Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains irrelevant information. Try to give a direct response to the question with clear reasons and avoid unrelated details. Use simple and correct sentences to express your ideas naturally.

예시: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it tastes sweet and soft. It reminds me of my childhood, and I enjoy the crunchy texture of some chocolates like milk chocolate bars.

제안: Your answer is confusing and has grammatical errors. Try to answer directly how often you eat chocolate, and use linking words to explain exceptions or special occasions clearly.

예시: Currently, I eat chocolate less often because I am trying to be healthy. Normally, I eat one chocolate bar a day, but during parties or birthdays, I eat more.

제안: Your answer has some unclear words and repetition. Try to mention specific chocolate brands you liked as a child and explain why, using clear sentences and linking words.

예시: Yes, I ate a lot of chocolates when I was a kid. I especially liked Galaxy and Mars chocolates because of their coconut flavor. I also enjoyed Kit Kat and Nestle milk chocolate in India.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains many errors. Try to explain clearly why chocolate is popular, mentioning its taste, affordability, and emotional connection, using linking words for coherence.

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes sweet and delicious. Moreover, it reminds people of their childhood. Also, it is affordable, so many children and teenagers can enjoy it.

제안: Your answer is fragmented and unclear. Try to state your favourite flavour clearly and explain why you like it, using complete sentences and linking words.

예시: My favourite flavour of chocolate is honey chocolate with nuts. I love it because the combination of sweet honey and crunchy nuts tastes amazing.

제안: Your answer is confusing and has grammatical mistakes. Try to give a clear opinion about giving chocolates as gifts, mentioning reasons like affordability and attractiveness, using linking words.

예시: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because it is affordable and looks attractive. For example, expensive chocolates like Ferrero Rocher are popular gifts.

× Yes, I like eating chocolate because they are so soft and sweet and I love specialist sneakers that are unique.

✓ Yes, I like eating chocolate because it is so soft and sweet and I love special chocolates that are unique.

The word 'chocolate' is singular and uncountable here, so 'they' should be 'it'. Also, 'specialist sneakers' seems incorrect in context; it should be 'special chocolates' to match the topic.

× I love the crunch bite at a harder they made table chocolate milk chocolate I specially dried protein bars are great and is a very good part of our childhood.

✓ I love the crunchy bite of harder table chocolate and milk chocolate. I especially like dried protein bars; they are a very good part of our childhood.

The sentence has incorrect adjective forms and unclear structure. 'Crunch bite' should be 'crunchy bite', 'harder they made table chocolate' is unclear and corrected to 'harder table chocolate'. 'I specially dried protein bars' is incorrect; it should be 'I especially like dried protein bars'. Also, 'is a very good part' should be 'they are a very good part' to agree with plural subject.

× Right now I am on right so I eat less often chocolate, but while in normal day I prefer only one bar of chocolate.

✓ Right now I am on a diet so I eat chocolate less often, but on a normal day I prefer only one bar of chocolate.

The phrase 'on right' is incorrect; it should be 'on a diet'. 'Eat less often chocolate' is awkward; 'eat chocolate less often' is correct. 'While in normal day' should be 'on a normal day'.

× In occasion in party and birthday parties I I have remember I've let it eat in that last time.

✓ On occasions like parties and birthdays, I remember I ate it the last time.

The sentence has redundant pronouns and incorrect verb forms. 'I I have remember I've let it eat' is incorrect; it should be 'I remember I ate it'. Also, 'in occasion in party and birthday parties' should be 'on occasions like parties and birthdays'.

× Yes, I ate ate a lot of junk mail in my childhood.

✓ Yes, I ate a lot of junk food in my childhood.

The word 'ate' is repeated unnecessarily. Also, 'junk mail' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'junk food'.

× Specialist Cynical Galaxy and Mars said are the best end of coconut flavor.

✓ Special Galaxy and Mars chocolates are the best, especially the coconut flavor.

'Specialist Cynical' is incorrect; likely meant 'Special Galaxy'. 'Said are the best end of coconut flavor' is unclear and corrected to 'are the best, especially the coconut flavor'.

× Bunty chocolate is also a good one.

✓ Bounty chocolate is also a good one.

The brand name is 'Bounty', not 'Bunty'. Also, 'chocolate' is singular here and used correctly.

× In India I try Kit Kat.

✓ In India, I tried Kit Kat.

Since the question is about past habits, past tense 'tried' is appropriate. Also, a comma after 'In India' improves clarity.

× Nestle chocolate Milk chocolate is very good.

✓ Nestle milk chocolate is very good.

'Milk chocolate' should not be capitalized. Also, 'Nestle' is a brand name and should be followed by 'milk chocolate' as a product description.

× Chocolate is popular around the world due to its witness and it will it reminds us of our childhood is have a great flavor dead attract teetotalers children teenager to eat them at the affordable sweet snack that a child can afford an it is very good and.

✓ Chocolate is popular around the world due to its sweetness and because it reminds us of our childhood. It has a great flavor and attracts children and teenagers as an affordable sweet snack that a child can afford.

The sentence contains many errors: 'witness' should be 'sweetness'; 'it will it reminds' is incorrect; 'is have' is wrong; 'dead attract teetotalers children teenager' is unclear and corrected to 'attracts children and teenagers'; 'an it is very good and' is incomplete and removed for clarity.

× My favorite flavor in chocolate is. Honey. Chocolate with nuts, I said Brand of sneaker. I loved it alot alot. No words to say this is my favorite one.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is honey chocolate with nuts. I love this brand of chocolate a lot. No words to say; this is my favorite one.

The sentence is fragmented and has incorrect words: 'I said Brand of sneaker' is incorrect and changed to 'this brand of chocolate'; 'alot' should be 'a lot'; sentence fragments are combined for clarity.

× Yes, I thought yes, I best gift that we can give to other because they are first of all they are affordable and it'll look charming while giving our show is expensive chocolate as a river in the market we can give them for Rocher.

✓ Yes, I think chocolate is the best gift we can give to others because, first of all, it is affordable and looks charming. Instead of expensive chocolates in the market, we can give them Ferrero Rocher.

The sentence has tense inconsistency ('thought' changed to 'think'), incorrect pronouns ('other' to 'others'), and unclear phrases ('giving our show is expensive chocolate as a river' corrected to 'instead of expensive chocolates in the market'). Also, 'Rocher' is corrected to 'Ferrero Rocher' for clarity.