Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“when I was back in primary”应为“when I was in primary school”，以及“defunctioned my brain”表达不准确。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并避免口语填充词如“uh”和“umm”。

예시: When I was in primary school, I was definitely good at memorizing things. However, with frequent use of media and technology, I feel my memory has weakened over time.

제안: 回答内容较丰富，但句子结构较复杂且有语法错误，如“which I thought will be”应为“which I think will be”。建议简化句子结构，使用正确时态，并增加连接词使表达更流畅。

예시: Yes, definitely. Last week, I forgot to transfer my AS external English exam to an internal exam. I think this will be challenging for me, so I have emailed the PSO to ask for help, but I am not sure if it will work.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然，如“have more food every day to get these daily nutritions”应改为“eat nutritious food every day”。建议使用更准确的词汇和简洁的句子结构，避免重复和口语填充词。

예시: I need to remember to eat nutritious food every day to stay healthy. As the saying goes, 'an apple a day keeps the doctor away.'

제안: 回答中有语法错误，如“which it will pops up”应为“which pops up”。建议使用更自然的表达方式，简化句子结构，并使用连接词使表达更连贯。

예시: I remember important things by writing them down in my notebook or setting an alarm on WeChat, which pops up after a few hours to remind me about appointments or taking nutrition.

× When I was back in primary, yes definitely I am good at memorizing things.

✓ When I was back in primary school, yes definitely I am good at memorizing things.

这里缺少了名词“school”，导致表达不完整。应补充完整名词以符合英语习惯。

× When I was back in primary, yes definitely I am good at memorizing things.

✓ When I was back in primary school, yes definitely I was good at memorizing things.

句子描述过去的情况，谓语动词应使用过去时态“was”，而不是现在时“am”。

× after the frequent use of media and technological umm devices, I think it kind of defunctioned my brain which made my memories fade really fast.

✓ after the frequent use of media and technological devices, I think it kind of malfunctioned my brain which made my memories fade really fast.

“defunctioned”不是正确的词，应使用“malfunctioned”表示“功能失常”。另外“umm”是口语填充词，应去掉。

× which I thought will be really challenging for me in the future and I'm pretty starting to suffer from it.

✓ which I thought would be really challenging for me in the future and I'm starting to suffer from it.

表达过去的想法时，情态动词“will”应改为过去式“would”。“pretty starting”搭配不当，应去掉“pretty”。

× I'm pretty starting to suffer from it.

✓ I'm pretty sure I'm starting to suffer from it.

“pretty starting”搭配错误，应改为“pretty sure”或直接用“starting”。

× But I'm trying to e-mail the PSO to help me transfer it later on but I don't know it will work.

✓ But I'm trying to e-mail the PSO to help me transfer it later on but I don't know if it will work.

缺少连词“if”引导宾语从句，导致句子不完整。

× Uh, I think it will be to have more food every day to get these daily nutritions, just as the phrase says, apple a day keeps the doctor away, which I thought that's what I really need to remember every day for my daily life to get healthy.

✓ Uh, I think it is to have more food every day to get daily nutrition, just as the phrase says, an apple a day keeps the doctor away, which I think is what I really need to remember every day in my daily life to stay healthy.

“will be”不合适，改为“is”。“nutritions”不可数，改为“nutrition”。“apple”前应加不定冠词“an”。“which I thought that's”结构重复，应改为“which I think is”。

× I remember important things by noting it down on my notebook or to set an alarm on WeChat which it will pops up about two hours later and reminding me that I need to see my dentist or I need to have the daily nutritions.

✓ I remember important things by noting them down in my notebook or setting an alarm on WeChat which will pop up about two hours later and remind me that I need to see my dentist or have daily nutrition.

“noting it down on my notebook”中“on”应改为“in”，“noting it”应改为“noting them”以指代复数。动词形式应统一为动名词“setting”。“which it will pops up”中“it”多余，“pops”应为原形“pop”。“reminding”应改为“remind”。“nutritions”不可数，改为“nutrition”。