Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答有些语法错误和表达不自然，比如“becauses”应为“because”，句子结构不完整。建议简洁明了地表达观点，并避免重复。

예시: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it tastes delicious, sweet, and creamy. It is one of my favorite snacks. Also, eating chocolate releases chemicals in my brain that make me feel happy.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰，如“side”应为“say”，“keys”应为“teeth”。建议使用连贯的句子并正确表达频率和原因。

예시: Although I like eating chocolate, I usually don't eat it because I think it can harm my teeth. I only eat chocolate on special occasions like my friends' or family's birthday parties, and I enjoy sharing it with others.

제안: 回答中时态使用不当，如“eat”应为“ate”，且表达重复。建议使用正确时态并简洁表达。

예시: I hardly ever ate chocolate when I was a kid. Although I liked sweets, my mom didn't allow me to eat too much because she thought it would harm my teeth.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和用词不当，如“forwardable”应为“affordable”。建议使用准确词汇并组织连贯句子。

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide for many reasons. The main reason is that it is affordable. It is not too expensive and can be bought easily in shops and markets.

제안: 回答中句子断断续续，缺乏连贯性。建议使用完整句子并用连接词使表达更流畅。

예시: My favorite flavor of chocolate is definitely milk chocolate because it tastes sweet and creamy with a smooth texture. Some of my friends prefer dark chocolate, but I find it a little bitter.

제안: 回答中时态混乱，如“gave”应为“give”，且句子较长且重复。建议使用正确时态并简洁表达。

예시: Yes, definitely. Chocolate is one of the best gifts. I often give chocolates as birthday presents to my friends and family, and they always feel happy to receive and share them with me.

× Yes, I like eating chocolate becauses it tastes delicious, sweet and creamy.

✓ Yes, I like eating chocolate because it tastes delicious, sweet and creamy.

The word 'becauses' is incorrect; the correct conjunction is 'because' to indicate reason.

× Chocolate. It's one of my favorite snacks in this world.

✓ Chocolate is one of my favorite snacks in this world.

The sentence fragment 'Chocolate.' should be combined with the next sentence to form a complete sentence.

× By the way, eating chocolate can make my brain release of chemical substances called the field that makes me feel happy.

✓ By the way, eating chocolate can make my brain release chemical substances called the feel-good chemicals that make me feel happy.

The phrase 'release of chemical substances' is incorrect; 'release chemical substances' is correct. Also, 'the field' seems to be a mishearing or typo; 'feel-good chemicals' is more appropriate.

× Although I side I like eating chocolate, but actually usually I. Don't eat chocolate because I think it's little harm to my keys.

✓ Although I like eating chocolate, I usually don't eat chocolate because I think it's a little harmful to my teeth.

The sentence has redundant conjunctions 'Although' and 'but' and incorrect word order. Also, 'keys' should be 'teeth' and 'little harm' should be 'a little harmful'.

× I only eat chocolates on some special occasions like. My friend or my family's birthday parties and I like share chocolates with others.

✓ I only eat chocolate on some special occasions like my friends' or my family's birthday parties, and I like to share chocolate with others.

'Chocolates' should be 'chocolate' as an uncountable noun here. Also, 'friend' should be plural possessive 'friends'' to match 'birthday parties'. Added 'to' before 'share' for correct verb form.

× I hardly ever eat chocolate when I was a kid.

✓ I hardly ever ate chocolate when I was a kid.

The action happened in the past, so the verb should be in past tense 'ate' instead of present tense 'eat'.

× When I was kid, I like to I like to eat chocolate and other sweets, but my mom she didn't allowed me to eat too much because she thought that harm to my keys.

✓ When I was a kid, I liked to eat chocolate and other sweets, but my mom didn't allow me to eat too much because she thought it was harmful to my teeth.

Added article 'a' before 'kid'. Changed 'like' to past tense 'liked'. Removed redundant pronoun 'she'. 'Allowed' should be base form 'allow' after 'did'. 'That harm to my keys' corrected to 'it was harmful to my teeth'.

× Well. There are lots of reasons about why chocolate popular around the world.

✓ Well, there are lots of reasons why chocolate is popular around the world.

Added 'is' after 'chocolate' to complete the sentence. Removed unnecessary preposition 'about'.

× I think the main reason is because the price of chocolate is a forwardable chocolate.

✓ I think the main reason is because the price of chocolate is affordable.

'Forwardable' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'affordable' to describe price.

× It's not too expensive, it's cheap, you can buy it from any shops or any market.

✓ It's not too expensive; it's cheap, and you can buy it from any shop or market.

Added semicolon and conjunction 'and' to connect independent clauses properly. Changed 'shops' to singular 'shop' to match 'any'.

× Well, my favorite flavor of chocolate, it's definitely. Milk chocolate cause. It tastes. Sweet and creamy.

✓ Well, my favorite flavor of chocolate is definitely milk chocolate because it tastes sweet and creamy.

Combined fragmented sentences into one. 'Cause' changed to 'because'. Removed unnecessary periods.

× And its texture it's smooth.

✓ And its texture is smooth.

Corrected 'it's' to 'is' to properly link subject and predicate.

× And some of my friends. They like to eat dark chocolate, but in my opinion that's a little bitter.

✓ Some of my friends like to eat dark chocolate, but in my opinion, it's a little bitter.

Removed unnecessary period and pronoun 'They'. Added comma after 'opinion'. Changed 'that's' to 'it's' referring to 'dark chocolate'.

× Yes, definitely. I'm sure chocolate is one of the best gift.

✓ Yes, definitely. I'm sure chocolate is one of the best gifts.

'Gift' should be plural 'gifts' after 'one of the'.

× I usually I often gave chocolates as birthday gift to my friends or my family members and they loved to receive that and they always feel happy to get chocolate and share with me.

✓ I usually or often give chocolates as birthday gifts to my friends or family members, and they love to receive them and always feel happy to get chocolate and share it with me.

Changed past tense 'gave' and 'loved' to present tense 'give' and 'love' to match 'usually' and 'often'. 'Gift' changed to plural 'gifts'. Added 'them' and 'it' as pronouns for clarity.