Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ваш ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и избыточные выражения. Постарайтесь использовать более естественные и простые конструкции, избегая повторов и неправильных форм глаголов.

예시: Yes, I absolutely love chocolate and consider myself a chocolate lover. If it were healthy, I would eat it every day.

제안: В вашем ответе есть ошибки в использовании времен и грамматике. Старайтесь строить предложения правильно и ясно, чтобы ответ был понятен и логичен.

예시: To be honest, I try to eat chocolate every day, but sometimes it's difficult for me.

제안: Ваш ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и нечеткую структуру. Используйте правильные времена и соединительные слова для плавности речи.

예시: When I was a kid, my parents were strict and didn't allow me to eat chocolate often, but I used to sneak some and eat it when I was alone.

제안: Ответ неясен и содержит много ошибок. Старайтесь выражать мысли четко, использовать подходящую лексику и логические связки.

예시: In my opinion, chocolate is popular worldwide because it makes people happy and provides a pleasant feeling. Many people enjoy it as a treat.

제안: В ответе есть ошибки в словах и грамматике. Старайтесь использовать правильные слова и выражать свои мысли ясно и кратко.

예시: I don't have a favorite chocolate flavor because I like all kinds, but I would choose dark chocolate because I think it's healthier than others.

제안: Ответ нечеткий и содержит грамматические ошибки. Старайтесь строить предложения логично и использовать подходящие выражения для передачи мысли.

예시: From my experience, I would be happy to receive chocolate as a gift because I love it. However, when giving chocolate to others, it's important to know their preferences.

× Yes, I'm absolutely love chocolate and I can call myself.

✓ Yes, I absolutely love chocolate and I can call myself.

The verb 'love' should not be used with 'am' in this context. 'I'm absolutely love' is incorrect because 'am' is a form of 'to be' and should be followed by a present participle (-ing form) or an adjective, not a base verb. The correct form is 'I absolutely love'.

× A chocolate lover.

✓ I am a chocolate lover.

This is a sentence fragment lacking a subject and verb. To be a complete sentence, it needs a subject and verb, e.g., 'I am a chocolate lover.'

× I'm absolutely obsessed with chocolate an if it will be healthy for me, I would eat chocolate every day for each of the time.

✓ I'm absolutely obsessed with chocolate, and if it were healthy for me, I would eat chocolate every day all the time.

The conjunction 'an' is incorrect; it should be 'and'. Also, 'if it will be' is incorrect in conditional sentences; the past subjunctive 'if it were' is appropriate. 'For each of the time' is awkward; 'all the time' is the correct phrase.

× To be honest I eating chocolate every day but I trying to do this really but it's make me hard every time.

✓ To be honest, I eat chocolate every day, but I am really trying to stop because it's hard for me every time.

The verb 'eating' should be 'eat' to match the present simple tense. 'I trying' should be 'I am trying' to form the present continuous. 'It's make me hard' is incorrect; it should be 'it's hard for me' or 'it makes it hard for me.'

× When I was a kid. I have a strict parents who didn't allow me to eat chocolate really often, but I did.

✓ When I was a kid, I had strict parents who didn't allow me to eat chocolate very often, but I did.

'I have' should be 'I had' to match past tense. 'A strict parents' is incorrect; 'parents' is plural and should not have 'a'. 'Really often' is better expressed as 'very often.'

× Sneaking chocolate from them and eating when I was alone.

✓ I used to sneak chocolate from them and eat it when I was alone.

This is a sentence fragment lacking a subject and verb. 'Sneaking' should be 'I used to sneak' to indicate past habitual action. 'Eating' should be 'eat it' to complete the sentence.

× For my perspective, I think chocolate popular around the world is because it's a really important government from people and chocolate could make people happy with magical thing and I think chocolate is.

✓ From my perspective, I think chocolate is popular around the world because it is really important to people, and chocolate can make people happy like magic. I think chocolate is very important for many people because it can also stimulate the brain.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains incorrect phrases like 'important government from people' which is nonsensical. The sentence needs restructuring for clarity and correct word usage.

× For my point of view, I don't have any special flower from chocolate because I eat every kind of chocolate and I didn't have any special one and or any favorite one but I do want to make one.

✓ From my point of view, I don't have any special flavor of chocolate because I eat every kind of chocolate and I don't have any special or favorite one, but I would like to have one.

'For my point of view' should be 'From my point of view.' 'Flower from chocolate' is incorrect; it should be 'flavor of chocolate.' The sentence also needs correction in tense and conjunction usage.

× Favorite is the dark chocolate. I think it's more healthier than others.

✓ My favorite is dark chocolate. I think it's healthier than others.

'More healthier' is incorrect because 'healthier' is already a comparative adjective; 'more' is redundant. Also, 'Favorite is the dark chocolate' lacks a subject; 'My favorite is dark chocolate' is correct.

× But if I were saying from others people, I think you need to be clear unsure what you want.

✓ But if I were speaking for other people, I think you need to be clear about what you want.

'If I were saying from others people' is incorrect; 'speaking for other people' is correct. 'Clear unsure' is contradictory; it should be 'clear about.'