Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: ปรับโครงสร้างประโยคให้ชัดเจนและเป็นธรรมชาติ ใช้ประโยคหัวข้อแล้วตามด้วยรายละเอียดสั้น ๆ หลีกเลี่ยงการอ้ำอึ้งและการใช้คำซ้ำ ๆ ฝึกใช้คำกริยารูปถูกต้อง (memorise → memorize หรือ memorise ตามอังกฤษ) และหลีกเลี่ยงการเติมคำที่ไม่จำเป็น

예시: I'm not particularly good at memorising. However, if something is important, I make an effort to memorise it by repeating it several times.

제안: ตอบตรงคำถามด้วยประโยคหัวข้อแล้วอธิบายสาเหตุหรือผลลัพธ์อย่างชัดเจน หลีกเลี่ยงคำไม่ชัดเจนและคำที่ไม่เป็นคำ (เช่น 'lipidly') และใช้ไวยากรณ์ที่ถูกต้องเพื่ออธิบายประสบการณ์ที่ผ่านมา

예시: Yes, I once missed an important work meeting because I forgot the time. After that experience, I became more careful about checking my schedule.

제안: เริ่มด้วยประโยคหัวข้อที่ชัดเจน ระบุรายละเอียดที่เฉพาะเจาะจงเกี่ยวกับสิ่งที่ต้องจำ เช่น เวลานัด หมายเหตุ หรืองานที่ต้องทำ ใช้ linking words (for example, so, therefore) เพื่อเชื่อมประเด็น และหลีกเลี่ยงคำพูดที่ไม่ชัดเจน เช่น 'Four weeks day'

예시: I need to remember my work schedule every day, especially meeting times with colleagues. For example, I always remind them beforehand and check my calendar on weekdays, while I relax more on weekends.

제안: ตอบโดยเริ่มจากหัวข้อแล้วอธิบายวิธีที่ใช้เป็นขั้นตอน ให้รายละเอียดเฉพาะเจาะจงเกี่ยวกับเครื่องมือหรือวิธีการ (เช่น online calendar, reminders) ใช้ linking words เพื่อเชื่อมเหตุผลกับผลลัพธ์ และลดการสลับคำผิดรูปแบบ

예시: After I missed that meeting, I started using an online calendar to schedule important events. I set reminders for each appointment, and this method has helped me avoid missing meetings.

× Not that much. I am not a person that memorize something special good, but uh, if something is, uh, important, I will like always, uh, repeatedly memorize is.

✓ Not really. I am not the kind of person who remembers things particularly well, but if something is important, I will always try to memorise it repeatedly.

Pronoun and relative clause errors: 'person that' should be 'person who' when referring to a person. Verb form and collocation: 'memorize something special good' is incorrect; use 'remembers things particularly well'. 'I will like always' incorrect adverb placement; use 'I will always'. 'memorize is' is wrong pronoun/object; use 'memorise it'. Also use consistent British spelling 'memorise' if preferred. Improve by using correct relative pronoun, proper verb forms, and placing adverbs before the main verb. Suggestions: replace 'that' with 'who', use 'remembers' not 'memorize' for third-person reference to 'person', place 'always' before 'try to', and use 'it' as the object of 'memorise'.

× Yes I have an experience of missing my umm some work meeting so it's very was was case that I am always not to do is be is lipidly.

✓ Yes, I once missed a work meeting.

Tense and sentence structure errors: 'I have an experience of missing' is wordy and awkward; use simple past 'I once missed' to describe a past event. The rest of the sentence is ungrammatical and unclear ('it's very was was case that I am always not to do is be is lipidly'); remove this and state the meaning clearly and simply. Improvement: use past simple for completed past events and avoid redundant words. Suggestions: say 'I once missed a work meeting' or 'I have missed a work meeting before' if present perfect is desired.

× Four weeks day, I'm always remember the working schedules, umm, for me and for my colleagues that have meeting with me, I always, uh, like telling them before the meeting and in weekend I'm mostly live.

✓ On weekdays, I always remember the work schedules for myself and my colleagues who have meetings with me. I always tell them before the meeting, and on weekends I usually relax.

Preposition and word choice errors: 'Four weeks day' is incorrect; use 'On weekdays'. 'remember the working schedules' is okay but 'work schedules' is more natural. 'for me and for my colleagues that have meeting with me' should be 'for myself and my colleagues who have meetings with me' (use reflexive pronoun and relative pronoun 'who', plural 'meetings'). 'I always, uh, like telling them' should be 'I always tell them' (avoid awkward 'like telling'). 'in weekend' should be 'on weekends' and 'mostly live' is incorrect; likely intended 'relax' or 'stay at home'. Improve by using correct prepositions and pronouns and clearer verbs.

× After the case that I miss my meeting, my meeting time, that time I always to schedules like planning all the things important in my online schedule like cooking calendars and it's really work. It's helped me a lot.

✓ After I missed my meeting, I started scheduling everything in my online calendar. Planning important tasks in my calendar really works and has helped me a lot.

Sentence structure and tense errors: 'After the case that I miss my meeting' should be 'After I missed my meeting' (use past simple for a completed event). 'I always to schedules like planning all the things important in my online schedule like cooking calendars' is ungrammatical and repetitive; simplify to 'I started scheduling everything in my online calendar' or 'I plan important tasks in my online calendar'. 'it's really work. It's helped me a lot.' should be 'it really works' (present simple for general truth) and 'it has helped me a lot' (present perfect to show result up to now). Improve by using clear subject-verb structure, correct tenses, and single concise verbs.