Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, and combine related ideas using linking words (for example, "however" and "for instance"). Give one specific example and explain briefly why the method works for you. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I’m fairly good at memorising, but it depends on the material. For instance, I remember words or phrases easily if I sort them alphabetically because the sequence creates a pattern. However, I struggle with long numbers because it’s hard to hold many digits in my short-term memory.

제안: Make the story concise and chronological. Use linking words ("a few months ago", "as a result") and correct verb forms. Include one brief reflection or lesson learned to enrich content.

예시: Yes, a few months ago I forgot the date of my passport appointment and missed it. As a result, I had to book a new appointment. From that experience I learned to set calendar reminders so I don’t miss important dates.

제안: Organise your reply: give a clear topic sentence listing key items, then explain your method with linking words. Avoid fillers and unclear words ("any Iran's"). Be specific about the app or how you prioritise tasks to show detail.

예시: I need to remember daily tasks such as household chores, study assignments, and errands. To manage them, I keep a to‑do list in my phone’s Notes app and prioritise items by deadline, so the most urgent tasks appear at the top.

제안: Be concise and use linking words to connect methods. Mention specific habits (e.g., setting reminders, using categories) to make the answer more informative and show vocabulary range. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I use my phone’s Notes app to record important tasks and set reminders, and I also carry a small paper notebook for quick notes on the go. This combination helps me edit plans digitally while having a physical backup when I’m away from my phone.

× Helped me to, uh, fit that thing in my mind.

✓ It helped me to, uh, fit that thing in my mind.

The sentence lacks the appropriate past tense auxiliary or subject-verb form. 'Helped me...' as a fragment omits the subject 'It' (referring to the sequence). Use 'It helped me...' to form a complete past-tense clause. Suggestion: always include the subject before a past participle verb when making a full sentence (It helped me...).

× But when it comes to numbers, I am not good at memorizing because learning long strands is difficult.

✓ But when it comes to numbers, I am not good at memorizing them because learning long strings is difficult.

The sentence uses 'strands' where 'strings' or 'sequences' is idiomatic for numbers; also add the pronoun 'them' to refer to 'numbers' (pronoun reference). This fixes clarity and maintains present tense. Suggestion: use appropriate collocations (long strings of numbers) and include pronouns for clarity.

× Yes, it happened a few months ago when my passport appointment date was granted to me and I completely forget the date and it was the time when I missed my appointment and I had to take another date.

✓ Yes, it happened a few months ago when my passport appointment date was given to me and I completely forgot the date; as a result, I missed my appointment and had to take another one.

Mixed past tense forms and incorrect verb choice 'granted' for 'given'. Use simple past consistently: 'was given' or better 'given' and 'forgot' instead of 'forget'. Also use 'another one' for 'another date' to sound natural. Suggestions: maintain the same past tense for events in the past and choose natural collocations ('missed my appointment', 'had to take another one').

× I need to remember my daily tasks that I have to do including my umm, household chores, uh, homework or any study material or any Iran's that I have to run outside.

✓ I need to remember my daily tasks, including household chores, homework or any study materials, or any errands that I have to run outside.

Multiple issues: 'including' should attach directly to the noun list; 'any study material' should be plural 'study materials' for general tasks; 'Iran's' is a misspelling of 'errands' and preposition use 'run outside' is acceptable but 'run errands' is idiomatic. Suggestion: group items after 'including' separated by commas, use correct nouns ('errands'), and ensure plurality for general items.

× And for that I have maintained A to do list on my mobile phone notes application that I always use.

✓ And for that I keep a to-do list in my mobile phone's Notes app that I always use.

Article and word choice issues: 'maintained A to do list' has incorrect capitalization and article placement; 'kept' vs 'have maintained' can be simplified to 'keep' for habitual action. Use 'a to-do list' (lowercase, hyphenated) and 'in my mobile phone's Notes app' (possessive and proper app name). Suggestion: use natural phrasing for habitual routines and correct articles and capitalization.

× I have a mobile phone application called the notepad that helped me to remember my things because I can write everything on it and I can also edit the whole text.

✓ I have a mobile phone application called Notepad that helps me remember things because I can write everything on it and also edit the text.

Tense mismatch: 'have' (present) with 'helped' (past) is inconsistent. Use present 'helps' for a current habit. Also streamline phrasing: 'remember my things' is awkward, use 'remember things'. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent and prefer concise expressions for habitual functions.

× Apart from that I always carry a small notepad notebook along with me on which I write important things.

✓ Apart from that, I always carry a small notepad with me on which I write important things.

Redundant words: 'notepad notebook' is repetitive; 'carry ... along with me' is redundant—use 'carry with me' or 'carry' alone. Also add a comma after the introductory phrase. Suggestion: remove redundancy and use correct prepositional phrase 'carry with me' or simply 'carry'.