Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence, then provide specific examples without filler words like 'uh'. Avoid redundancy by not repeating similar ideas.

예시: I am not very good at memorising things. For example, I often forget items when I go shopping or important information I need to remember.

제안: Improve your grammar and sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Be specific about the reasons and consequences to enrich your answer.

예시: Yes, I forgot a dentist appointment two months ago because I was stressed with my studies and workload. As a result, I had to reschedule it for another day.

제안: Avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Use clear and specific vocabulary. Structure your answer with a topic sentence followed by examples, using linking words to improve coherence.

예시: In my daily life, I need to remember important tasks such as checking emails from organizations like IRCC and responding to them promptly.

제안: Your answer is good but can be improved by removing filler words and adding linking words to connect ideas. Also, try to be more specific about how these lists help you.

예시: I usually make lists on my mobile phone to remember important tasks, such as checking emails and mail. Additionally, I create shopping lists to ensure I don't forget anything when I go to the store.

× I don't have a sharp memory and I often forget some things, whether I go for shopping and, uh, whether there is any important information.

✓ I don't have a sharp memory and I often forget some things, whether I go shopping or whether there is any important information.

The phrase 'go for shopping' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'go shopping'. Also, 'some things' is correct but the conjunction 'and' should be 'or' to properly connect the alternatives. This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, I vividly remember two months ago I have an appointment with dentist but due to some pressure like studies or from or for workload I forgot my appointment and I had to book another one.

✓ Yes, I vividly remember that two months ago I had an appointment with the dentist but due to some pressure like studies or workload I forgot my appointment and I had to book another one.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with a past time reference 'two months ago'. The verb should be in past tense 'had' to match the time frame. Also, 'with dentist' needs the definite article 'the' before 'dentist'. The phrase 'from or for workload' is awkward; 'workload' alone suffices.

× There are some important information or tasks which I need to remember such as umm, asking for uh, important emails that I uh, received from uh, like IRCC or through mail moreover.

✓ There is some important information or tasks which I need to remember such as, umm, asking for, uh, important emails that I, uh, received from, uh, like IRCC or through mail, moreover.

'Information' is an uncountable noun and should be used with singular verb 'is' instead of 'are'. The sentence also has some awkward phrasing but the main grammatical issue is subject-verb agreement with uncountable noun.

× There are some important information or tasks which I need to remember such as umm, asking for uh, important emails that I uh, received from uh, like IRCC or through mail moreover.

✓ There is some important information or tasks which I need to remember such as, umm, asking for, uh, important emails that I, uh, received from, uh, like IRCC or by mail, moreover.

The phrase 'through mail' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'by mail' when referring to receiving emails or letters. This correction improves the prepositional usage.

× Honestly speaking, I sometimes make lists in my mobile phone of important things that I need to do, like uh, checking the emails or letterboxes and uh, whenever I go shopping, I make a list of things which I need to buy.

✓ Honestly speaking, I sometimes make lists on my mobile phone of important things that I need to do, like, uh, checking the emails or letterboxes, and, uh, whenever I go shopping, I make a list of things which I need to buy.

The correct preposition to use with 'make lists' and 'mobile phone' is 'on' rather than 'in'. This is because lists are made on the device's screen or app, not inside it. Also, adding commas improves clarity.