Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a direct topic sentence and use concise supporting detail. Avoid repetition and vague phrases. For example, start with a clear statement about your memory ability, then briefly explain why or how you try to improve using one or two specific strategies and a linking word.

예시: No, I'm not very good at memorising things. However, I practise regularly by making short notes and reviewing them every evening, which helps me remember important information.

제안: Tell the story clearly with correct tense and fewer fillers. Use linking words (for example, so, as a result) and give a short reflection on its impact. Avoid hesitations like 'umm' and correct grammar (past simple) for clarity.

예시: Yes, I once forgot something important in high school. For example, I forgot to bring the exam entry sheet, so I couldn't sit the assessment and felt very disappointed because I had studied hard.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and fully developed reason with a linking word. Use correct plural/singular forms and concise phrasing. Mention one or two specific types of information you need to remember and explain why with an example.

예시: I need to remember people's names and appointments in daily life because they are essential for good communication. For instance, if I forget a colleague's name at a meeting, it can make the conversation awkward and harm our working relationship.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence describing your main method, then add one or two specific steps. Use correct verbs and avoid fillers. Mention a concrete example and a short result to show effectiveness.

예시: I usually use my phone to remember important things. For example, I set calendar reminders with the date, time and a short note for each assessment, so I receive an alert and don't forget the details.

× No, I'm not, but I'm trying to remember clearly.

✓ No, I'm not, but I'm trying to remember things clearly.

The sentence is understandable but sounds unnatural; 'remember clearly' needs an object. Add 'things' to indicate what is being remembered. Use present continuous 'I'm trying' correctly for ongoing action.

× However, I cannot remember.

✓ However, I cannot remember them.

The verb 'remember' usually requires an object when referring to specific items. Adding 'them' clarifies the noun phrase and completes the sentence.

× Even that is important for me.

✓ Even that is important to me.

The correct preposition to express personal relevance is 'to' rather than 'for'. 'Important to me' is the natural collocation.

× Yes, I have.

✓ Yes, I have forgotten.

The examiner's question asks about forgetting something in the past; 'Yes, I have' is incomplete. Use the full present perfect 'I have forgotten' to clearly answer.

× for example, when I have umm assessment in the high school, I forgot to bring the entry sheet, then I couldn't take an assessment.

✓ For example, when I had an assessment in high school, I forgot to bring the entry sheet, so I couldn't take the assessment.

Multiple issues: tense should be simple past ('had') for a completed past event; include the indefinite article 'an' before 'assessment'; drop 'the' before 'high school' unless specifying a particular school; use 'so' instead of 'then' to show result; repeat 'the assessment' with definite article to refer to the specific one mentioned.

× That is the big thing for me.

✓ That was a big deal for me.

Use past tense 'was' to match the past event. 'Big thing' is colloquial; 'big deal' is more natural. Use 'a' before 'big deal'.

× In my opinion, I need to remember. People names because that is important to communication with them.

✓ In my opinion, I need to remember people's names because that is important for communicating with them.

Fragment: 'I need to remember.' should not be split. Combine into one sentence. Use possessive form 'people's names'. Use 'important for communicating' or 'important to communicate' — here 'for communicating' fits. Use 'with them' after 'communicating' is redundant but acceptable; keep 'with them' for clarity.

× If I forget their name I cannot get add communication with them.

✓ If I forget their names, I cannot easily communicate with them.

Plural consistency: 'their name' should be 'their names' to match 'people'. 'Get add communication' is incorrect; use 'communicate' as the correct verb. Add 'easily' to convey difficulty if desired. Include a comma after the conditional clause.

× I usually use my phone to remember important thing.

✓ I usually use my phone to remember important things.

Count noun 'thing' needs plural 'things' when speaking generally. 'Important things' is the natural expression.

× For example when I have uh assessment, I would like to on the date and time on my phone and after that I can see the detail about my important things on my phone.

✓ For example, when I have an assessment, I put the date and time on my phone, and after that I can see the details about my important things on my phone.

Use commas for clarity. 'Have an assessment' is fine for future/regular events, but here describing a habitual action: use present simple 'I put' or past when referring to a single past event. 'Would like to on the date and time' is ungrammatical — use 'put the date and time' or 'save the date and time'. 'Detail' should be plural 'details'. Ensure parallel structure with 'and' connecting clauses.