Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer needs to be clearer and more structured. Start with a direct response to the question, then add specific reasons. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I do like eating chocolate, but not very often. When I was a child, I used to eat it more frequently. However, I now understand that eating too much chocolate is unhealthy, so I have reduced my consumption.

제안: Try to give a clear and concise answer with proper sentence structure. Use linking words to explain reasons and avoid vague expressions. Also, correct word choices will improve clarity.

예시: I don't eat chocolate very often. Usually, I have a small piece when I feel tired because it gives me energy. Chocolate is not part of my regular meals, and I only eat it occasionally, such as when I go out.

제안: Focus on clear sentence structure and avoid grammatical errors. Provide specific examples and use linking words to connect ideas logically. Avoid unclear phrases and repetition.

예시: When I was a kid, I ate chocolate more often than I do now. However, my parents usually did not allow me to have too much. Sometimes, when I received money from my grandparents, I would buy chocolate at school, even though it affected my teeth.

제안: Your answer is unclear and repetitive. Try to express your ideas clearly and logically. Use linking words to connect your points and provide specific reasons why chocolate is popular globally.

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide mainly because children love it. Kids often ask their parents to buy chocolate, which increases its demand. Additionally, its sweet taste appeals to many people, making it a favorite treat everywhere.

제안: Try to organize your answer clearly by stating your preference first, then explaining why. Avoid unclear phrases and repetition. Use appropriate vocabulary to describe tastes and preferences.

예시: My favourite flavour of chocolate is milk chocolate, especially Indian brands. I don't like dark chocolate because it has a bitter taste. I find Indian milk chocolate very tasty and enjoyable compared to some Western chocolates.

제안: Your answer should be clearer and more structured. Start with a direct response, then explain your reasons with specific examples. Avoid unclear words and phrases, and use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because its sweetness symbolizes friendship and affection. People often give chocolates on birthdays or weddings. It is a common and appreciated gift for many special occasions.

× I do like to have chocolates many times, but I don't want it every time like it.

✓ I do like to have chocolate many times, but I don't want it every time.

The word 'chocolates' is plural but here it refers to chocolate in general, which is uncountable, so 'chocolate' should be used. Also, 'it' refers to chocolate, which is singular, so 'it' is correct. The phrase 'like it' is unnecessary and confusing, so it is removed for clarity.

× When I was a kid, I did like to do or chocolates many time nowadays, and I know it's not much very healthy eating too much chocolate is not good for our truth and not have got a forever health or like that.

✓ When I was a kid, I did like to eat chocolate many times, but nowadays I know it's not very healthy. Eating too much chocolate is not good for our teeth and does not lead to lifelong health.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses incorrectly and has unclear phrases. 'Did like to do or chocolates many time' is incorrect; it should be 'did like to eat chocolate many times.' 'Truth' is incorrect; the intended word is 'teeth.' Also, 'not have got a forever health' is ungrammatical; it is corrected to 'does not lead to lifelong health.' The sentence is split for clarity.

× I don't like to eat too much chocolate as I said here, I just want to taste the chocolate whenever I am feeling too tired and excel stick.

✓ I don't like to eat too much chocolate as I said. I just want to taste chocolate whenever I am feeling too tired and exhausted.

The phrase 'and excel stick' is unclear and likely a mispronunciation or error; it is corrected to 'and exhausted' to make sense. Also, 'the chocolate' is changed to 'chocolate' as a general uncountable noun here.

× I like to have a little amount of chocolate are to get energy or like that.

✓ I like to have a small amount of chocolate to get energy or something like that.

'A little amount' is awkward; 'a small amount' is more natural. 'Are to get energy' is incorrect; it should be 'to get energy.' 'Or like that' is informal and unclear; 'or something like that' is clearer.

× And it's not a regular meal of I'm not including chocolate in my regular meat and it's not an everyday usual activity or like that and whenever I go outside.

✓ And it's not a regular meal; I don't include chocolate in my regular diet, and it's not an everyday usual activity or anything like that, even when I go outside.

'Regular meal of' is incorrect; it should be 'regular meal.' 'Meat' is a mispronunciation of 'meal' or 'diet.' The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Is I was there when I was a kid, I like to eat chocolate more than now, but most of the time my parents are not allowed me to have more chocolate.

