Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat natural but can be more effective by avoiding phrases like 'to be brutally honest' which sound informal and unnecessary. Also, avoid short incomplete sentences like 'Mostly.' Instead, provide a clear topic sentence and supporting details with linking words.

예시: Yes, I enjoy eating chocolate, especially Dairy Milk, which is very popular in my country because of its rich taste and smooth texture.

제안: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear words like 'rocket' which seems incorrect. Try to use correct grammar and clarify your reasons with linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: I usually eat chocolate once a month because my mother does not allow me to eat too much sugar, so I limit myself to once a month.

제안: You should try to answer the question even if you are unsure. If you do not understand, ask politely once, but avoid repeating the question multiple times. Try to give a simple answer related to your childhood experience.

예시: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because it was a special treat for me.

제안: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and unclear ideas. Use linking words to connect your ideas and be specific. Avoid repetition and incorrect word forms.

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because many celebrities promote different types of chocolate, which influences their fans to try them.

제안: Your answer contains informal language and grammatical errors. Use formal expressions and correct grammar. Also, explain your preference clearly with linking words.

예시: My favourite flavour is white chocolate because I find it easier to digest compared to other types of chocolate.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains many errors. Use simple and clear sentences. Explain why chocolate makes a good gift with relevant reasons and linking words.

예시: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because most people enjoy it, and it shows thoughtfulness and care.

× Usually I eat chocolate once in a month because my mother do not allow me to eat too much rocket, so I prefer only eating once in a month.

✓ Usually I eat chocolate once a month because my mother does not allow me to eat too much chocolate, so I prefer eating only once a month.

The verb 'do' should be 'does' to agree with the singular subject 'my mother'. Also, 'once in a month' is better expressed as 'once a month'. The word 'rocket' seems incorrect in this context and is replaced with 'chocolate' for clarity.

× According to my opinion, most of the famous celebrity like to promote the different type of chocolate.

✓ In my opinion, most famous celebrities like to promote different types of chocolate.

The phrase 'most of the famous celebrity' is incorrect; it should be plural 'most famous celebrities'. Also, 'the different type' should be plural 'different types' to match the plural subject.

× So mostly people prefer to eat chocolates because his or her favorite favorite celebrating is promoting that types of chocolates.

✓ So mostly people prefer to eat chocolates because their favorite celebrities are promoting those types of chocolates.

The pronouns 'his or her' should be plural 'their' to agree with 'people'. 'Favorite favorite celebrating' is unclear and corrected to 'favorite celebrities'. 'That types' should be 'those types' to match plural 'types'.

× I'ma found off with eating white chocolate because I think it is quite easy to digest rather than other chocolates.

✓ I'm fond of eating white chocolate because I think it is easier to digest than other chocolates.

'I'ma found off' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'I'm fond of'. Also, 'rather than' should be 'than' for comparison. 'Easier' is the comparative form needed here.

× Yes, it's a definitely a good idea to use a chocolate has a gift to other because when we gift someone, Hazard St. thinks people mostly feel graduated from forgetting the chocolate.

✓ Yes, it's definitely a good idea to use chocolate as a gift for others because when we gift someone, people mostly feel happy receiving chocolate.

The phrase 'a chocolate has a gift to other' is incorrect; it should be 'chocolate as a gift for others'. The sentence 'Hazard St. thinks people mostly feel graduated from forgetting the chocolate' is unclear and corrected to 'people mostly feel happy receiving chocolate' for clarity and correctness.