Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，且内容重复。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并且更自然地表达原因。

예시: No, I'm not very good at memorising things because sometimes I have breathing problems, which makes me feel like my brain doesn't get enough oxygen, leading to poor memory.

제안: 回答中有重复和口语填充词，表达不够简洁。建议去除多余词汇，使用更连贯的句子表达。

예시: Actually, I haven't forgotten anything important because I usually put all necessary information on my phone and make notes to remind myself.

제안: 回答中有重复和口语填充词，且内容较简单。建议使用连接词丰富句子结构，并具体说明记忆内容的重要性。

예시: There are many things I need to remember daily, such as the dates of the AUS examination, school lectures, and my friends' birthdays, all of which are important to me.

제안: 回答中存在重复和语法错误，表达不够流畅。建议简化句子，使用连接词使表达更连贯。

예시: As I mentioned, I use my phone to remember important things. For example, I make notes of my friends' birthdays and exam dates to ensure I don't forget them.

× Oh no, The thing is I have something wrong with my breathing so I I sometimes I feel the brain lacks of oxygen so which leads to the poor memory.

✓ Oh no, the thing is I have something wrong with my breathing, so sometimes I feel my brain lacks oxygen, which leads to poor memory.

这里的错误主要是动词形式和句子结构问题。'lacks of oxygen' 应改为 'lacks oxygen'，因为 'lack' 后面直接接名词，不用介词 'of'。另外，句子中多余的 'I' 需要删除，句子应更流畅。建议简化句子结构，避免重复。

× Actually no, because just because I am a person who is bad at memorizing, I will put everything that is necessary and is important on my phone.

✓ Actually no, because I am a person who is bad at memorizing, I will put everything that is necessary and important into my phone.

介词使用错误，'put ... on my phone' 应改为 'put ... into my phone'，表示将信息存入手机中。'just because' 重复使用，应去掉一个。

× So like I've just mentioned, I will put them in my phone.

✓ So like I've just mentioned, I will put them into my phone.

同样是介词使用错误，'put them in my phone' 应改为 'put them into my phone'，表示将内容存入手机。

× For example, I make some notes of my friend's birthday or the time for the comic examinations, umm in my form to remind me of those necessary and important things to make sure I won't forget about them.

✓ For example, I make some notes of my friend's birthday or the time for the comic examinations, umm in my phone to remind me of those necessary and important things to make sure I won't forget them.

这里 'in my form' 应为 'in my phone'，可能是口误或拼写错误。另外，'forget about them' 中 'about' 多余，'forget them' 更准确。