Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a clear, direct topic sentence and avoid excessive hesitations and repetitions. Organize your answer: state whether you are good at memorising generally, then give a brief specific example and contrast. Use linking words (however, but) and correct tense and grammar. Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I’m fairly good at memorising information for short periods. However, I tend to remember negative experiences more vividly than positive ones, which makes me feel stressed for a while. For example, I replay a bad exam I did poorly on for days, even though I quickly forget some pleasant events.

제안: Begin with a concise topic sentence answering the question, then provide a specific, chronological example with linking words (for example, then, because). Correct past tense and remove fillers. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I once forgot an important task for a school function. For example, my teacher asked me to organise the event, but I went to my grandmother’s house and forgot to prepare the materials, so my teacher was very angry the next day.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence naming the main things you must remember. Then give 1–2 specific examples (times, tasks) using linking words like for example or such as. Reduce hesitations and repeat words.

예시: I need to remember several things every day, but mainly my academic responsibilities and school activities. For example, I must remember assignment deadlines, class times and extracurricular rehearsals so I can prepare on time.

제안: Answer with a clear sequence: state your main methods, then give brief specific details and linking words (first, then, finally). Use correct simple present/past forms and fewer hesitations. Mention both analogue and digital tools and an example of how you use them.

예시: I use several strategies to remember important things. First, I write tasks in a diary and plan them by date; then I add them to my phone calendar so I get notifications. For instance, I set a reminder two days before an assignment deadline to start working on it.

× Yes, definitely I'm good at memorizing things, but to be honest, uh, bit I mean good at bad thing like uh, when in life I have some bad chapter so I memorize and keep in mind uh 24 hours and feel stressed out and good things I do not memorized.

✓ Yes, definitely I'm good at memorizing things, but to be honest, I mean I am better at remembering bad things; when I have a bad period in my life I remember it and think about it for 24 hours and feel stressed, whereas I do not remember good things as well.

The student uses unclear and incorrect pronouns and phrases ('bit I mean good at bad thing', 'good things I do not memorized') leading to ambiguity. Replace vague pronoun fragments with clear subjects and pronouns (I, it) and add conjunctions for contrast (whereas). Also correct verb forms ('do not memorized' -> 'do not remember'). Suggestions: Use clear pronouns and connectors: 'I mean I am better at remembering bad things' and contrast with 'whereas I do not remember good things as well.'

× Yeah, I forgotten something important in my school function.

✓ Yeah, I forgot something important during a school function.

The student used the past participle 'forgotten' without an auxiliary verb. For simple past events use the simple past verb 'forgot'. Also 'in my school function' is unnatural; use 'during a school function.' Suggestion: Use simple past 'forgot' for completed past actions: 'I forgot something.'

× My teacher said that you will organize everything and I forget it and I went to my grandmother home and then when uh, I go tomorrow school.

✓ My teacher said that I would organize everything, but I forgot it and went to my grandmother's house; then when I went to school the next day...

Pronoun and tense usage is mixed and incorrect ('you will' should be 'I would' in reported speech), and possessive form is wrong ('grandmother home' -> 'grandmother's house'). Also 'when I go tomorrow school' should be past tense 'when I went to school the next day.' Suggestion: Keep reported speech consistent (future-in-past: 'would') and use possessive forms for nouns indicating ownership.

× So my teacher angry with me and I forget that.

✓ So my teacher was angry with me and I had forgotten that.

The adjective 'angry' needs a linking verb: 'was angry.' Also timeline requires past perfect 'had forgotten' to show the forgetting happened before the teacher's anger. Use 'had forgotten' to clarify sequence. Suggestion: Use proper verb forms with adjectives ('was angry') and past perfect for earlier actions ('had forgotten').

× Actually, there are a lot of thing to remember in my daily life, but the most, uh, profound thing is to remember, uh, my academic, uh, activities and moreover, umm, my, my school activities and.

✓ Actually, there are a lot of things to remember in my daily life, but the most important are my academic activities and my school activities.

Count noun 'thing' should be plural 'things' after 'a lot of.' The sentence is also repetitive and incomplete; streamline to 'the most important are my academic activities and my school activities.' Suggestion: Use plural for countable nouns and avoid repetition; use 'important' not 'profound' for clarity.

× Firstly, in retrospect I will keep in mind. So I would say that I remember but I was in but I I did not remember.

✓ First, I try to keep things in mind; I would say that I sometimes think I remember, but actually I do not.

The original contains disfluent fragments and contradicting tenses ('I will keep in mind' vs 'I was in' etc.). Rephrase to a clear present habitual: 'I try to keep things in mind' and contrast perception vs reality: 'sometimes I think I remember, but actually I do not.' Suggestion: Use concise statements of habit in present simple ('I try') and avoid filler words.

× So then I write reminders in my diary and moreover due to technology calendars I write in calendar so notification tell.

✓ So then I write reminders in my diary, and because of technology I write them in my calendar so I receive notifications.

Prepositions and phrasing are incorrect: 'due to technology calendars' is unclear; use 'because of technology' or 'using online calendars.' Also 'write in calendar' needs an article 'the' or 'my calendar' and 'notification tell' should be 'I receive notifications.' Suggestion: Use 'in my calendar' and 'receive notifications' or 'set reminders' for clarity.