Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is too short and lacks coherence. Try to form complete sentences and explain why you like chocolate with specific reasons. Avoid fragmented phrases and ensure your response is natural and clear.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because it tastes sweet and rich. It makes me feel happy whenever I have some, especially after a long day.

제안: Your answer has some good points but is interrupted by incomplete sentences and repetition. Try to speak in full sentences and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: I eat chocolate about once a week because I am an athlete, and my coaches are very strict about my diet. They would be upset if I ate chocolate more often than that.

제안: Your answer is unclear and repetitive. Provide a direct response with supporting details, avoiding informal language and repetitions.

예시: No, I did not eat chocolate often as a child because I have been an athlete since I was young, and I had to follow strict dietary rules.

제안: Your answer has some interesting ideas but is disorganised and contains unclear comparisons. Use linking words to structure your answer and avoid confusing statements.

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it is heavily advertised and tastes delicious. Additionally, many people find it addictive, which increases its popularity.

제안: Your answer is fragmented and contains unclear phrases. Try to express your preferences clearly with complete sentences and explain your reasons logically.

예시: My favourite flavour is milk chocolate because it is sweet and smooth. I don't like dark chocolate since it tastes bitter and is less sweet than milk chocolate.

제안: Your answer has good ideas but is unclear and repetitive. Use full sentences and clarify your opinion with reasons, avoiding hesitation and fragmented speech.

예시: I think it depends on the person, but personally, I wouldn't be happy to receive chocolate as a gift because I am on a diet and cannot eat it. Also, I feel that chocolate is not a very meaningful present.

× I love eating chocolate. Since. It has really tasty. Sweets. Taste.

✓ I love eating chocolate because it tastes really tasty.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper sentence structure. 'Since' is used incorrectly as a sentence fragment. The correction combines the ideas into a complete sentence using 'because' to explain the reason.

× Since I'm in. Athlete. I can't eat. Chocolate very often, so I would say once a week.

✓ Since I'm an athlete, I can't eat chocolate very often, so I would say once a week.

The original sentence is fragmented and missing articles. 'Athlete' needs the article 'an' before it. The sentence is corrected to be a complete, coherent sentence.

× Becauses our coaches really strict an.

✓ Because our coaches are really strict.

'Becauses' is a misspelling of 'because'. The sentence is incomplete and missing the verb 'are'. The correction fixes spelling and completes the sentence with the verb 'are'.

× Would be very mad if we ate chocolate more than more than once a week.

✓ They would be very mad if we ate chocolate more than once a week.

The original sentence lacks a subject. Adding 'They' clarifies who would be mad. Also, 'more than' is repeated unnecessarily.

× Same rules goes.

✓ Same rules go.

'Rules' is plural, so the verb should be 'go' not 'goes'. This is a subject-verb agreement error.

× For me bro bro.

✓ For me, bro.

The repetition 'bro bro' is unnecessary and informal. Removing the duplicate improves clarity.

× Papa, It's popular around the world since there's lots of advertisements about chocolate, which is not good.

✓ Well, it's popular around the world because there are lots of advertisements about chocolate, which is not good.

'Papa' is likely a mishearing or error; 'Well' fits better as a discourse marker. 'There's' should be 'there are' because 'advertisements' is plural. 'Since' is replaced with 'because' for clarity.

× And also, it's addictive. Like it. Like it has nicotine in it but it doesn't but. It it's really addictive.

✓ Also, it's addictive. It feels like it has nicotine in it, but it doesn't. It's really addictive.

The original sentences are fragmented and repetitive. The correction combines ideas into coherent sentences and clarifies meaning.

× My favorite? Flavor is Milky chocolate. Since it's not bit Sir, however.

✓ My favorite flavor is milk chocolate because it's not bitter, sir.

'Milky chocolate' should be 'milk chocolate'. 'Not bit Sir' is incorrect; it should be 'not bitter, sir'. The sentence is corrected for adjective use and clarity.

× My parents like dive chocolate so.

✓ My parents like dark chocolate, so...

'Dive chocolate' is a mispronunciation of 'dark chocolate'. The sentence is incomplete; adding a comma and ellipsis indicates continuation.

× I won't be able to eat milk chocolate and I hate dark chocolate since it's bitter and. Doesn't include lots of sweets.

✓ I won't be able to eat milk chocolate, and I hate dark chocolate since it's bitter and doesn't contain much sweetness.

The original sentence is fragmented and has incorrect phrasing. 'Doesn't include lots of sweets' is corrected to 'doesn't contain much sweetness' for clarity and correctness.

× It depends but I personally think if someone got me a chocolate I wouldn't be happy since I don't think it's a meaningful gift.

✓ It depends, but I personally think if someone gave me chocolate, I wouldn't be happy since I don't think it's a meaningful gift.

'Got me a chocolate' is incorrect; 'gave me chocolate' is correct past tense and uncountable noun usage. Commas are added for clarity.

× Which? I don't think it shows them.

✓ I don't think it shows them anything.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. The correction completes the thought for clarity.

× It shows me they love or affection, love affection to me since I can't eat chocolate, I mean a diet.

✓ It shows me their love or affection since I can't eat chocolate; I mean, I'm on a diet.

'They love or affection' is incorrect pronoun use; 'their love or affection' is correct. 'I mean a diet' is corrected to 'I'm on a diet' for clarity and grammar.