Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for natural flow.

예시: I used to be good at memorising things when I was younger because my mind was fresher. However, nowadays I find it harder due to being preoccupied with work and personal problems.

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you can improve coherence by using linking words and more precise vocabulary. Also, avoid minor errors like 'multiple stacks' which is unclear; consider 'multiple tasks' instead.

예시: Yes, I once missed a deadline for a work project because I was overwhelmed with multiple tasks and didn't manage my time effectively.

제안: Your answer is somewhat vague and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to be more specific and organise your ideas clearly with linking words. Also, use correct grammar and vocabulary for clarity.

예시: In my daily life, I need to remember important dates like special occasions and passwords for different accounts, as I often change them for security reasons.

제안: Your answer is confusing and lacks coherence. Focus on directly answering the question with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details using linking words. Avoid irrelevant information and improve grammar.

예시: I usually remember important things by using my phone's calendar and notes app. Additionally, my family reminds me sometimes, which helps me avoid forgetting important tasks.

× But right now always I'm boring about the preoccupation, like jobs or problems.

✓ But right now, I am always bored about the preoccupations, like jobs or problems.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and uses 'boring' instead of 'bored'. 'Always' should come before the verb 'am'. Also, 'boring' describes something that causes boredom, while 'bored' describes the feeling of the subject. 'Preoccupation' should be plural as it refers to multiple concerns.

× such as missing a deadline for a work project.

✓ such as missing a deadline for a work project.

No correction needed here as 'a deadline' and 'a work project' are correctly singular and appropriate in this context.

× This happened because I was overwhelmed with multiple stacks and didn't manage my time effectively.

✓ This happened because I was overwhelmed with multiple tasks and didn't manage my time effectively.

The word 'stacks' is incorrect in this context; the correct word is 'tasks' to refer to work items. 'Multiple' correctly quantifies 'tasks'.

× At the moment I need to remember everything, for example the special day and my password from different account because always change it.

✓ At the moment, I need to remember everything, for example, special days and my passwords from different accounts because I always change them.

The preposition 'from' is incorrectly used; 'of' or 'from different accounts' can be used but 'different accounts' should be plural. Also, 'special day' should be plural if referring to multiple days. The sentence also lacked subject 'I' before 'always change it' and 'password' and 'account' should be plural to match 'different'.

× To be honest, I remember the different things using calendars and notes from the phone and tell you my family told me before that won't happen.

✓ To be honest, I remember different things by using calendars and notes on my phone, and I can tell you my family told me before that it won't happen.

The phrase 'the different things' is awkward; 'different things' without 'the' is better. 'Using calendars and notes from the phone' is better expressed as 'by using calendars and notes on my phone'. The sentence structure is improved by adding 'I can' before 'tell you'. Also, 'that won't happen' needs a subject 'it'.