Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but there are some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that affect naturalness. For example, 'boost' should be 'boosts', and 'as a tree' should be 'as a treat'. Also, try to avoid redundancy by combining ideas more smoothly and using linking words to improve coherence.

예시: I absolutely love eating chocolate because I have a real sweet tooth. It always boosts my mood and makes me feel happier, especially after a long day. For instance, I often indulge in a small piece in the afternoon as a treat to keep my energy up.

제안: Your answer is well-structured and informative, but there are minor grammatical issues such as 'in bad conditions' which should be 'in bad condition'. Also, try to use linking words like 'so' or 'therefore' to connect ideas more smoothly.

예시: When I was little, I used to eat chocolate every day because I loved the taste. However, my dentist told me that my teeth were in bad condition, so I decided to cut down. Therefore, I now eat chocolate about once a month, mostly as a treat on special occasions.

제안: Your answer conveys your enthusiasm well, but the tense usage is inconsistent and some phrases are awkward. For example, 'I am always a big fan' should be past tense 'I was always a big fan', and 'addiction to the sweet things' could be more naturally expressed. Try to use past tense consistently and more natural expressions.

예시: Absolutely. I was always a big fan of chocolate when I was little and couldn't stop eating it once I started. It felt like an addiction to sweet things, and I just couldn't help myself.

제안: Your answer is detailed and relevant, but the sentence is quite long and could be clearer with better punctuation and linking words. Try breaking it into two sentences and use connectors like 'because' and 'also' to improve clarity and flow.

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide mainly because of its rich, sweet taste that appeals to people of all ages. Also, it is often associated with celebrations and comfort, making it a favourite treat during special occasions and stressful times.

제안: Your answer has good ideas but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. For example, 'because it doesn't' is incomplete, and 'the most tasty' should be 'the tastiest'. Also, 'the most original taste I've ever met' is unnatural. Try to use correct comparative forms and clearer expressions.

예시: Dark chocolate is my favourite. Although some people think it is bitter because it contains no sugar, I find it the tastiest and most authentic flavour I have ever tried.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but has several grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases. For example, 'different people preferences' should be 'different people's preferences', and 'giving present too' should be 'giving presents to'. Also, expressions like 'just let me' and 'just gives us something else' are awkward. Try to use clearer, more natural sentences and correct grammar.

예시: I think it depends on people's preferences and who you are giving the gift to. For some who enjoy sweets, I would be more than happy to receive chocolate as a gift. However, if someone is not a sweet tooth, it would be better to choose something else.

× Eating chocolate always boost my mood, makes me feel happier, specially after a long day.

✓ Eating chocolate always boosts my mood, makes me feel happier, especially after a long day.

The verb 'boost' should be in the third person singular form 'boosts' to agree with the singular subject 'Eating chocolate'. Also, 'specially' is incorrect here; the correct adverb is 'especially' to indicate emphasis.

× Often indulge in a small piece in the afternoon as a tree to keep my energy up.

✓ I often indulge in a small piece in the afternoon as a treat to keep my energy up.

The sentence lacks a subject; adding 'I' clarifies who is performing the action. Also, 'tree' is a typo and should be 'treat' to convey the intended meaning.

× When I was little, I used to eat chocolate every day because I love the taste.

✓ When I was little, I used to eat chocolate every day because I loved the taste.

The verb 'love' should be in the past tense 'loved' to maintain consistency with the past time frame indicated by 'When I was little' and 'used to'.

× my teeth were in bad conditions, so I decided to cut down.

✓ my teeth were in bad condition, so I decided to cut down.

The noun 'condition' is uncountable in this context and should be singular. 'Conditions' implies multiple distinct states, which is not intended here.

× I am always a big fan of chocolate and when I was little I couldn't stop eating chocolate since I started.

✓ I have always been a big fan of chocolate and when I was little I couldn't stop eating chocolate since I started.

The phrase 'I am always a big fan' is incorrect because 'always' with 'am' does not express a continuous state from past to present. 'I have always been' correctly expresses a continuous state up to now.

× I think the main reason for chocolate becoming so popular worldwide is primarily because of its rich, sweet taste that appeals to people of all ages, and additionally, chocolate is often associated with celebrations and comfort, making it a favorite treat during special occasions in stressful times.

✓ I think the main reason chocolate has become so popular worldwide is primarily because of its rich, sweet taste that appeals to people of all ages. Additionally, chocolate is often associated with celebrations and comfort, making it a favourite treat during special occasions and stressful times.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence and should be split for clarity. 'Chocolate becoming' should be 'chocolate has become' to use the present perfect tense indicating a change over time. 'Favourite' is the British English spelling.

× Although some people may think that it is so bitter because it doesn't, it literally doesn't have any sugar in it.

✓ Although some people may think that it is bitter, it literally doesn't have any sugar in it.

The phrase 'because it doesn't' is incomplete and confusing. Removing it clarifies the sentence. 'So bitter' is simplified to 'bitter' for correctness.

× I still think that it is the most tasty and the most original taste I've ever met.

✓ I still think that it is the tastiest and the most original taste I've ever had.

'Most tasty' is incorrect; the superlative form is 'tastiest'. Also, 'taste I've ever met' is incorrect; 'met' is used for people. The correct verb is 'had' for experiences.

× I say it depends on different people preferences and the ones that you are giving present too.

✓ I say it depends on different people's preferences and the ones to whom you are giving presents.

'People preferences' should be possessive 'people's preferences'. 'Giving present too' is incorrect; it should be 'giving presents to' or 'to whom you are giving presents' for correct pronoun and preposition use.

× But if somebody is not a sweet tooth, then I mean, just gives us something else.

✓ But if somebody is not a sweet tooth, then I mean, just give us something else.

'Gives' is incorrect here because the subject is implied 'you' or 'one'. The imperative form 'give' is appropriate. Also, 'not a sweet tooth' is an idiomatic expression meaning not liking sweets, which is acceptable.