Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct by using complete sentences and clearer expressions. Avoid redundancy and ensure your ideas are logically connected with linking words. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain why you like chocolate with specific reasons and examples.

예시: Yes, I love eating chocolate because it helps me relax and reduces my stress. I enjoy trying different flavours such as milk, dark, and strawberry chocolate, which makes it an interesting treat during my leisure time.

제안: Focus on answering the question directly with clear and grammatically correct sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons or examples. Avoid unclear phrases and try to explain your points more clearly.

예시: I eat chocolate once in a while, usually sharing it with my coworkers or friends. This helps to strengthen our relationships and also makes me feel happier because chocolate stimulates the release of dopamine in the brain.

제안: Make your answer clearer and more coherent by using correct grammar and sentence structure. Provide specific details about your childhood experiences with chocolate and use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

예시: Absolutely, when I was a child, I often used my pocket money to buy my favourite chocolates from the supermarket. I enjoyed sharing them with my friends, which created many happy memories for us.

제안: Try to express your ideas more clearly and use appropriate vocabulary. Provide specific reasons why chocolate is popular globally, and use linking words to make your answer coherent and logical.

예시: Many people say that chocolate is popular worldwide because it is a convenient and delicious dessert. Additionally, its sweet taste appeals to people of all ages, making it a favourite treat everywhere.

제안: Make your answer more natural and clear by using correct grammar and vocabulary. Explain why you prefer dark chocolate with specific reasons and use linking words to connect your ideas.

예시: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because it has a richer taste that I enjoy. Moreover, eating it in moderation can be beneficial for health, which makes it a good choice for me.

제안: Improve your answer by using complete sentences and clearer expressions. Provide specific examples of occasions when chocolate is given as a gift and explain why it is a good choice. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: Absolutely, chocolate is a great gift to give to friends and family. For example, on special occasions like Valentine's Day, many people give chocolates to their loved ones to express their affection.

× Yes for sure I'm a chocolate lovers.

✓ Yes for sure I'm a chocolate lover.

The word 'lovers' is plural, but the subject 'I' is singular. Therefore, the singular form 'lover' should be used to agree with the singular subject.

× I enjoyed to explore different flavors of chocolate like milk chocolate, dark chocolates.

✓ I enjoy exploring different flavors of chocolate like milk chocolate, dark chocolate.

The verb 'enjoy' should be followed by a gerund (-ing form), not an infinitive ('to explore'). Also, 'dark chocolates' should be singular 'dark chocolate' to match the uncountable noun usage.

× Or strawberry chocolate.

✓ Or strawberry chocolate.

This is a sentence fragment lacking a subject and verb. It should be connected to the previous sentence or rephrased to form a complete sentence.

× Is a good way for me to an why my cell or really stress by eating chocolates in my leisure time.

✓ It is a good way for me to unwind and relieve my stress by eating chocolates in my leisure time.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Is' needs a subject 'It'. 'an why my cell or really stress' is incorrect and unclear; it should be 'unwind and relieve my stress' to convey the intended meaning.

× I was says.

✓ I would say.

'I was says' is incorrect. The correct phrase to express habitual action or opinion is 'I would say' or 'I usually say'.

× I eat chocolates once in awhile.

✓ I eat chocolate once in a while.

'Chocolate' is generally an uncountable noun when referring to the food in general, so the singular form is appropriate. Also, 'awhile' should be two words 'a while'.

× Is this a good way for me to share the chocolate with my coworkers or?

✓ It is a good way for me to share chocolate with my coworkers or friends.

The sentence lacks a subject and is incomplete. 'Is this' is incorrect here; it should be 'It is'. Also, the question mark is misplaced.

× My friends to shrink from our relationship and also which can help me to simulate the doper ring release.

✓ My friends to strengthen our relationship and also it can help me to stimulate the dopamine release.

'Shrink from our relationship' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'strengthen our relationship'. 'Simulate the doper ring release' is incorrect; it should be 'stimulate the dopamine release'.

× I always use my pocket money and gold.

✓ I always used my pocket money and gold coins.

The question is about past habits, so past tense 'used' is appropriate. Also, 'gold' is unclear; likely 'gold coins' is intended.

× Went to the supermarket to buy my favorite chocolates, which was real chocolates and share it with my friends.

✓ I went to the supermarket to buy my favorite chocolates, which were real chocolates, and shared them with my friends.

The sentence lacks a subject 'I'. Verb tenses should be past tense 'went' and 'shared'. 'Which was' should be 'which were' to agree with plural 'chocolates'. 'Share it' should be 'shared them' to agree with plural 'chocolates'.

× Anne. We have create differentiate memory.

✓ And we have created different memories.

'Anne' is likely a typo for 'And'. 'Have create' should be 'have created'. 'Differentiate memory' is incorrect; 'different memories' is appropriate.

× Some angry says, Is that truck lights?

✓ Some people say, 'Is that true?'.

'Some angry says' is incorrect; likely 'Some people say' is intended. 'Is that truck lights?' is nonsensical; likely 'Is that true?' is intended.

× Is a good desert for people to carry on their back at it is conveniently and also.

✓ It is a good dessert for people to carry with them because it is convenient, and also...

The sentence lacks a subject 'It'. 'Desert' should be 'dessert'. 'Carry on their back at it is conveniently' is incorrect; 'carry with them because it is convenient' is correct.

× Many people go to it.

✓ Many people like it.

The phrase 'go to it' is unclear and incorrect in this context. 'Like it' is more appropriate to express popularity.

× I will say dark chocolate is my favorite favor becaused it springs a. Speakers favor to me also it can help me to save health when I eat the.

✓ I will say dark chocolate is my favorite flavor because it has a strong taste to me, and it can help me maintain good health when I eat the appropriate amount.

Several errors: 'favor' should be 'flavor'; 'becaused' should be 'because'; 'springs a. Speakers favor' is unclear, likely 'has a strong taste'; 'save health' should be 'maintain good health'; sentence is incomplete and needs completion.

× Absolutely is it's a good gift and for for gifts for people to send to their friends or family members.

✓ Absolutely, it is a good gift for people to send to their friends or family members.

The sentence is awkward and contains repetition 'for for gifts'. The modal verb 'is' is correct but needs proper sentence structure and punctuation.

× Also, in some special occasions like Valentine's Day, many boyfriends tend to send chocolates as a gift to their girlfriends to spread there.

✓ Also, on special occasions like Valentine's Day, many boyfriends tend to send chocolates as gifts to their girlfriends to show their love.

'In some special occasions' should be 'on special occasions'. 'Spread there' is incorrect; likely 'show their love' or similar is intended. 'Gift' should be plural 'gifts' to agree with 'chocolates'.