Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is quite long and a bit unclear. Try to make your response more natural and concise by directly answering the question first, then adding a clear reason. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases.

예시: Yes, I enjoy eating chocolate, especially vanilla flavor. It makes me feel happy and helps me relax when I'm stressed.

제안: Your answer is repetitive and contains unclear phrases. Try to answer directly and avoid repeating the same information. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: I eat chocolate quite often because I enjoy trying different flavors, like mango. As I mentioned before, chocolate is one of my favorite treats.

제안: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear expressions. Try to use correct verb tenses and clearer sentences. Provide specific details to support your answer.

예시: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a child. My parents usually gave me chocolates on my birthdays and at parties.

제안: Your answer is quite detailed and relevant, but some sentences are awkward and contain grammar mistakes. Try to use linking words smoothly and check your grammar for better clarity.

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because there are many brands offering different prices and qualities. Moreover, moderate consumption has health benefits. Also, its sweetness makes it a popular gift, especially on special occasions like Valentine's Day or International Women's Day.

제안: Your answer is mostly clear but contains some unclear phrases and minor grammar errors. Try to use precise vocabulary and correct expressions to improve clarity.

예시: To be honest, I love many types of chocolate, but my favorite is white chocolate. Since I have a sweet tooth, dark chocolate is too bitter, and milk chocolate isn't sweet enough, so white chocolate suits me best.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammar mistakes. Try to express your opinion clearly and use correct sentence structures. Provide specific examples to support your answer.

예시: I think chocolate is a good gift because many people give it on birthdays, anniversaries, and International Women's Day. However, when I was a kid, I preferred giving other types of gifts to my friends on their birthdays.

× Yes, obviously I like good eating chocolates in on various flavors such as mango flavor of any land borders 'cause one of my favorite chocolate is vanilla flavor because it brings me happiness and I feel very stressed, stressless when I chocolate it's a very it's very easy to eat it.

✓ Yes, obviously I like eating good chocolates in various flavors such as mango flavor from any land borders because one of my favorite chocolates is vanilla flavor as it brings me happiness and I feel less stressed when I eat chocolate; it's very easy to eat.

The phrase 'good eating chocolates in on various flavors' contains incorrect prepositions 'in on'. The correct preposition is 'in' or 'with' but here 'in' is appropriate. Also, 'when I chocolate' is incorrect; the verb 'eat' is missing. 'Stressless' is not a correct adjective; 'less stressed' is appropriate. The sentence also needs proper conjunctions and punctuation for clarity.

× Well, I eat chocolate very oftenly because I like to eat chocolate and I like to eat in various flavors such as mango.

✓ Well, I eat chocolate very often because I like to eat chocolate and I like to eat various flavors such as mango.

The adverb 'oftenly' is incorrect; the correct adverb is 'often'. Also, 'eat in various flavors' is incorrect; it should be 'eat various flavors' or 'eat chocolate in various flavors'. The adverb 'very' should be placed before 'often'.

× When he learned one of the My favorite chocolate is Vinny lies a previously said that chocolate is one of my favorite favorite.

✓ As I previously said, one of my favorite chocolates is Vinny lies.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. It contains unclear references and repeated words. The correction simplifies the sentence to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× Obviously when I was a kid, I eat chocolate.

✓ Obviously, when I was a kid, I ate chocolate.

The sentence refers to a past time ('when I was a kid'), so the verb should be in the past tense 'ate' instead of the present tense 'eat'.

× My parents give for mail, chocolates on my birthdays and there's some parties and I often lead chocolate, yeah.

✓ My parents gave me chocolates on my birthdays and at some parties, and I often ate chocolate, yeah.

The phrase 'give for mail' is incorrect; it should be 'gave me'. Also, 'on my birthdays' is correct, but 'there's some parties' should be 'at some parties'. 'Lead chocolate' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'ate'.

× There are variety of chocolate brands with different price range and quality available in the market now days.

✓ There are a variety of chocolate brands with different price ranges and qualities available in the market nowadays.

The phrase 'There are variety' is missing the article 'a'. Also, 'price range' and 'quality' should be plural to match 'variety of brands'. 'Now days' should be one word 'nowadays'.

× Thanks to health benefits that it offers for human, consuming chocolate at a suitable level is encourage.

✓ Thanks to the health benefits it offers for humans, consuming chocolate at a suitable level is encouraged.

The phrase 'is encourage' is incorrect; the past participle 'encouraged' is needed here to form the passive voice. Also, 'human' should be plural 'humans'. 'Thanks to health benefits that it offers' needs 'the' before 'health benefits'.

× The sweetness of chocolate also makes it a common present that men choose to give their beloved woman in special days.

✓ The sweetness of chocolate also makes it a common present that men choose to give their beloved women on special days.

'Beloved woman' should be plural 'beloved women' to match 'men'. Also, 'in special days' should be 'on special days'.

× Especially Valentine Day or International Woman's Day.

✓ Especially on Valentine's Day or International Women's Day.

Preposition 'on' is required before specific days. Also, 'Valentine Day' should be 'Valentine's Day' and 'International Woman's Day' should be 'International Women's Day'.

× To be honest, I am addicted to eat various types of chocolates, but my favorite flavor is white chocolates.

✓ To be honest, I am addicted to eating various types of chocolates, but my favorite flavor is white chocolate.

The phrase 'addicted to eat' is incorrect; it should be 'addicted to eating' because 'addicted to' is followed by a gerund. Also, 'white chocolates' should be singular 'white chocolate' when referring to the flavor.

× Since I have a sweet tooth, dark chocolate would be too bitter for me.

✓ Since I have a sweet tooth, dark chocolate is too bitter for me.

The modal 'would be' suggests hypothetical, but the speaker is stating a general fact, so present tense 'is' is more appropriate.

× Meanwhile, make sure pledges isn't sweet enough.

✓ Meanwhile, milk chocolate isn't sweet enough.

'Make sure pledges' is incorrect and unclear. Likely intended 'milk chocolate'. Also, 'isn't sweet enough' is correct.

× Maybe it's a very good used to give chocolate, but some people likes to give chocolate on their birthdays, anniversary's as well as women's International Day.

✓ Maybe it's very good to use chocolate as a gift, but some people like to give chocolate on their birthdays, anniversaries, as well as International Women's Day.

'Good used to give chocolate' is incorrect; it should be 'good to use chocolate as a gift'. 'Likes' should be 'like' to agree with plural 'people'. 'Anniversary's' should be plural 'anniversaries'. 'Women's International Day' should be 'International Women's Day'.

× But when for example when I was a kid, I usually prefer to give gifts to my friends in their birthdays.

✓ But, for example, when I was a kid, I usually preferred to give gifts to my friends on their birthdays.

The sentence refers to past time ('when I was a kid'), so the verb 'prefer' should be in past tense 'preferred'. Also, 'in their birthdays' should be 'on their birthdays'.