Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but you need to improve sentence structure and avoid redundancy. Try to make your sentences more natural and concise. Also, watch out for grammar errors like 'we had a made such quiz' which is incorrect. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I'm quite good at memorising things. For example, when preparing for a quiz, I memorised the handouts word for word and was able to recall the information accurately during the test.

제안: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. You should directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence and provide specific details. Avoid repeating 'forgot' and complete your sentences properly. Use linking words to explain the consequences clearly.

예시: Yes, I once forgot to share an important piece of information that could have helped me get a promotion. As a result, I missed the opportunity and my performance was rated lower than expected.

제안: Your answer is relevant but can be more natural and concise. Avoid repeating 'drink water' multiple times. Use linking words to connect your ideas and make your answer flow better.

예시: In my daily life, I need to remember to drink enough water. Often, I forget, but I am making an effort to stay hydrated to improve my health.

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant but can be improved by combining sentences and using linking words for better flow. Also, correct minor grammar mistakes like 'this tasks' should be 'these tasks'.

예시: I remember important things by setting reminders on my mobile device, which alert me when it's time to perform certain tasks. This method helps me manage my daily activities effectively.

× For instance, we had a made such quiz to prepare for and I had memorized these handouts word for word and could give back this information accurately as I had read it.

✓ For instance, we had to make such a quiz to prepare for and I memorized these handouts word for word and could give back this information accurately as I had read it.

The phrase 'had a made' is incorrect; it should be 'had to make' to express obligation in the past. Also, 'had memorized' can be simplified to 'memorized' to fit the past tense narrative. The article 'a' is missing before 'quiz'. This correction improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I once forgot a very crucial information that could have led to an advancement in my career path, but I forgot to give this particular piece of information and I was scored below the.

✓ I once forgot some very crucial information that could have led to an advancement in my career path, but I forgot to give this particular piece of information and I scored below the pass mark.

The word 'information' is uncountable, so 'a very crucial information' is incorrect; it should be 'some very crucial information'. Also, the sentence ends abruptly with 'below the'; it needs a noun like 'pass mark' to complete the meaning.

× In my day-to-day activities, one important thing I have tried to include in my activities is drinking of water.

✓ In my day-to-day activities, one important thing I have tried to include is drinking water.

The phrase 'drinking of water' is incorrect; the preposition 'of' is unnecessary here. 'Drinking water' is the correct form. Also, 'include in my activities' is redundant; 'include' suffices.

× I most times forget to drink water and I'm trying to drink water more often to increase my overall health.

✓ Most of the time, I forget to drink water and I'm trying to drink water more often to improve my overall health.

The phrase 'I most times' is incorrect; it should be 'Most of the time'. Also, 'increase my overall health' is better expressed as 'improve my overall health' for natural usage.

× I bring important things to my notice by using a reminder.

✓ I bring important things to my attention by using a reminder.

The phrase 'bring to my notice' is less common and slightly awkward; 'bring to my attention' is the correct idiomatic expression.

× This alerts me when it's close to the time I need to perform this tasks.

✓ This alerts me when it's close to the time I need to perform these tasks.

The demonstrative pronoun 'this' is singular, but 'tasks' is plural; therefore, 'this tasks' is incorrect and should be 'these tasks' to agree in number.