Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer needs to be clearer and more natural. Avoid unclear phrases like 'so much screaming' and try to give a direct reason why you like chocolate. Also, keep your sentences connected and avoid abrupt stops.

예시: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it boosts my energy during my free time. My favourite chocolate is dark chocolate, especially KitKat and 5 Star bars.

제안: Try to give a clear and concise answer. Avoid irrelevant or confusing details. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

예시: I often eat chocolate during my free time and especially when I have exams. Sometimes, in the evening, I crave chocolate and enjoy eating it.

제안: Make sure your sentences are grammatically correct and complete. Provide specific details clearly and avoid hesitation sounds like 'uh'.

예시: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid. For example, my mother gave me a bucket of chocolates as a gift on my second birthday, which made me very happy.

제안: Try to organise your answer logically and use correct vocabulary. Use linking words to connect your points and avoid incomplete sentences.

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it can be enjoyed in many forms such as bars, drinks, cakes, cookies, and ice cream. Its rich, sweet, and slightly bitter flavour appeals to a wide range of palates due to the combination of sugar, cocoa, and sometimes milk.

제안: Avoid repeating the same idea. Try to explain your preference clearly and use appropriate vocabulary to describe flavours.

예시: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate with sea salt and caramel because it has a rich taste that is slightly bittersweet and just salty enough to make it interesting.

제안: Make sure your sentences are complete and clear. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid fragmented sentences.

예시: Absolutely, chocolate makes a great gift for most occasions because it comes in many varieties such as dark, milk, white, and with different flavours like fruit and spices. It can be presented elegantly for formal events or simply for casual gifting.

× Oh yeah, I like eating chocolates be 'cause I have so much screaming in free time.

✓ Oh yeah, I like eating chocolates because I have so much screaming in my free time.

The word 'be' is incorrectly used here; it should be 'because' to express reason. Also, 'screaming' seems incorrect in context; possibly 'screaming' is a mishearing or typo, but as per instruction, only grammar mistakes from the list are corrected. The correction focuses on replacing 'be' with 'because' to form a proper conjunction.

× Oh yeah, I like eating chocolates be 'cause I have so much screaming in free time.

✓ Oh yeah, I like eating chocolate because I have so much screaming in my free time.

The noun 'chocolates' is plural but generally 'chocolate' as a food is uncountable and used in singular form when talking about liking it in general. Hence, 'chocolate' is more appropriate here.

× It boost my energy.

✓ It boosts my energy.

The verb 'boost' needs to be in third person singular present tense 'boosts' to agree with the singular subject 'It'.

× And. My favorite chocolate is dark chocolate Kitcat 5 star.

✓ My favorite chocolate is dark chocolate KitKat 5 Star.

The sentence starts with 'And.' which is incomplete and incorrect. It should be combined properly. Also, 'Kitcat' should be 'KitKat' and '5 star' capitalized as '5 Star' as a proper noun.

× Well I often eat chocolate in my free time and my during exams and sometimes evening I have so much craving so I eat chocolates.

✓ Well, I often eat chocolate in my free time, during exams, and sometimes in the evening when I have so much craving, so I eat chocolate.

The sentence has incorrect word order and missing prepositions. 'my during exams' is incorrect; it should be 'during exams'. 'sometimes evening' needs 'in the evening'. Also, 'craving' should be preceded by 'have so much craving' which is acceptable but better with 'when'. 'chocolates' changed to 'chocolate' as uncountable.

× I'm going to look and factually shop and because I have some buying products then I will see the chocolates in.

✓ I'm going to look and actually shop because I have some products to buy, then I will see the chocolates there.

The sentence is confusing and has incorrect word usage. 'factually' should be 'actually'. 'some buying products' should be 'some products to buy'. 'see the chocolates in' is incomplete; 'there' is added for clarity.

× Oh yeah, I eat, I often eat chocolate whenever I am kid, my mother gives me a.

✓ Oh yeah, I often ate chocolate whenever I was a kid; my mother gave me a

The sentence is about past habits, so past tense 'ate' and 'was' are needed. 'am kid' is incorrect; it should be 'was a kid'. 'gives' should be 'gave' for past tense.

× Bucket of chocolate gift to me in my second birthday and I will so very happy and my uh, sometimes.

✓ a bucket of chocolates as a gift on my second birthday, and I was very happy. Sometimes,

The sentence is incomplete and ungrammatical. 'Bucket of chocolate gift to me' should be 'a bucket of chocolates as a gift'. 'in my second birthday' should be 'on my second birthday'. 'I will so very happy' should be 'I was very happy'. The sentence ends abruptly; 'Sometimes,' is incomplete but left as is.

× Chocolate can be eaten on its own or use in countries forms.

✓ Chocolate can be eaten on its own or used in countless forms.

'use' should be 'used' (past participle) to match passive voice. 'countries forms' is incorrect; likely meant 'countless forms' or 'various forms'. 'countless' fits better here.

× Bars drink cakes, cookies, ice cream dishes.

✓ Bars, drinks, cakes, cookies, and ice cream dishes.

The list is missing commas and conjunctions. 'drink' should be plural 'drinks' to match the list. Added commas and 'and' for proper list structure.

× In some culture, chocolate has a rich, sweet and often slightly bitter flavor that appeals to war wide range of pallets, the combination of sugar, cocoa, and sometimes milkmaids.

✓ In some cultures, chocolate has a rich, sweet, and often slightly bitter flavor that appeals to a worldwide range of palates. The combination of sugar, cocoa, and sometimes milk makes it highly chocolatey.

'culture' should be plural 'cultures'. 'war wide' is incorrect; should be 'worldwide'. 'pallets' is incorrect; should be 'palates' (taste). 'milkmaids' is incorrect; should be 'milk'. The sentence is fragmented; corrected for clarity.

× It's highly chocolate can be.

✓ It can be highly chocolatey.

The sentence is incomplete and ungrammatical. 'highly chocolate can be' is incorrect word order. Corrected to 'It can be highly chocolatey' to make sense.

× I'd probably go with dark chocolate with sea salt and caramel. It's rich, a little bitter sweet, and just salty enough to be interesting.

✓ I'd probably go with dark chocolate with sea salt and caramel. It's rich, a little bittersweet, and just salty enough to be interesting.

'bitter sweet' should be one word 'bittersweet' as an adjective.

× And my favorite chocolate is dark chocolate. Because it is very sweet and sugary.

✓ And my favorite chocolate is dark chocolate because it is very sweet and sugary.

The sentence fragment 'Because it is very sweet and sugary.' should be combined with the previous sentence for correctness.

× Absolutely. Chocolate is a great gift for most occasions. Most people enjoy chocolates in some form. Comes in endless varieties, dark milk, white with nerds, fruit, spices, elegant.

✓ Absolutely. Chocolate is a great gift for most occasions. Most people enjoy chocolate in some form. It comes in endless varieties: dark, milk, white with Nerds, fruit, spices, elegant.

'chocolates' changed to 'chocolate' as uncountable. 'Comes' needs subject 'It'. 'nerds' capitalized as 'Nerds' (brand). Added colon for list.

× Can be dressed up for formal occasions or cap simple for. White ones.

✓ It can be dressed up for formal occasions or kept simple for casual ones.

Sentence fragments and incorrect words: 'cap simple for. White ones.' is incorrect. Corrected to 'kept simple for casual ones' for clarity and grammar.