Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, and provide specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy and ensure your sentences are natural and coherent.

예시: Honestly, I'm not very good at memorizing things because I have some memory problems. I even consulted doctors who told me that this condition has been with me since childhood, and I need to take medication to help.

제안: Your answer is relevant but incomplete and lacks coherence. Use linking words to connect your ideas and complete your sentences. Provide specific examples to enrich your response.

예시: Yes, I have forgotten important things several times. For example, I once lost my keys and forgot to close the door, which made me feel really worried and unsafe.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Add linking words to improve coherence.

예시: Like everyone else, I need to remember several things daily. For instance, I must not forget to close the door, and I also need to remember to eat on time.

제안: Your answer is understandable but could be clearer and more natural. Use proper sentence structures and linking words. Be specific about your methods for remembering important things.

예시: Since I have memory problems, I use my phone to set reminders for important tasks. Additionally, I sometimes write notes on my hand to help me remember.

× Using things honestly, I'm not good at it because I have some problems with my memory.

✓ To be honest, I'm not good at it because I have some problems with my memory.

The phrase 'Using things honestly' is incorrect and unclear. The correct expression is 'To be honest,' which is used to express sincerity before a statement.

× I went to some doctors to talk about it and they said to me that it was with me from Paris and I need to take some pills.

✓ I went to some doctors to talk about it and they told me that it has been with me since Paris and I need to take some pills.

The phrase 'said to me' is better expressed as 'told me' for clarity. Also, 'it was with me from Paris' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'since' to indicate the starting point in time. 'Has been with me since Paris' indicates the problem started when in Paris.

× To be honest, I have forgotten some important things so many times.

✓ To be honest, I have forgotten some important things many times.

The phrase 'so many times' is informal and can be replaced with 'many times' for better clarity and correctness.

× I had some issues when I lost my keys or I forgot to close my door and that was really.

✓ I had some issues when I lost my keys or forgot to close my door, and that was really problematic.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and that was really.' It needs a proper adjective or phrase to complete the thought. Also, 'I forgot' after 'or' can omit the subject for smoother flow.

× As every person does, I need to remember some things in my daily life.

✓ Like everyone else, I need to remember some things in my daily life.

The phrase 'As every person does' is awkward; 'Like everyone else' is a more natural expression to convey the same meaning.

× For example, I need to not forgot the close the door.

✓ For example, I need not to forget to close the door.

'Forgot' is the past tense, but here the infinitive 'forget' is needed after 'need to not.' Also, 'the close the door' is incorrect; it should be 'to close the door.'

× Also I need to remember about eating.

✓ Also, I need to remember to eat.

The verb 'remember' is followed by the infinitive without 'about' when referring to actions to be done. 'Remember about eating' is incorrect.

× As I said, I have some troubles with my memory and if I want to remember some things I do, I do at least in my phone to remember them and additionally sometimes I try to write them on my hand.

✓ As I said, I have some troubles with my memory, and if I want to remember some things, I at least put them in my phone to remember them, and sometimes I also try to write them on my hand.

The original sentence is confusing and lacks proper structure. 'I do at least in my phone' is incorrect; it should be 'I at least put them in my phone.' Also, 'write them on my hand' is acceptable but 'on my hand' is more natural than 'on my hand.' Adding commas improves readability.