Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat relevant but incomplete and lacks clarity. Try to give a direct response first, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences.

예시: Yes, I am quite good at memorising things. For example, two years ago, I visited Wonderland with my friends, and I still remember many moments from that trip because they were very special to me.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical errors and lacks coherence. Use past tense correctly and link your ideas smoothly. Also, be specific about your feelings and the situation.

예시: Yes, I once forgot my passport and some important documents when I had a passport appointment last year. I felt very embarrassed in front of the counsellor because those documents were essential for the process.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains errors. Avoid mentioning unrelated names unless necessary. Provide a clear topic sentence and explain with specific details using linking words.

예시: In my daily life, I need to remember the tasks I have completed each day because I often forget what I did yesterday or earlier today, which affects my productivity.

제안: Your answer is relevant but has grammatical mistakes and redundancy. Use correct sentence structure and linking words to make your answer coherent and natural.

예시: I usually remember important things by using my mobile phone. I keep a to-do list on it, which reminds me of all the tasks I need to complete and helps me stay organised.

× I remember last to last year I visited Wonderland with my friends at there.

✓ I remember the year before last, I visited Wonderland with my friends there.

The phrase 'last to last year' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'the year before last'. Also, 'at there' is incorrect; 'there' alone is sufficient as an adverb of place.

× I had many memories with them.

✓ I had many memorable moments with them.

'Memories' is plural but the phrase 'had many memories with them' is awkward. 'Memorable moments' is a better collocation to express shared experiences.

× Firstly I.

✓ Firstly, I...

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb or object. It should be completed or removed for clarity.

× Yes, last year when I have to appear for my for my passport appointment, I forget my passport and some documents.

✓ Yes, last year when I had to appear for my passport appointment, I forgot my passport and some documents.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' and past tense 'forget'. Both verbs should be in past tense to maintain consistency.

× At that point I feel very embarrassed in front of councillor and that's the most important.

✓ At that point, I felt very embarrassed in front of the counsellor, and that was the most important thing.

The verb 'feel' should be in past tense 'felt' to match the past event. Also, 'councillor' should be 'counsellor' if referring to a person giving advice. 'That's the most important' is incomplete; it should be 'that was the most important thing'.

× I forget my passport and some documents.

✓ I forgot my passport and some documents.

Though this is a past tense issue, the preposition 'for' is missing in the phrase 'appear for my passport appointment' in the previous sentence, but here the sentence is fine. Correction is mainly for tense.

× According to Ming, I think I have to remember every work that I have done only this day, because almost I forget everything what I have done today or yesterday.

✓ According to me, I think I have to remember every task that I have done today, because I almost forget everything I have done today or yesterday.

'According to Ming' is likely a mistake for 'According to me'. 'Every work' is incorrect; 'every task' or 'all the work' is better. 'Only this day' is awkward; 'today' suffices. 'Almost I forget' should be 'I almost forget'. 'What I have done' should be 'I have done' without 'what'.

× I remember things by using my mobile phones because in my mobile phone I have A to do list which recalls me everything which which makes me active for work to do.

✓ I remember things by using my mobile phone because I have a to-do list on it which reminds me of everything and helps me stay active to get work done.

'Mobile phones' should be singular 'mobile phone' to match the context. 'A to do list' should be 'a to-do list'. 'Recalls me' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'reminds me'. The phrase 'makes me active for work to do' is awkward; 'helps me stay active to get work done' is clearer.