✓ When I was a kid, I liked to eat chocolate more than now, but most of the time my parents did not allow me to have more chocolate.

'Is I was there' is incorrect and removed. 'Like' should be past tense 'liked' to match 'when I was a kid.' 'Are not allowed me' is incorrect; it should be 'did not allow me' in past tense.

× But when I when I go to school I tried to but she's too much of chocolate.

✓ But when I went to school, I tried to buy too much chocolate.

'When I go to school' should be past tense 'went' to match the past context. 'Tried to but she's' is incorrect; it should be 'tried to buy too much chocolate.'

× Whenever I get money from my grandparents or like that but it's a fix my tooth in a very hard level most.

✓ Whenever I got money from my grandparents or so, but it damaged my teeth badly.

'Get' should be past tense 'got' to match past context. 'It's a fix my tooth in a very hard level most' is unclear and ungrammatical; corrected to 'it damaged my teeth badly' to convey the intended meaning.

× The most important thing chocolate cannot track chocolate become popular is that it can attract the kids too much.

✓ The most important reason chocolate became popular is that it can attract kids a lot.

The sentence is confusing and has pronoun misuse. 'Chocolate cannot track chocolate become popular' is incorrect; corrected to 'reason chocolate became popular.' 'Attract the kids too much' is awkward; 'attract kids a lot' is clearer.

× The kids are insisting with their parents to have a choclates that's why the chocolate have a much more popularity all around the world.

✓ Kids insist to their parents to have chocolates; that's why chocolate is much more popular all around the world.

'Insisting with their parents' is incorrect; 'insist to their parents' or better 'ask their parents' is correct. 'Chocolate have' should be 'chocolate has' for subject-verb agreement. 'Much more popularity' is awkward; 'much more popular' is better.

× The main call thing is it can attract kids and it's very sweet and whenever it is stars we have attended.

✓ The main point is it can attract kids, it's very sweet, and whenever it is served, we enjoy it.

'Main call thing' is incorrect; corrected to 'main point.' 'Whenever it is stars we have attended' is unclear; corrected to 'whenever it is served, we enjoy it' to make sense.

× I don't like dark chocolate very much.

✓ I don't like dark chocolate very much.

This sentence is grammatically correct and needs no correction.

× I like to have a diary Milkin dementia like Indian chocolate so much.

✓ I like to have dairy milk and Indian chocolate very much.

'Diary Milkin dementia like' is a mispronunciation or error; corrected to 'dairy milk and Indian chocolate.'

× But whenever I get to the real chocolate from the Western countries or other I feel like it's not good.

✓ But whenever I get real chocolate from Western countries or elsewhere, I feel like it's not good.

'Get to the real chocolate' is incorrect; corrected to 'get real chocolate.' 'Or other' is vague; corrected to 'or elsewhere.'

× I should I have nearly.

✓ I should have it rarely.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear; corrected to 'I should have it rarely' to convey intended meaning.

× I like to have Indian chocolate very much. Very tasty and and or mature.

✓ I like to have Indian chocolate very much. It is very tasty and mature in flavor.

'And or mature' is unclear; corrected to 'mature in flavor' for clarity.

× There is a bitter taste in dark chocolate.

✓ There is a bitter taste in dark chocolate.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.

× Yes, of course that's the sweetness is the sign of friendship or our speed connection with that person.

✓ Yes, of course, sweetness is a sign of friendship or a close connection with that person.

'That's the sweetness is the sign' is incorrect; corrected to 'sweetness is a sign.' 'Our speed connection' is unclear; corrected to 'a close connection.'

× We can you circulate as a gift for birthday gift or marriage.

✓ We can give chocolate as a gift for birthdays or weddings.

'We can you circulate' is incorrect; corrected to 'We can give chocolate.' 'Birthday gift or marriage' is awkward; corrected to 'birthdays or weddings.'

× So is the regular practice for is giving chocolates druthers in very good as vicious occasions but having more eating more than shark.

✓ So it is a regular practice to give chocolates to others on special occasions, but eating too much is not good.

The sentence is very unclear and ungrammatical. Corrected to a clear sentence conveying the intended meaning: giving chocolates is common on special occasions, but eating too much is unhealthy.