Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is honest and relevant but could be more concise and structured. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'like', and try to form a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details. For example, start by directly answering the question, then explain why.

예시: I'm not very good at memorising things, especially English words. Although I've studied English for about 12 years, I still find it challenging to remember vocabulary.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but lacks clarity and contains redundancy. Try to organise your answer with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to explain the situation logically. Avoid repeating words and filler phrases.

예시: Yes, I often forget important things. For instance, once I forgot to pay my water bill, so eventually, my water supply was cut off.

제안: Your answer is too vague and contains many filler words. Try to be more specific and organised. Start with a clear topic sentence and then provide detailed examples using linking words to improve coherence.

예시: In my daily life, I need to remember many things, such as my schedule and what to buy for dinner. For example, I often forget what is in my fridge, so I have to check it before shopping.

제안: Your answer is relevant but could be clearer and more fluent. Avoid filler words and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to explain how your smartphone helps you remember things.

예시: I use my smartphone to remember important things. For example, I have installed apps that organise my schedule and tasks, which helps me stay organised.

× Like I for I have the experience that I forgot paying my water supplies and I finally eventually I couldn't use the water.

✓ Like I have the experience that I forgot to pay my water bills and eventually I couldn't use the water.

The phrase 'forgot paying' is incorrect; after 'forgot' we use the infinitive form 'to pay' to indicate an action that was not done. Also, 'water supplies' is better expressed as 'water bills' in this context. The word 'finally' is redundant with 'eventually', so one is sufficient.

× I use my smartphone to remember important things I put. I installed it up, which can organize my schedule, my tasks and so on.

✓ I use my smartphone to remember important things. I installed an app which can organise my schedule, my tasks and so on.

The phrase 'I put. I installed it up' is incorrect and unclear. The correct phrase is 'I installed an app'. Also, 'organize' is the American spelling; in British English, it is 'organise'. The sentence was split for clarity and correctness.