Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答有些重复和语法错误，建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免重复，并注意单词拼写和语法。可以用更自然的表达方式介绍喜欢巧克力的原因，并简要说明巧克力带来的愉悦感。

예시: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it is one of my favorite snacks. I enjoy its sweet and smooth taste. Moreover, chocolate can release a chemical called dopamine, which makes people feel happy.

제안: 回答中有语法和表达不清的问题，建议直接回答问题，避免重复，并用连词使句子更连贯。可以说明吃巧克力的频率和原因，并举例说明特殊场合。

예시: Although I like chocolate, I usually don't eat it often because it can harm my teeth. I only eat chocolate on special occasions, such as birthday parties, and I like to share it with others.

제안: 回答有重复且语法不准确，建议用一两句话直接回答问题，并用连词连接原因，表达更自然。

예시: When I was a kid, I liked chocolate, but I hardly ate it because my mother didn't allow me to eat too much sweets as they could harm my teeth.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清，建议用更准确的句子表达观点，使用连词使句子流畅，并具体说明巧克力的普及原因。

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it is affordable and easily available in most shops and markets, which makes it accessible to many people.

제안: 回答中有语法和表达不自然的问题，建议用完整句子表达喜好，并用连词比较不同口味，表达更清晰。

예시: My favorite flavor of chocolate is definitely milk chocolate because it tastes sweet and creamy with a smooth texture. Some of my friends prefer dark chocolate, but I find it a bit bitter.

제안: 回答有些断断续续，建议用连贯的句子表达观点，避免重复，并具体说明为什么巧克力是好礼物。

예시: Of course, I think chocolate is one of the best gifts. I often give it to my girlfriend, friends, or family members on their birthdays, and they always feel happy to receive it.

× It's one of my favorite snacks. And I like 88 'cause it tastes delicious sweet and smooth seat.

✓ It's one of my favorite snacks. And I like 88 'cause it tastes delicious, sweet, and smooth.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'delicious sweet and smooth seat' which is grammatically incorrect. The word 'seat' is misplaced and unnecessary. Also, adjectives describing taste should be separated by commas. The corrected sentence properly lists the adjectives 'delicious, sweet, and smooth' to describe the chocolate's taste.

× By the way, eating chocolate can let you breathe release of kind of. Chemical substance called dolphin.

✓ By the way, eating chocolate can let you breathe a release of a kind of chemical substance called dopamine.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and articles and misspells 'dopamine' as 'dolphin'. The phrase 'let you breathe release of kind of' is incorrect. The corrected sentence uses 'a release of a kind of chemical substance called dopamine' to properly express the idea.

× Uh, also I side I like eating chocolate, but actually usually I don't eat chocolate or any sweets becauses.

✓ Uh, also I said I like eating chocolate, but actually usually I don't eat chocolate or any sweets because.

The original sentence contains a typo 'side' instead of 'said' and 'becauses' instead of 'because'. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× It's it's harm to my keys.

✓ It's harmful to my teeth.

The phrase 'It's it's harm to my keys' is incorrect. 'It's' is repeated unnecessarily, 'harm' should be 'harmful' to function as an adjective, and 'keys' is a mispronunciation or typo for 'teeth'. The corrected sentence uses 'It's harmful to my teeth' to convey the intended meaning.

× I only eat chocolate in some special occasions like birthday parties and I like share chocolate with others.

✓ I only eat chocolate on some special occasions like birthday parties and I like to share chocolate with others.

The preposition 'in' should be 'on' when referring to occasions. Also, 'I like share' is incorrect; it should be 'I like to share' to properly use the verb.

× When I was a kid, I like to eat chocolate.

✓ When I was a kid, I liked to eat chocolate.

The sentence refers to a past time ('when I was a kid'), so the verb 'like' should be in the past tense 'liked' to maintain tense consistency.

× I hardly ever ate it when I was a kid 'cause my mom, she didn't allow me to eat too much chocolate and sweets because she thought that is. Harm to my teeth.

✓ I hardly ever ate it when I was a kid because my mom didn't allow me to eat too much chocolate and sweets because she thought that it was harmful to my teeth.

The sentence has tense inconsistency and punctuation errors. 'Is harm' should be 'was harmful' to match past tense. Also, 'cause my mom, she' is redundant; 'because my mom' suffices. The corrected sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Oh well, there are lots of reasons lead to the situation.

✓ Oh well, there are lots of reasons that lead to the situation.

The phrase 'reasons lead to' needs a relative pronoun 'that' to connect the clause properly. The corrected sentence uses 'reasons that lead to' for grammatical correctness.

× In my opinion the most important reason is chocolate is something cheap His prices cheap not expensive.

✓ In my opinion, the most important reason is chocolate is something cheap; its price is cheap, not expensive.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'His prices' which is incorrect for chocolate. The possessive pronoun should be 'its' referring to chocolate. Also, punctuation is added for clarity.

× You can buy it in the average shops and every market and that makes it popular.

✓ You can buy it in average shops and every market, and that makes it popular.

The phrase 'in the average shops' is better as 'in average shops' without 'the' to generalize. Also, a comma is added before 'and' to separate clauses.

× Well, my favorite flavor of chocolate. It's definitely milk chocolate becauses it tastes sweet and creamy and its texture is smooth.

✓ Well, my favorite flavor of chocolate is definitely milk chocolate because it tastes sweet and creamy and its texture is smooth.

The original sentence is a fragment missing the verb 'is'. Also, 'becauses' is a typo for 'because'. The corrected sentence is complete and grammatically correct.

× Uh, by the way, some of my friend Lee like it dark chocolate, but in my opinion is that kind of chocolate? It's a little bitter.

✓ Uh, by the way, some of my friends like dark chocolate, but in my opinion, that kind of chocolate is a little bitter.

'Friend Lee' should be 'friends' to indicate plural. 'Like it dark chocolate' is incorrect; it should be 'like dark chocolate'. The question mark is unnecessary and replaced with a statement. The corrected sentence improves grammar and clarity.

× Of course. In my opinion. Chocolate. It's one of the best gift in the world.

✓ Of course. In my opinion, chocolate is one of the best gifts in the world.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper verb usage. 'Gift' should be plural 'gifts' to agree with 'one of the'. The corrected sentence is complete and grammatically correct.

× I usually I often give chocolate as a gift to my girlfriend, my friends or my family member when they have birthday.

✓ I usually or often give chocolate as a gift to my girlfriend, my friends, or my family members when they have birthdays.

The phrase 'I usually I often' is redundant; 'usually or often' is better. 'Family member' should be plural 'family members' to match 'friends'. Also, 'birthday' should be plural 'birthdays' to indicate multiple occasions.

× And they are always happy to receive it.

✓ And they are always happy to receive it.

This sentence is correct and requires no correction.