Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan struktur kalimat agar jawaban lebih jelas dan alami. Gunakan kalimat yang langsung menjawab pertanyaan dan hindari pengulangan kata yang tidak perlu.

예시: I don't like eating too much chocolate because I find its flavor too sweet. Also, I want to stay healthy and reduce body fat.

제안: Gunakan kalimat yang jelas dan terstruktur untuk menjelaskan frekuensi makan cokelat. Hindari kalimat yang tidak lengkap dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk memperjelas maksud.

예시: The last time I ate chocolate was in senior high school because I felt it was hard to digest. Since then, I have stopped eating chocolate.

제안: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami serta langsung menjawab pertanyaan. Tambahkan detail yang relevan untuk memperkaya jawaban.

예시: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because most children love sweet foods like chocolate.

제안: Perbaiki pengucapan dan tata bahasa, serta gunakan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan terstruktur. Jelaskan alasan popularitas cokelat dengan contoh yang tepat.

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it symbolizes love, especially on occasions like Valentine's Day.

제안: Gunakan kalimat yang jelas dan hindari pengulangan kata. Jelaskan rasa cokelat favorit dengan kata-kata yang tepat dan mudah dimengerti.

예시: I don't like chocolate with nuts, but I prefer plain chocolate because it tastes good and is not too sweet.

제안: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami dan langsung. Jelaskan alasan mengapa cokelat cocok sebagai hadiah dengan kalimat yang jelas.

예시: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because it symbolizes love and affection between people.

× Home I'm not like too much chocolate because I think. Uh, do. The flower of chocolate is too sweet for me. And also I want to leave more healthy an decreased the part of my body.

✓ Honestly, I don't like chocolate too much because I think the flavor of chocolate is too sweet for me. Also, I want to live more healthily and decrease the fat in my body.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and has unclear phrasing. 'I'm not like' should be 'I don't like' to correctly express dislike. 'The flower' is a misspelling of 'flavor'. 'Leave more healthy' should be 'live more healthily' to use the correct adverb form. 'An decreased the part of my body' is incorrect; it should be 'decrease the fat in my body' for clarity and correctness.

× Itching when I was in a Senior High School is the last time I eating chocolate because I have ever felt the. My thought is so hard so I stop eating chocolate until now from junior high school.

✓ The last time I ate chocolate was when I was in Senior High School because I felt it was hard to stop eating chocolate since junior high school.

The sentence has multiple tense errors. 'Itching' is incorrect and unclear. 'I eating' should be 'I ate' to use the past tense. 'I have ever felt the' is incomplete and unclear. The sentence should be restructured to clearly express the past event and its reason.

× When I was kid, yes, because when we was kid, not just me, I think all of kids love chocolate an O. Uh, I think we love us with food.

✓ When I was a kid, yes, because when we were kids, not just me, I think all kids love chocolate. Uh, I think we love food.

'When I was kid' should be 'When I was a kid' to include the article. 'We was kid' should be 'we were kids' for subject-verb agreement and plural form. 'All of kids' should be 'all kids' without 'of'. 'Love us with food' is incorrect and should be 'love food'.

× I think chocolate is popular on the war because it symbol for the lovely Anne. Uh. Lovely day as we know Fallentine. It's symbol by chocolate.

✓ I think chocolate is popular around the world because it is a symbol of love. Uh, a lovely day as we know Valentine's Day is symbolized by chocolate.

'On the war' should be 'around the world' to indicate global popularity. 'It symbol for the lovely Anne' should be 'it is a symbol of love'. 'Fallentine' is a misspelling of 'Valentine's'. 'It's symbol by chocolate' should be 'is symbolized by chocolate' to use passive voice correctly.

× As well as Alexei. I don't like chocolate and nuts, but I think I would love I would love to flirt with the plane plane plane fly for. I think it's a good test, not too sweet but. Plane.

✓ As well as Alexei, I don't like chocolate with nuts, but I think I would love to try the plain flavor. I think it's a good taste, not too sweet but plain.

The sentence contains many unclear and incorrect words. 'Flirt with the plane plane plane fly for' is nonsensical and likely meant to be 'try the plain flavor'. 'Test' should be 'taste'. The sentence needs correction for clarity and correct adjective use.

× Uhm, yes I think. Because what I said before, chocolate is symbol of love, symbol of love each other. I think of what is good choice for the gift.

✓ Uhm, yes, I think so because, as I said before, chocolate is a symbol of love, a symbol of loving each other. I think it is a good choice for a gift.

The sentence lacks modal verb clarity and has article errors. 'I think of what is good choice' should be 'I think it is a good choice'. 'Symbol of love each other' is incorrect; it should be 'a symbol of loving each other'. Adding 'so' after 'I think' improves modal verb usage.