feels' should be 'feel' to agree with the subject 'it' in this context.

× The shapes also matters it.

✓ The shapes also matter.

The phrase 'matters it' is incorrect. The verb should be 'matter' to agree with the plural subject 'shapes', and 'it' is unnecessary and should be removed.

× The shapes also matters it.

✓ The shapes also matter.

The verb 'matters' does not agree with the plural subject 'shapes'. The correct verb form is 'matter'.

× Attracts the person who wants the chocolate and the most thing is that the taste, of course.

✓ They attract the person who wants the chocolate, and the most important thing is the taste, of course.

The sentence lacks a clear subject. Adding 'They' clarifies that 'shapes' attract people. Also, 'the most thing' is incorrect and should be 'the most important thing'.

× My favorite flavor of chocolate is milk chocolate as it's so creamy and it tastes so incredible it melts in your mouth.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is milk chocolate because it's so creamy and tastes incredible; it melts in your mouth.

Using 'as' is less clear than 'because' for cause. Also, 'so incredible it melts' is a run-on; separating with a semicolon improves clarity.

× when they're visiting someone to convert Lib congratulate them for some event and it's actually wide.

✓ when they're visiting someone to congratulate them for some event, and it's actually widespread.

The phrase 'convert Lib' is unclear and likely a typo; it should be removed. 'Wide' is incorrect here; 'widespread' correctly describes something common.

× Oh. White famous between people gifting chocolates.

✓ Oh, it's quite famous among people gifting chocolates.

The phrase 'White famous' is incorrect and unclear. Replacing it with 'quite famous' and 'among' improves grammatical correctness and clarity.